A Wizard? I'm a Mechanic!

I originally came here for the mechanic, but after reading ten chapters, I found that the mechanic's content currently doesn't account for much, and the plot is weird. First, the city-state has not been defeated yet. Why did it come out n years early? Has the protagonist grown faster at home these n years? It feels like it's just to give the protagonist a background and a good foundation in the early stage, and then I don't want the protagonist to grow too fast, so I set up this kind of plot, but whether it was written well or not, there were too many logic bugs. Second, I met my employer's daughter when I took the mission. Is this daughter mentally retarded? Can't such a large adventurer organization detect its level? Do you need to question it? Normally speaking, when you write a plot like a mechanic, you have to write about how the protagonist makes things in the first few chapters. After all, this is your label. You have to leave the mechanics in mind, and you have to go back a little bit if there are adventure missions. This article has written ten chapters, including the protagonist Goldfinger. The production is all covered in one stroke, and the proportion of background introduction is higher than that of mechanics.

I will add to what the old man said above. I read a little more and read Chapter 20. The other problem is that the first commission your protagonist does is the same as the previous story. First, the secret line comes out after Chapter 20, and it feels like the protagonist is about to go back. Second, I thought that the map will be changed directly to do things in another place, but they are so separated. I don't care how many years the protagonist returns home, but you can't tell me that the protagonist who has so many scenes as a kid and still gives things away turns out to be just a disposable tool. Then you have to know whether you are selling a story or a setting. Both the book title and the introduction are obviously settings. After reading more than 20 chapters, there is so little content about mechanics. I can understand that the author wants to reflect the role of mechanics from the results, because the subsequent part of making things is also omitted, but the sniper The shooting gun appearance actually feels good, I can accept it, and I can see that the author wants to sell the story more, but you have to think about why people click on your book. I can't say it's a lie, but it feels a bit strange, you know. If you don't know how to write about mechanical production, go to Souchou. You can tell that you are really a newbie, but actually the idea is not bad.

I feel that those who have read The Super Mechanic can accept the density of the mechanic content in the previous book. Anyway, it was quite interesting when I was making a first-order magic guidance device in the first chapter. It turned out that I just installed it in order to blow people up. After finishing it, it was already ten chapters later. The story is very good. The male and female protagonists get to know each other quite abruptly, but I like the subsequent interaction very much. It's great for a newcomer to write like this. It's true that I can see that I have a lot of ideas. It's best to stick to finishing it. I'm looking forward to it! Finally, author, this is the first book I have received more than 200 coins in since I started investing. Come on.

At the beginning of The Riddler, the fourth son of an earl who launched an industrial revolution in his city-state, no one told him the cause and consequences. Even if it was to preserve the fire, he would not only leave 500 gold coins, and then no one around him would follow him, right?

The story has just begun. The author can learn from The Super Mechanic. The rhythm system of this book is really good. I hope the author can write something of his own.

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