I Have a Dragon Clone

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In fact, the beginning of the story does not have to be fast-paced. It can also be a steady development of the plot, clearly explaining the source of the story and the golden finger, and then giving readers enough future expectations. Because the most important thing about the first article is the sense of immersion and smoothness. Looking at the current first chapter alone, the rhythm is more chaotic than fast, because the beginning lacks a core event (Goldfinger awakens, life and death crisis, etc.), And it basically just talks about the settings scatteredly, without a sense of flow. Although there is an ice dragon attack at the end, there is basically no foreshadowing before the attack, which cannot bring out the tension and the sense of substitution is not good. I thought about the general content of the first chapter: In the beginning, the protagonist returns from hunting and is processing the body of an animal. Then when processing the body, he uses a small talent obtained from the snake body to tell the reader that the protagonist has a golden finger to build up a sense of anticipation. Then the protagonist talks with his mother, bringing out the protagonist's own information and family background, and establishing the basic relationship between the protagonist and his mother. At the same time, he pointed out the rumors heard by his mother that there seemed to be a village in the kingdom that was frozen. It might be some kind of disaster, so the villagers were preparing to move to the city for refuge, which would pave the way for the subsequent plot development. Then in the middle and later part of the plot, the protagonist boarded the snake ship, and used the opportunity of swallowing a certain creature to unfold the golden finger in detail. Before getting off the ship, he discovered signs of the existence of a rare monster, and he will swallow it next time he gets on the ship. Then at the end of the plot, the ice dragon attacks. If you write it this way, there is a crisis at the beginning. Goldfinger has made it clear. As for the martial arts, psychic abilities, talents and other settings, you can leave them for later when the mixed-race brother comes, so that there will be no congestion at the beginning.

I feel that the main problem is that the first three chapters are too big🤔 There is actually no need to write the hunting scene before the first chapter (it is a taboo to start with an action scene). Instead, you can directly write about the protagonist's return from hunting and the interaction with the main family members (such as the mother), so that the death of the family at the end of the first chapter and the second chapter can also evoke some emotions. You can even directly delete most of the protagonist's other brothers, leaving only the protagonist, mother and mixed-race brother. Anyway, the other brothers are just background boards. In this way, in the first half of the first chapter, the protagonist's character and relationship with the two family members can be written (the mother's attitude towards the protagonist can be a bit more complicated, because she does not like the protagonist's qualifications, but she still loves him and cares about him). Then the second half directly writes about the protagonist's real golden finger, the snake incarnation. It starts with the protagonist swallowing a little demon to gain attributes and the like, explains clearly the purpose of the golden finger, and then ends with the discovery of the dragon egg. It predicts that the protagonist will find a way to get a big treasure the next time he boards the snake (what a weird abbreviation🧐). At the end of the first chapter, the ice dragon attacks. Then in the first half of the second chapter, the protagonist tries to save his mother but fails, and finally escapes on his own. In the second half, the mixed-race old man goes home and behaves mischievously, looking down on the protagonist. The protagonist does not need to respond, but he must maintain an attitude of neither being humble nor being arrogant. After all, he has a golden finger, so he doesn't want it. Now just squeeze out the value of it. After that, in the third chapter, the protagonist follows his brother. At this time, you can write that he slept on the carriage, boarded the snake and stole the dragon egg, and gained more attributes in his body. It will be a great relief to relieve the frustration of the first two chapters. In this way, the rhythm is clear. The protagonist has a small dilemma at the beginning, and then the golden finger appears. The small dilemma is solved immediately, and then the big dilemma is introduced. The plot should unfold more smoothly than it is now. (Amon's suggestion, for reference only🧐)