Cherished and Spoiled

I couldn't stand it after reading a few chapters. It was late at night, not to mention ancient people, even modern people would not be unfamiliar with it. Temple stroll, but the heroine fucked. It was discovered that the robber was poisoned. As the kidnapped person, when the robber was about to let her go, he actually approached her... Saying that she had discovered the poison...

I want to say that the heroine deserves it, but after seeing this, I feel that the heroine is not dead...

Still can't reply to the existing message (Why?!?!) After seeing another relative's message, Ah Fan said he wanted Linglong to have more children. The younger one wanted to ask if Linglong could have twins, a twin and a twin. It's so cute! And twins, even in modern times, would still be considered a symbol of good fortune, let alone ancient times~ Besides, the King of Qin must be very loving with all kinds of nervousness and pregnancy reactions XD~ In addition, those groups of A, B, B, D, and W, why didn't King Qin take care of them? Linglong is a kind and good child! And I feel that King Qin will be more angry because of his distress (after all, you can't take care of your own faults, right? You can't take revenge on yourself, right?) The above is a continuation of the previous topic, here is a sincere suggestion I found that Fan has a habit of writing articles, which is to have no continuity and overly neglect the sense of coherence. In this way, readers will not feel bad when reading, but it will definitely be discounted. A ten-point plot can be deducted from six points by this point. The style of this article is a novel, and the fan is written in the mode of a small theater, which is not appropriate. Chapters are interrupted too abruptly, and there is no continuity between chapters. Often they jump through memories and flashbacks. When reading, readers will inevitably feel confused, and even feel regretful, disappointed, and thrown cold water on them. Many exciting plots should not have been skipped, but nine out of ten were mentioned in one sentence. Almost all of them were explained by one or two sentences after a lot of things were separated. After all, it is not a small four-frame comic or a unit drama. I suggest that Fan should consider this issue. The colors that enrich the "life" in a novel are [details], [plot], [background], [characters], [logic] The background structures a world, the characters inscribe a scene, the plot gives life to the characters, logic brings a sense of reality, and the details enrich the soul of the novel. It can be said that for a novel to make readers feel identified, it is not just about one element. It is recommended that Fan try to make the plot "coherent" and not use random paragraphs. The use of paragraphs should be used when a plot comes to an end. The mode of passing it over in one stroke is used in the aspects of "making soy sauce", "unimportant", and "passing water", and cannot develop into the norm. The plot is to serve the next plot, especially the protagonist's scene. If you mention it too often, it will make the novel boring. Although it still looks good at the moment, the chapters are fragmented and there is no sense of continuity, and the protagonist's scenes are interrupted (for a recent example, the scene where the Queen Mother asks the King of Qin about her marriage should not be cut, it is the protagonist's scene!). The plot of pure soy sauce gangsters coming out to make soy sauce can be ignored. It is best not to cut the protagonist's scenes into a habit, which will look like a blockage. The above are some suggestions, fans can try it~^^Come on~

The two seem to be getting sweeter and sweeter, and they are about to get married, but there is one thing that always sticks in my throat, and that is the three-day begonia poison that King Qin gave Linglong (the name of the poison is too beautiful, I can't bear to remember...). Afterwards, the Chi family couldn't find any medicinal ingredients! It can be imagined that King Qin and others deliberately wanted to cut off Linglong's vitality. If Chi's father hadn't completely wiped out human nature, Linglong would have been useless even if she knew how to detoxify... What's more, during the days of severe poisoning, I was in coma, had blisters all over my body (according to the article, they were simply ulcerated), and after detoxification, I was almost disfigured. Is it really okay to ignore this? (Infinite echoes) I was really choked to death by this plot~~ I beg the author to fill in this foreshadowing quickly, please~~~ (tears) Linglong knew Queen Qin sincerely. She poisoned her as soon as they met, and she was forced to swallow a poison when she was helping to detoxify it (it was not described later and she skipped it before she was cured?). Don't say that King Qin didn't see it. The former was administered by King Qin himself, while the latter is based on the text (I read it twice). The evil poison was swallowed in front of King Qin, and no one stopped him (why?) These grievances must be aggrieved~~~~~The princess's front nails scratched Linglong's chin, and her hind feet were disfigured. The poison behind her just made Linglong vomit blood and fall asleep. Although she may die, it will not only last for three days, nor will she be disfigured! She has been treated like this, and there is no reason for the King of Qin not to pursue it! Especially the King of Qin himself, he is not so heartless! Sorry, I accidentally got excited again (sweat... In addition, I also have a doubt. Wasn't Linglong poisoned with chronic poison? Although there are some vague mentions in the article that Linglong seemed to be wary of it (that Linglong was a sickly mouse), but was she poisoned? But it was not written clearly. Could this be a plot for the future King of Qin to deal with those best people? PS: If possible, why not worry about pinching your neck???\ Also, the King of Qin said that he wanted to wrong Linglong first. I was very worried after reading it. Is it possible that the concubines will marry together? Don't do it~~~~ Although you can't kill whoever you choose, you can stir up trouble! I hope that the marriage between Linglong and King Qin will be pure and perfect, no There are other obstacles when getting married (even if Linglong enters first and the concubine enters later~~~ It shouldn't be difficult for King Qin and his group to destroy it at the first sign, and it can also strengthen the "fact" that Linglong is the only one) I'm begging you for your support~~~The younger one has already made a high-end decision. Pinky was voted out before. Pinky will come to support and vote for recommendations~ Come on, author~~ It seems like the word count is okay, can I post a long review like this??? I'll leave it alone XD

It's pretentious, the heroine is self-righteous but does nothing. I would rather like the county boss than this. At least I can be brave enough to be myself.

I will leave comments because I really like this article. When I saw the pity, I couldn't help but want to suggest something. Fan doesn't need to apologize, because this is your article^^ and it is the world you created with your heart. Even readers have no right to criticize (except for emotional venting articles, which Fan may also encounter, basically just ignore it. Create to please yourself first and then entertain others) So~ the plot is best to follow the rules step by step, and don't cut too much. Only with a full plot can the characters have room to play, and only when the characters are in place can they be spiritual. Fan Zi must have discovered that most of the characters are too poor and empty. Even the male and female protagonists always feel a little inadequate in Fan Zi's heart, right? These problems seem complicated, but in fact they all arise from [Abridged]. This is even worse than the running account~ At least the running account is written down, although it is boring and rigid Because in many plot applications (such as the plot of the non-main character doing soy sauce, the plot that is not important enough to be good, the boiling water plot that is so cumbersome that if you don't shorten the part and write it in one stroke, you will fall asleep... And so on), if such a plot is not deleted, the whole article will be dead, because it is no different from a water-filled novel. Although the writing does not need to be exhaustive in every detail, it still needs to have all the internal organs and organs that should be written. Write what needs to be written. Naturally, the development of the plot will expand the space for the characters to play, and all aspects will become reasonable, substantial, and plump. In addition, fan, the plot needs to be reasonable, but there is no need to be cautious. If there is no recklessness, how can the power of King Qin be shown? There is no way for the characters to progress, right? I suggest you read the introduction↓ Prince Qin: ... Doting on your wife, doting on your wife, doting on your wife without principles, bottom line, and regardless of the consequences! The King of Qin is still a hundred and eighty thousand miles away from spoiling his wife! He can dig up people's bodies and whip their corpses, so killing them doesn't seem so unacceptable (hey... Otherwise, you can frame someone else's fault! It can be used to eliminate dissidents and kill people with a borrowed knife. It kills two birds with one stone. It's a must-have case! Even if King Qin is only good at directly killing this plan, he won't have a think tank around him, right? This is the time for the think tank to come into play! For example, if the Sun family brother inherits the bloodline, doesn't it mean that the men of their clan are so smart that they are almost demons? They are so talented that God wants all the men of their clan to die young! Proof of a good brain! How should a girl's road to happiness be defended? It seems not unfeasible to play a game of wits against the whole dynasty (haha~ In addition, there are those heavenly stems and earthly branches! There's always something good for you, right? Let's have a pair of villains come together to create a world of monsters (WOW~ No matter how much I think about it, I don't think I need to tie my hands to this point. There should be plans (in all aspects). So far, what I have seen is 0. There is no plan at all. You have killed the brain trust like this, fan XD A butterfly can bring about a hurricane-like effect. As long as you plan well, nothing is impossible! It's not like you want to rebel! Rebellion seems to be good. Anyway, no role in the royal family is pleasing to the eye. It's so sweet to have the harem alone~XD The above are just personal suggestions. You can do it at your own pace, but I will still yell when I can't stand it anymore. XDDD Come on, Fan~

I know every word. But I don't understand a bit

... I just read the beginning... The description of the girl entering the house is so thunderous that I don't want it. How did such an irregular maid get around until now? Hiss——

The heroine behind the scenes is just an idiot, no brains at all, pretentious, and the mother of the heroine in the extra story is even speechless. She loses her virginity when she has a fever. She simply has ideas when she is awake and is afraid of losing face. She takes the opportunity to have a fever and hooks up with a married woman. Otherwise, try changing someone else, not to mention someone with a fat head and big ears. An ordinary person would probably fight to the death. Resistance, I woke up but I still wanted to leave naively. Didn't I analyze the heroine's father very well later? At this time, I can't think clearly. He will definitely not let you go, and later I understand the situation of the massacre. What about my brain at the beginning? After training for a long time in a thousand-year-old family, I can't even eat when I come out. I don't have the brains to run to the military camp. I can only say that the author's design is really weird.

I can't understand what to write 😭😭