The Realm of Magic Beads

Please forgive me for being a novice writer writing a book for the first time. Please point out if there are any problems with the plot or illogical logic. Thank you all. This book has a slower pace and is a happy and sweet group portrait. Everything on this planet lives by magic. The creatures on the earth use magic to create magic beads and magic patterns to fight and live. They also create a fantasy continent with prosperous civilization, epics and culture. However, the old track shrouded in fog has also been changed by the arrival of foreign gangs.