The System of Kanmu World

This book uses time travel and ship girls as its themes. The material selection is good. From the current point of view, the ups and downs and coherence of the plot are good, which is already a good performance for a new author. However, there are some shortcomings; the most obvious is the use of environmental description. There are very few environmental descriptions in the article, but we all know that environmental description is very important. Environmental description can express the character's heart from the side, and can also exaggerate the atmosphere and enhance artistic appeal. Second, the main line is unclear, which will lose a lot of readers for the novel. Third, the characterization of the characters is too facial, and the description of personality and emotions is not adequate. But overall, I am very optimistic about the direction of this novel. The above is my personal opinion. If there is any similarity, I will be sorry.

Putting the memories into the main text is too out of touch with the plot, and starting from Chapter 39, it felt like it was too cute and too cutesy. The beginning is very nice! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

In the first chapter, "So, Lei Ye's nightmares filled the whole of Europe." Pay attention to "Europe", isn't Lei Ye in Africa?

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Kanniang, Dongfang, and Xingyue, the author, Ji, are you trying to get together with the cult?

As an author, I would like to make two suggestions: 1. Don't write too much about memories, otherwise readers will lose patience. 2. Don't create too many disposable characters

Is it my imagination or something... By the way, has the protagonist's name ever appeared? Not the name in that form, but the real name.

Lei Ye said - it doesn't matter if you have two big martial arts brothers, they will teach you how to be a good person! BY: There are two big Wu B's who were taught by Mr. Lei to be a good person.