Endless Erosion

I'm so happy to have a future writer in my book club! I saw you posting an advertisement in the group and came to take a look out of curiosity. I read ten thousand words! Yes, the writing is smooth, the ideas are clear, and the plot structure is also very good. It is much better than when I first published the book. Has the potential to become a god... Of course, the premise is that you insist on writing to a certain number of words. Otherwise it is all empty talk. Let me just give you my opinion. Since I am too young and only have 10,000 words, I don't have much to say. But one thing you have to pay attention to is that because of the cosmic seed, the protagonist's body has been transformed and he can see light energy with the naked eye and can see bugs that ordinary people cannot see. To be honest, I personally feel that the upgrade is too fast. Because, at this point, it is basically an inhuman physique that the protagonists in many books only have in their middle to late stages. To put it simply, the starting point is too high, and the pretentious beginning is a bit too much. To use an analogy, your senses are no longer human, so when you look at a girl, you will no longer be appreciated by ordinary men... A girl who looks beautiful to us on the outside is actually a girl covered in bugs and parasites, with mites on her face and dense dandruff on her scalp. When her aunt comes, she can still smell a strange smell... And you will see with your own eyes that every time she breathes, she will suck those bugs and parasites into her body... Okay, it is indeed a bit disgusting, please forgive me, but you wrote it in great detail, including the red bone marrow and yellow bone marrow in the body, as well as the fact that you no longer need to breathe or sweat. . Therefore, these are natural things to write down, otherwise it would be a bit illogical! In mythology, the combination of gods and humans seems ridiculous to me, just like humans falling in love with a female monkey... So at this time, in the protagonist's perception, the earth is no longer his hometown at all, but an energy desert zone, a field... To put it simply, it is the same as another author whom I am very optimistic about. The starting point is too high and the pretentiousness can no longer be maintained...

The author must be a liberal arts student, and the power system collapsed from the beginning!

My first recommendation vote was actually for you

Very pretty, but too thin. Come on

It's a scam! ! ! It's a scam! ! !

Author Zhu has a lot of money and inspiration.

The book is very good, support it! Give it a thumbs up.

The main character is just beginning to be extraordinary now, and the writing is OK. I hope the author will continue to work hard and make the protagonist's actions more and more grand, worthy of the world view created by the author. Don't let people feel that the protagonist is too petty, otherwise it will become more and more awkward to match the world view of the novel.

It's a good book, the author's ideas are very good, and his explanation of time travelers makes sense.

Can't the external bubble space controlled by the protagonist move with him? Can it only be fixed in his initial neighborhood and then slowly expand? Can only the fragmented space generated by the seeds in his body move with him?

What is the nature of this so-called low-level historical world that the protagonist swallows? Is it a complete parallel universe similar to the universe where the earth is located, or is it a virtual space the size of a planet? Because later on, the protagonist also swallowed stars and the like.

The first glass of wine is for you. The so-called inappropriateness is that you like the breeze and drunkenness, but I only love the freedom of the strong wind. The second glass of wine is dedicated to you. In the years, you are very clean, lighter than water and clearer than wine. The third glass of wine is for you. At dusk, I steal your ribs to make wine. A hundred years later, you will be drunk with flesh and blood. The fourth glass of wine is given to you. The evening breeze blows the aroma of the wine from the pottery altar. I remember all your appearance.

It has only been updated for three days and then it ran away. Is this a root failure? Please say goodbye eunuch, come on and update!

I won't read or order until chapter 10

After reading Chapter 8, I said I saw a transvestite. .

Click to support, come on! 🤭

There are a lot of private goods, I hope the update can be powerful enough.

I'll feed myself until I die. Speechless

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This is the so-called fairness. No matter who it is, for such a person, a small decision will lead to a catastrophe. Therefore, gods have no emotions and six desires, so the way of heaven has no emotions at all. A young man who is oppressed by the real society will easily become crazy and greedy after gaining great power, and he will play mischievous tricks, which are a bit like children's tricks. The author lacks social experience.

Good book[fn=2_3]The author is not afraid of the river crab master[fn=2_7]

I'm surprised that the main world is a multiverse, so there must be many powerful people. The territory they rule has grown. There was no sign of the will of the universe causing trouble for them. And pig's feet haven't left the earth yet. The will of the earth, the will of the universe, etc. Come to cause trouble. What right does a pig's foot have to allow these great wills to cause trouble? As for the threats to the earth itself, the weapons in the hands of those big countries are enough to destroy the earth many times. Aren't they still alive and well? "Lucky" is going with what it is. Ten pig's feet can't compare to their threat. . . . So there must be no willpower threat to the earth now. Even if it does, it must be seriously injured and sealed for various reasons. Or simply be. 0 Killed" and so on. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . So I just want to ask why pig's feet are considered a threat. Finally, I came to the conclusion that pig's feet can build a house. Now because of the problem of river crabs, don't write down the specific process of conquest. Just write that the earth was conquered.

You should be able to watch it in 20 years 😁

Part of it is very embarrassing to watch, that is, those martial arts masters think they can dodge rifle bullets by relying on their martial arts skills... I remember that rifle bullets shoot at 2 to 3 times the speed of sound... If they could do it, it would be a piece of cake for them to deal with the ancient army, but this is impossible... Yuan Chengzhi, the strongest martial artist in The Deer and the Cauldron, is in "The Blue Blood Sword" "When I met those British people with muskets who felt that they couldn't hit them head-on, they could only use the table as a cover, and threw the table while they were reloading. Those muskets were definitely incomparable to modern firearms, and those martial arts masters were more than a little behind Yuan Chengzhi.... They didn't take modern firearms seriously...