Douluo: from the Time Qian Renxue Fell in Love with Me, He Became a God

The pace is too slow, there is no explosive point in the first 6,000 words (it cannot catch the readers' attention), pure water is daily, and even the martial arts soul has not been awakened by the end of 6,000 words. When writing fan fiction, you should start writing directly from Awakening System/Goldfinger. This kind of greeting is the way to write daily fan fiction. And even if it is a daily fan fiction, you have to write a breaking point in the first three chapters so that readers can feel the protagonist's upgrade route. There is a mismatch between the title of the book and the text. Qian Renxue does not appear at all in the first three chapters, and the protagonist does not become a god. This "meme" appears too frequently. It needs to be controlled. There are still some differences in the spoken language between the protagonist and the original character. There is no problem with the writing and layout. It is enough. To put it in human terms: The plot and pacing are lagging and must be changed. Then the editor usually reads the first 6,000 words, so the first three chapters are the most important. Finally, if you don't want to listen to suggestions, or you just write for fun, just pretend you didn't see it, continue writing hard, and maintain your creative enthusiasm.

The cover is so cute (ɔˆ ³(ˆ⌣ˆc), I am also a Douluo fan writer.

The author writes this every day, is he afraid that I won't have money to read 🔨

I don't know where there is something wrong with the introduction, so I couldn't pass it. In the end, I had no chance to submit and had to wait seven days 😭. I'll put the latest introduction below. …………………… Wang Chuan traveled through the Douluo Continent. He has had a crystal blue cube in his mind since he was born. With such a big tumor, is his brain still normal? Wang Chuan was afraid that it would suddenly explode one day, until the day he was five years old, it unfolded and turned into a crystal blue panel: "Congratulations on successfully activating the krypton favorability system to become a god!" After Wang Chuan was happy, he discovered that this was a three-no product. He seriously suspected that it was a product sent by Pin Xixi! Wang Chuan could only explore on his own. After a year of frantically brushing Old Jack's favorability points, he found that it was of no use. However, frantically brushing Tang San's favorability points often prompted +1 favorability! "The first favorability point will be decided by you, my mistress!" ---------------- At the age of six, Wang Chuan awakened the martial soul Lijian Flying Shield and Kung Fu Panda, and was born with full soul power of level ten. Officially becoming a soul master who could earn favorability points, he originally wanted to follow Tang San and increase his favorability points towards the Tang God King to increase the probability of becoming a god. However, I did not expect that Tang Shenwang had fallen into the cobweb of conspiracy. A Yin was surrounded by Wuhun Palace, Yu Xiaogang appeared in the grass, Xiao Wu came to Tang San... There was a shadow of a person in all of them. Wang Chuan has not yet figured out what is going on for his younger brother Tang San, whose favorability has improved. Then he met Qian Renxue, and she directly gave him +5 favorability. Isn't Qian Renxue's favorability so easy to brush up? It seems that Qian Renxue is the key to his becoming a god. According to the principle of opposite sex attraction, he can only swipe Qian Renxue and make Qian Renxue fall in love with him! This book is also known as: "Douluo: Becoming a God from Krypton Favorability", "Douluo: My Martial Spirit is Too Serious", "Douluo: My Martial Spirit is a Lijian Flying Shield", "Douluo: My Martial Spirit is an Iron-Eating Beast"