The Hongmeng Dao Diagram

Compared with ordinary authors, it is much better and suitable for wireless style. But there are still some loopholes and rhythm issues. Rhythm is not just a matter of the changes before and after the protagonist, but more about the details. From the weakness of the protagonist at the beginning to his strength later on, there is actually one detail that you did not handle well. Personally, I feel that if he confronts Zhao He after becoming a disciple of the sect, the protagonist will beat the shit out of Zhao He. It will be a refreshing contrast to the abuse in the first chapter, which will create a sense of rhythm, refreshment, and a sense of substitution. The second point of rhythm is the sense of hierarchy. The details of the protagonist's skills, combat skills, levels and other details can also enhance the rhythm. For example, if the enemy has one star, the one with combat skills will win against the one without combat skills. You are a one-star with a golden finger, but you have beaten the one-star with combat skills, and the level of strength of these three people has gone up. It also depicts the importance of having combat skills. If we deal with more details like this, the beginning of this article will be unreasonable. The third issue is abuse. The opening chapter is too abusive. Chinese men are all about saving face. Being slapped in the face and walking away cowardly like this obviously brings the book down a notch. Even if he has no cultivation level, it would still feel better to be abused, wouldn't it? If you don't have strength, you still have wit. In other words, don't let the other party slap his mouth. If a woman comes to help him stop Zhao He, at least the readers will not be disgusted~ These are my first personal impressions after reading ten chapters... Keep reading, overall it's pretty good. I don't know what others think.