Abnormal Apocalypse: My Shelter Has Unlimited Upgrades

After reading a few chapters, it felt like watching a strange game anchor open a game you don't know and start playing it on his own. He doesn't explain it, so you can only know that he is playing the game. You can't see his operations, and you don't know why he operates them.

After reading the comment section, several comments were quite appropriate, especially the analogy of the game anchor which surprised me. This review will talk about why this is the case. I think there are two main reasons, logic and characterization: The protagonist's reasoning chain is imperfect. First of all, the worldview background is not introduced. I was confused at the beginning. The fact that the disaster bureau has an alarm means that this is not the first time an abnormality has occurred. After reading it, this is indeed the case, but why is it said to be the end of the world? So when the protagonist decides to stay later, the reader has no idea under what circumstances he made such a seemingly unwise decision, which gives people a sense of "the protagonist knows that staying will give him a golden finger". Including dealing with the living steel later, I saw it through at a glance, and then named it... It was like a multi-game boss speed run, and the reasoning process was completely invisible. It is necessary to distinguish the differences between the author's perspective, the reader's perspective, and the character's perspective. Then there is character creation. Looking at the actions of the protagonist later, combined with the overall world view setting, the image should be serious, but the dialogue and self-talk in the front that refuse to escape are also humorous, giving people a sense of fragmentation. It's not that you can't make jokes with this type of character, but don't say things that you think are humorous at inappropriate times. When you should obviously create an atmosphere, make some jokes that you don't want to laugh at all after watching. The behavior of the character must be purposeful. You need to think about whether it is necessary to add this behavior, and whether it will be inconsistent with the character. What is the purpose of the character saying this? Are you writing this sentence to enhance the depth of the character, or to show another side of the character? It's not about whether it's time to be humorous here.

The dialogue is like human-computer interaction, there is no action, expression, etc., Just like going through the plot, just talking and talking. When there is no dialogue, there is a supporting actor who talks like a human being, while the protagonist is purely pretending to be human.

I'm sorry to leave you with this paragraph, but this book may have to stop here. I have talked a lot with the editor in the past few days, and I have also gone back and read the previous content, and even reset some chapters under the guidance of my book friends. But now that I've written it, it has indeed revealed that I have a lot of problems, some of which are related to basic skills, and some of which are related to the outline and settings. I didn't think clearly about it at the beginning, but as I continued to write, I slowly realized that it can't be solved by simple modifications. The performance of this book is indeed not very good. It has made a total of 50 cents so far, and I really can't insist on putting it on the shelves. The most sorry thing is the 158 readers who have chased me all the way here, and the more than 900 book friends who have collected it. There are people who follow up on updates every day, and there are many people who give me monthly votes and recommendation votes. There are also brothers who carefully write long comments to tell me carefully where there is a problem. There are people who are willing to read more than 20 chapters, and even get a monthly pass. For me, who is writing a long novel seriously for the first time, I am actually very lucky. Of course it's okay to continue writing, but now I feel that doing so is more of a drain on your patience and a drain on myself. Rather than procrastinating a book that already has many problems, it is better to stop, take a good rest, and start again after resting. I'm sorry for wasting your monthly votes and expectations. Don't vote from now on. I may take a break and rethink how I should write a novel. If I open a new book in the future, I hope to at least come up with something that is more mature and more worthy of your expectations than now. I'm sorry that I couldn't finish the story of Lu Heng and North Station this time, and I'm also sorry for the heroine who hasn't had time to appear yet (sad) I'm sorry for you wow wow wow Thank you to everyone who has read this. If we are destined in the future, see you in the new book, meow. I use my arrows to cast your soul, thank you all. Also, you are welcome to chat in the group. I can tell you the story of North Station and Lu Heng, those "memories" that I have not yet had time to write but that I am already thinking about.

The AI ​​writing is a mess.

Automatically replace living steel into gray wind...

It's much better than the initial review, and the story is also very interesting. Come on. It is not easy to find a book to read. I will vote twice as much at the end of the month

Can anyone survive the city falling upwards? All the houses, land, and stones fell into space. No one could survive. There was no use hiding in caves because mountains could not protect themselves.

You may not be able to understand the first few chapters, but it gets smoother and readable later on, and the subject matter is new It's pretty good, and you can read it.

I don't know how to evaluate it. There are fundamental loopholes in the world structure. The gravity is reversed, the air is gone, and there is no moisture...