Zhao Ye

I think this prologue is very well written. Maybe this way of writing is not good in online articles, but is it surprising that this type of writing is good in online articles? The author must first make sure that he is happy writing, otherwise if he wants to make money, he should change the track. Even Warhammer, Medieval Warhammer is far inferior to 40k

🙂Okay, let's stop talking nonsense. My opinion may not be right. A, I won't fold it since not many people will read it. I talked about it in the order of writing "1" I talked about this prologue issue in the post forum before. I also like to write prologues, but in fact everyone will just read it at a loss, because even if there is valid information, readers cannot extract it. Just throw it away "2" I re-watched it, and your beginning is very problematic. There is no point in spending words and ink describing the protagonist Manbaout, everyone knows that you want to travel through time. So what should you write? *For example, what kind of person is the protagonist. If your protagonist is a great and upright person, you can write that the protagonist died because of saving others and traveled through time. If you want to write a story where the protagonist knows about the Middle Ages, you can write about the protagonist quarreling with Chuanzi in the Total War bar and traveling through time. *That is to say, this description allows readers to have a basic impression of the protagonist. Does he understand the world after time travel? What are his values ​​roughly like? This can not only enhance readers' sense of immersion, but also screen readers. Screening readers is a must. You don't want to write serious literature and then have the comment section filled with memes. *On the contrary, the details of the crash are the least important *This also leads to the next topic, you did not tell the reader what kind of person the protagonist is. "3" I see now that the protagonist seems to be quite adaptable at the beginning, but after finding that he has no choice, he enters combat mode. What is your psychological description during this period, buddy 😅 * If I suddenly traveled to the scene of a Tzeentch believer's practice, I would definitely have a lot of inner drama. *You also wrote that the protagonist has no amnesia, so you would rather extend the time a little longer and tell the readers who the protagonist is and what his current situation is. This is very important 4Your protagonist does not have a complete plan. *This question is inherited from 3. After remembering and analyzing the current situation, the protagonist should make a basic judgment on the current situation and create a small stage plan *For example, to escape from the Mongolian people, the protagonist should have a plan, where is this place, where are the reinforcements, how to find the reinforcements, whether to kill the people with Wushuang and go back by yourself, or to run back secretly. Will this plan need to be changed after seeing the captured people? Finally, let's talk about action description. For example, if the protagonist kills a puppy, you don't need to write about what the protagonist's subordinate abc is doing. Focus on the protagonist and write about what the protagonist is doing. It's enough for abc to appear from time to time. * Let me give you an example: the protagonist cleverly uses the building to deal with the dog, (omit 200 words) and then knocks down a wall to temporarily trap the dog. At this time, abc stepped forward and poked the dog with a spear. That's fine. You don't need to write that ABC is on standby while the protagonist is dealing with the dog. It will only slow down the pace