Ladies, Do I Have to Be a Contract Beast Too?

I don't feel like I'm the master. I just feel that the protagonist is very frustrated. Living in Monkey Mountain, you have to pay for various food, laundry and other services. Maybe it will be fun for the protagonist to turn around later, but I can't see the end.

The author's writing is very fluent. The subject matter is also quite innovative. But looking at the current direction, it feels like it's going in the same direction as other strategies and traversing the game world. The highlight of the introduction, the villainous daughter becoming a maid, was not shown and was left behind. Even if this highlight is not realized, chapters 8 to 14 are still very frustrating. There are a lot of people who are frustrated by the content of Chapter 6 or so and want to quit. In Chapter 14, the protagonist takes the initiative for the first time in the face of the annoying heroine, but there is no more pen and ink written about how she is frustrated by the protagonist. It feels like she has been frustrated for so long, and finally feels relieved, but it is gone in 3 seconds. Moreover, as the first female protagonist in a light novel, the contrast between her being deflated is also a highlight in itself. I don't understand why it is described briefly. Then there is this contract. The design of your contract is really difficult. It's about taking risks to earn a wife. But this wife's current personality is not lovable at all. The punishment is still direct erasure. This type of setting is no different from the system many years ago that forced the completion of tasks and would lead to death if the task was not completed. Novels in this setting type are almost extinct. Why do you think they are extinct? I'm curious if the editor didn't tell you about possible problems when he saw this setting? As for this contract, the contract requires that the heroine maintain her status unchanged, and what she gets is the other party's body, soul, magic power, etc. If you could really complete it, she would have fallen in love with you long ago based on her settings. Then there is no difference between the body, soul, magic and other rewards given by this contract. With this type of forced setting, you can't make the feeling of force disappear. Once it disappears, the feeling of pleasure will be gone. And you have given this kind of difficult and frustrating content, and the final result is that there is no special sense of satisfaction that is forced to set, only the experience of frustrating and demanding. Then there is the setting of the heroine. This annoying heroine fits your setting. But this kind of setting can easily make people get bored and run away. You have to make the heroine annoying the audience while intermittently inserting content that makes her feel deflated. Make readers feel better. You were like this for 6 chapters, but the only time you took advantage of her was not to write more.

Conquering women can only satisfy the low desire for reproduction. Real men should conquer other men! ! !

Investigation report: "Number" -757 Investigation target: "Transform into an all-female second game and be the master" - the male protagonist - [Yu Xiu] Investigation result: [Physical body travel (call from another world)] Judgment basis: Abnormal characteristics: A time-travel investigator, as the name suggests, is a profession that investigates and records the time-travel situations of time-travelers. It aims to let observers (that is, readers) in all worlds know in advance the time-travel situations of time-travelers in this world, and volunteers to provide observers with quick time-travel information query services If there are any fallacies, I hope to correct them ——All Souls Feast Zhenjun Stay on September 5, 2026

It took more than 20 days before I saw the reply in the author's reply. There is a problem with the display of replies from this starting point. Replies from several authors are delayed for a long time before they are displayed. I don't want to read the previous major changes. Start where you left off with the entrance exam to the academy. In order to make Qianjin less annoying, the author made a lot of changes to her. She is indeed not as annoying as before. However, the transition from disgust to love that he originally envisioned was lost. If this is difficult to grasp, then don't write it. Even if it is written by a great author, it is still easy to get into trouble. When I read the book at about 10 chapters, there was no main plot. I thought it was because of the short length, but it turns out it's 60 and it's not there yet. The protagonist has no big goals at all, and the small goals of joining the academy are gone because of the setting and handling of the gods (I will explain it later). The purpose of this volume is also unclear. It felt like I was writing wherever I thought, because the connection between some plots was not smooth. You don't have an outline, do you? When the protagonist attends the family banquet, he can tell all kinds of things about his seven aunts and eight aunts. There is no foreshadowing here, only that he knows that he will attend the banquet. The switching of perspectives in the academy plot is also a bit messy and unclear. Then there is the plot of the academy. My original suggestion was to add a new female character to the academy to raise readers' expectations and offset the initial dislike of the rich heroine. While my suggestion would be to add a new female character quickly, your approach is a bit stiff. Except for the part where this romantic girl reveals the protagonist's "precognition" ability, the previous encounter plot is really not very well written. And it may be because of different ideas. I imagine that this girl must have relatively high positive feedback, so as to build up anticipation. But I don't know how many suggestions you adopted. The writing of this romantic girl is unsatisfactory and the portrayal is very flat. Not even as good as Qianjin after the subsequent transformation. In addition, in terms of the distribution of character plots, in Chapter 60, my suggestion of the maid sister having both master and servant was probably not adopted, but the plot of the maid was improved. There are too many plots for Qianjin. Even if you include the maid, there are only three female characters. Qianjin takes up too much. As a harem novel, especially one coming from a second-game background, the portrayal of your heroine cannot be too biased. Then there is the college plot I mentioned. This plot was originally a place to add a new female character to build anticipation, improve her strength, and open a new mini-map. In order to get closer to Qian Jin, you asked the male protagonist to attend classes with Qian Jin. I think there's something wrong with this approach. Because the connection between life after joining the academy and Feng Nu was originally the point of expectation, and then you stepped in and directly added an inexplicable plot to cancel the test results. My rating is awesome. There wasn't even any foreshadowing for the cancellation, it felt like I just wrote whatever came to my mind. The arrangement and design that came to my mind today was like this, so I just wrote it. The design utilization rate of this plot is also low. Even if you want to involve the male protagonist, let him attend useless lessons. Can't the plot come later? It's just that the Japanese girl relied on the male protagonist's intelligence to form a team and pass the assessment to enter the academy, which provided a reasonable reason for their acquaintance. Because of the investigation into my sister's affairs, I developed a good impression of her in the academy. And you can also add learning knowledge to improve your strength. After studying for a period of time, due to Qianjin's manipulations, I had to give up my classes to study with him and get involved in the relationship between the male protagonist and the female protagonist Qianjin. After Feng Nu learned about it, she was dissatisfied with the daughter and started a conflict between the two women (the nature of the conflict is completely editable). As the daughter's summoned beast, the protagonist is born to have the advantage of the daughter, and it can also guarantee your daughter's preference. If the male protagonist tries to attract Qian Jin's favor, even Shura Chang will definitely talk to Qian Jin (to make amends for Qian Jin's bad feelings towards him against his will, this can make Qian Jin "accidentally" overhear the favor, and it can also make other female characters think that the male protagonist is really easy to favor). Usually, at this time, the number of words has already reached the shelves, so I just drop the VIP chapter in the Shura Field and get a lot of popcorn.

If you put aside your strange eyes, the first three chapters of this book will definitely make you break the tension successfully. As for the plot, there will be no big problem. I just don't know whether the author is writing for fun or following the old-fashioned Western fantasy novel.

... Looking at the title of the book, even if it's not the invincible or sage-like style, it should be the funny or abstract style. How come this is a waste stream?

At the moment, I feel it's pretty good, and the writing is relatively smooth. However, the plot is a little less explosive and exciting, mainly because there is no main line, and the protagonist does not have a goal Logically speaking, conquering the heroine is a good main line, but on the one hand, the protagonist does not like the heroine, and at the same time, the conquest value/training value is a bit abstract for the heroine's mood, and it is not intuitive to go up and down, and there is no reward At the beginning, I saw that the heroine's conquest value had become -30, and I got the reward. I was also looking forward to what would happen if it became a positive number in the future. However, in the next paragraph, it changed back to -90, which greatly affected the fun. It is recommended to separate it. One is the training value (can be exchanged for rewards to control the heroine), and the other is the mood value (shows the status of the heroine) Finally, I still hope that the author will explain a main line as soon as possible. As the protagonist, as the leader of the strategy, he should have a clear direction of strategy when he travels into the game, instead of passively solving troubles.

All the poisonous points are gone, readers are welcome to taste it. If you have any questions, please feel free to point them out.

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