A Different World of Books

I came in when I saw the title of the book and the introduction was interesting, but I wonder if it's because I haven't read enough of the new author. How could the author write like this? Complaining from the reader's perspective: 1. There is no need to write poetry at all. Readers who add poetry will just run away if they can't understand it, not to mention that the poem seems to have no meaning. 2. The third paragraph and the fourth paragraph are too abrupt. Why did it suddenly happen the next day? Shouldn't the normal development be what he is thinking about at this time? The fourth and fifth paragraphs are also outrageous. Why do they suddenly cut to dialogue? What is the relationship between the fifth paragraph and the fourth paragraph? 3. Why is there an extra bird in my house? What are these? It is cut casually from first person to third person. If you really want to write it, at least it should be divided into paragraphs, right? (Below, // is used to represent paragraphs) "Looking around. // Huh? Why is there a bird at home? // Thinking like this, he walked over..." The following paragraph "I am a human being" has a similar problem. 4. This is not a dream,? ? What do you mean, who asked you if this was a dream? 5. Why are there so many characters? There are so many chapters in the first chapter, which reader can remember it? Focusing on two or three characters is already the upper limit. 6. After a casual glance, it seems that the problem of random transitions has always been serious. Why is there a scene cut in the first chapter? Shouldn't the first chapter focus on one person and one scene, or at least one person and one continuous scene? I hope the new authors will continue their efforts. I'm not an old reader, but starting like this, if the author is not enjoying himself and wants to make money, he will either completely rewrite the beginning or open another book. Of course, if you don't want to make money, then respect the blessing.