Douluo: in This World Where Wuhun Palace Is Still Alive

It's too general and doesn't have much real content. After a brief look at nearly 30 chapters, I said one thing – the protagonist is a down-and-out descendant of Wuhun Temple. This kind of thing can be covered in a few sentences. You are writing a fanfic. The correct way is to briefly introduce the identity and background of the protagonist. People or things in the original text should appear as early as possible to give readers a sense of familiarity.

I feel that the writing is okay, but the rhythm is not in line with the fast pace of today's online articles. Most online articles have already completed the introduction of the opening and started the daily plot in one or two chapters. However, I have read five or six chapters of this book, and it is still foreshadowing the protagonist's suffering and hatred. Is it paving the way for the protagonist's ideal of savior? You will lose readers in Chapter 30 of such a hate incident! Hey! I was attracted by the introduction "The descendant of Wuhun Temple after 10,000 years" and "the protagonist's quiet speech not in vain", but in the first six chapters of the novel, only the first chapter contains the content of Wuhun Temple, which is what makes me feel good. The sacrifice of Sister Lin in the second chapter (I think it is similar to Tianmeng Ice Silkworm) is a new and exciting point, and the rest of the hatred experience is a little bit more fun. No more, and there is no impressive sense of swordsmanship, so it feels bland (for such a bland author, why don't you write a road novel). The beginning of this kind of book is not straightforward. Apart from road stories, there are only martial arts stories. There is even a similar beginning where the whole family is slaughtered, and even the whole family is slaughtered because of their martial arts skills (this sense of déjà vu is why some people say it is like a martial arts trick).

Cuckoo Gaga, I am Lai Kangkang who is also the author of Dou Er 🤓

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