Spiritual Resurrection: I Can Communicate Five Thousand Years Later

Brother, I came from the video. Delete the adjectives in front of the dialogue. There is no need to add adjectives. Add the characters' actions and add less adjectives to the actions. I would rather "he left" than "he left slowly."

It is not clear about this special explanation and the explanation of this world view. In your first chapter, it seems that he died in a fierce battle or something? At the beginning, there is no explanation of the surrounding environment or the villain, and a few harsh words to give some worldview information. Later, I wrote a lot about daily life in my childhood and rumors about the doomsday. Then it's back to everyday life. I don't see the feedback that appeals to me. The display of the main ability (Link 5000) is also lagging behind, and the sense of introduction is very scarce. So how to change it? Simply explain the battle scene in the previous life, the villain may sigh a few words, showing the contradiction between the basic and the protagonist, and the protagonist will die and say that he wants to change. The perspective changes to the main character, who is a primary school student. After hearing the doomsday prophecy, he finds a bunch of new information in his homework book or any carrier, and finds that he wants to exchange or communicate. Then talk about the main character's condition, tell a good friend about it the next day, and then go into daily life about this incident. Wouldn't it be much better? The main purpose (to explore the handwriting seeking exchange on this sudden appearance of the carrier), daily reactions of friends, what wishes are made, showing the character of the protagonist, and continuing to decipher, explore, exchange, and communicate. Then maybe the first volume will talk about this doomsday prophecy and the birth of special warriors. (I have only read less than two chapters, so I have some superficial opinions) The writing is okay, but it requires conscious explanations and psychological activities. I don't see how the narration explains the main point, and I don't see any information or settings. This can be written, but it doesn't matter, but it's okay to highlight the main events and then shape the characters around puzzles and events. My writing skills are not good, I can see some writing skills, but I didn't fall into the place where I should explain. There may be some lack of information. Some insights.

When I woke up from the dream, I was surrounded by people from famous families, gold, jade and flowers... They were all congratulating me and congratulating me on my success.

In the past, there was a proud young man in a high pavilion, holding a pen to admire the moon and the beautiful sun. The eyebrows are downturned and the face is envious of the horse's hooves. I hate the flowers and the wind and have no heart. I have a thousand words in my heart, but I have nothing to say after looking at it.

The beginning of the first chapter is a parody of One Hundred Years of Solitude. I actually didn't intend to write it, but I'm afraid that some people won't read it and think it's a story that abuses the protagonist from beginning to end. It is clearly said that the protagonist will be very strong in the future, but writing it to be too invincible and without a sense of crisis is equivalent to the beginning of the book. There is no need to read the book, and there is no suspense. Therefore, the protagonist is very strong but also regretfully watching the destruction of civilization. As mentioned later, if we had to do it all over again, and with the help of people from the future, would we not have embarked on this path of destruction? These are the first few sentences. The news reports about the end of the world in 2012 are the real beginning of this book. Writing about daily life is to exaggerate the calmness of the approaching storm, and to let readers know what people's lives were like before the story officially begins. This contrasts with the badness of the subsequent plot.

The warriors initially promoted that martial arts would change the world and help mortals get rid of the pain of hunger. At the same time, warriors used the media to promote that the food they provided contained various substances and could also help ordinary people and low-level warriors avoid various diseases. Ordinary people believed it, so they acquiesced and helped the warriors promote this spiritual material meal. Later, the warriors promoted that spiritual substances are very precious, and every citizen should make further contributions, and then promoted the movement of all people into factories to make elixirs. This movement affected many people. When the number of people eating spiritual food reached a certain proportion, the warrior forces directly promoted the abolition of other meals on the pretext that the majority was greater than the minority, and all people must eat spiritual food. At this point, we have officially monopolized everyone's right to eat.