Just Became a Martial Arts Practitioner, the System Is the Icing on the Cake

Seeing the threat of kidnapping, he immediately became angry. It was too smart. Local gangsters are being threatened, where are your resources and connections? Your college has been in the local area for decades, and you have disciples all over the place, black, gray, and white, all of whom are your classmates. Even the local teaching schools are all local gangsters. You are stupid too, why do you threaten your bright future by trying to find out the situation? There are no soldiers in the prison, the soldiers cannot contact the outside world, are all the soldiers alone?

I saw the fifth chapter selling wontons. What you wrote is not logical at all. The protagonist is already in the middle stage of his dark energy, and his hands are so soaked after selling wontons for a long time. Then the protagonist's middle stage of dark energy is not as good as his father. Otherwise, according to your setting, the protagonist's father is not useless even if he has 100 hands.

This name will screen out many readers. The author couldn't think more about choosing this name.

Selling wontons in the village is really an exaggeration. Well, if you go to most villages in China now, you won't be able to sell wontons.

Who is behind this madam? I dare to buy the family members of Wuyuan with only five taels of silver. In front of the protagonist, who is such a young martial arts expert, he directly turned 5 taels of silver into 90 taels, not to mention that the protagonist is still wearing a layer of official training... What is the background of this old madam... He won't even sell the face of 5 taels of silver. How is this business done? There is also the matter of selling wives and children. Although it happens among the people, it is officially illegal, let alone selling it to a brothel. It should not be too simple for the protagonist to come forward to invalidate the sale contract...

You can either go and learn about the history. At least watch it in the period drama of the Anti-Japanese War. Or just stop writing about the details of your life. As for wontons, even today, there are not many villages in the country that can set up wonton stalls.

The writing is okay, but the name of the protagonist's family is hard to describe in one sentence.

I thought it would always be fun, but in the end, there was a plot of kidnapping and prison robbery, and he was even able to be rescued intact. Isn't this wanted criminal too kind?

If you can set up a stall selling steamed buns, I would consider you to be awesome.

Otherwise, don't write about your family. If you have written about your family, don't write about the enemy kidnapping your family. I don't understand why you have to add trouble to the readers. I don't understand, I don't understand, I don't understand. Alas! To put it bluntly, when the protagonist's family was kidnapped and I lost my sense of security, I immediately wanted to jump to a chapter. Then when I saw that the latest update of the catalog contained no chapters that could be skipped, I didn't even want to put it on my bookshelf.

Yes, come on, author😆😆😆

One glance at the author of the female video. The water at the starting point is very deep and you can't grasp it. Let's go back to Eggplant.

Practice your craft. . The background was not chosen well

Come on, this plot was written too early. I even felt a little embarrassed watching it. I really didn't have anything to write. I had to do a kidnapping and prison robbery.

It's too long-winded, the plot moves too slowly, and small things can be dealt with in one go, which is not fun.

The name is so random, well, it doesn't have any sense of substitution, what do you think?

I'm here early. This little bit is not enough. The author will update it.

I just read the first few chapters, the entry point is good, the beginning is smooth, a little bit refreshing 🎭 Character: The protagonist is calm and talented (Golden Finger will be able to practice martial arts calmly in the future, and lifting people is the result of his own efforts) 🎬 Plot: I just got to the examination and there is no advantage here ✒️ Writing style: smooth, whether it is a teacher or a parent, the characters and actions are very realistic, not obtrusive or brainless PS: I don't know if I am suffering from persecution paranoia, but I always feel that the protagonist's father is always going out to sell rice dumplings, and it is inevitable that his parents will worship him (bushi) and force him to conflict (hahaha, I desperately hope that the author will slap him in the face, and the plot will not be bloody!)

The Virgin Bitch character is really disgusting

Local martial arts novels have limited future. If the name doesn't work, one more point will be deducted.