Dimensional Travelers

Already rewarded, keep writing! The novel is pretty good, but it's too draggy. Alas, there is too much nonsense especially about Naruto. Just fight if I tell you to. Why make the protagonist think so much? If you can't come up with anything new in the side plot you write this time, I advise you to finish writing Naruto World as soon as possible.

Come on, your pistol is a forbidden word. I suggest you add some commas or pauses in the middle. Since there are so many words today, I've already rewarded you.

You must work hard, passerby[fn=2_9]

Fatten and then kill... Raise first.

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I haven't read such a beautiful book in a long time. Please keep updating the author and read it every day.

This is a very nice book. I hope it will be updated more often.

I will come and read it often. Please give your opinions on this book here. I will try my best to answer your questions and interact with you... By the way, if you see those comments that say this book is not good, please click in and see my answers. Although I admit that I, a newbie, do not write well in many places, but I will improve it, and I also have my own ideas in some places... But no matter what kind of book review it is, as long as it is not a criticism, I will welcome it! Even if you say this book is not good, it doesn't matter. I will accept everyone's criticism humbly, and if you understand it wrong, I will explain it to you seriously... I hope everyone can vote and collect this book... Because I take it so seriously. 😊

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Did the protagonist miss something very important? After defeating the evil god, Liu Bin came to the protagonist's space. The protagonist asked some questions, but he never asked about the killing point???? This is information that the protagonist needs to know first, but he didn't ask until the other party left...

Whether you stop and add some points while fighting zombies, you will be speechless. . It's still the effect of upgrading and adding some points later. All of a sudden, the atmosphere of online games was so strong that I couldn't bear to look directly at it. . Fortunately, I listened to this chapter from the novel. If I were to read it, there would be too many parts that I would not be able to read. .

I would like to advise the author, it is best to give up this kind of flawed character. I dare to say this when a newcomer writes "it will definitely not be successful". Although I am an author with poor writing skills, I have been a reader and author for 10 years. Today's readers are becoming more and more picky. The introduction of pig's feet in the first chapter of yours will at least make you lose more than half of the readers. If there is a slight problem in the subsequent plot, your book will basically be hopeless. Let me tell you why you can't succeed. The character of the Holy Mother is successful, because she is the founder of a sect, and her ruthlessness is just in line with the characteristics of the infinite stream. There is nothing to say about weak chickens. Compared with the infinite world, the real world is weak chickens, so weak chickens in the early stage are no problem. Needless to say, ordinary people who are otakus. This is a regular start, because there are no advantages for otakus and ordinary people, but there are also no shortcomings. There is no problem with the killer. After all, his profession is more suitable for the infinite world full of killings. As for the dog, are you sure he succeeded? As for why you have a problem, loneliness is not the problem. The problem is that the character you introduce is too detailed. In layman's terms, if you talk too much, you will be wrong. Your pig's feet are trapped by you. If there is a problem with the pig's feet, you will be scolded immediately. Moreover, your pig's feet are middle-grade, withdrawn, unresponsive, cowardly, unwilling to face changes, literary youth, and a so-called perfectionist. If you don't let this kind of pig's feet transform instantly, you will simply not be able to retain most readers. Think about it carefully, of course it doesn't matter if this is a self-interested article, but if you want to make money, even if you don't ask for much, if you want to earn money for cigarettes, water, and Internet expenses, you probably have to have perfect attendance, forget about the royalties, and it will be good to cover your electricity bills.

By the way, it's not that Madonna has a bad character, it's just that she gets tricked occasionally, and it's basically difficult to succeed, especially in a cannibalistic world like Infinite, where there is no right or wrong, only victory or defeat. . I still prefer the wise man type who kills decisively, or the brave lone wolf type. It would be difficult for the Holy Mother to survive without the wisdom of Colonel Chu. . Telling others your trump cards casually, whether it's strengthening or equipping you, feels a little mindless in doing things. . I still hope to establish clear character characteristics. So far, I can't see many characteristics except for some two-part characters. For example, Colonel Chu loves to eat apples, and there is also a charming catchphrase, and the childlike and giant Yingkong. . It's better if the character's characteristics are obvious, even quirks and the like. . Also, World Selection does not recommend adding too many areas. Many infinite streams are conflicting with various skills and settings, which makes it impossible to write eunuchs in the end. It is better to go with the technology stream and the mysterious side. . For example, Infinite Horror is basically a movie, while Ace Evolution is mainly based on arcade games, and both of them are classics among classics, especially Ace Evolution. .

This "Dimensional Traveler", when you look at the title of the book, you will think that it is a harem novel. After all, the title is too popular and has been written badly many times. In terms of character, after all, we have already written about the Virgin, so there is nothing we can do about it. But later on, when we write about being betrayed and turning dark, this is one aspect. But if the author insists on the Virgin, there is nothing we can do about it. Book friends around the world have said it, and I won't repeat it. Hope the author works hard. . . .

When I saw Naruto, I felt that the author was not very good at characterizing the character. He is obviously a stranger, and using skills to detect his own attributes at will is almost personal privacy, right? There was no reaction at all, and you still asked to stop like it was funny? In this case, you would generally not have a good impression, right? Although we are teammates, but... Well, I just don't feel weak and partial when I see the opposite sex... Otherwise, I will feel even more unloved.