Football: the Legend Never Ends

Brother, after reading the first three chapters, (asking, why did you delete the last book and stop writing it?) How can I put it, the plot can develop like this, the problem is that you did not set up a sense of expectation. The beginning is about what kind of football Golden Globe Award your lifelong enemy wants to win (forgive me for not knowing what trophy it is). The problem is that the reader does not know what feelings you have for that lifelong enemy. For example, I have an opponent who keeps crushing me on the court and mocks me off the court as trash. He wants to become a football star, but I am trash. This makes me emotional. I want to defeat him. And you wrote, I have an opponent, he wants to become a football star, and I am trash, there is no emotion in this. The same thing applies to that girlfriend who cheated on her. For example, I have been in love with my girlfriend for eleven years. I prepared every birthday for her, but she actually cheated on me and teased me for not being able to do it. You wrote, I have a girlfriend who cheated on her and teased me for not being able to do it. These two emotions are completely different. I have emotions about why my opponent wants to become a football star. I want to defeat him because he keeps mocking me and bullying me. To me, he is not good, so he is better than me. I feel very sad. The key point is to foreshadow the intensity of the fight between the opponent and me, and to foreshadow the hatred between the protagonist and the opponent. With the foreshadowing, you can then write about the opponent becoming a football star. Only then can the reader feel the emotions of the protagonist. The protagonist hates the opponent, so it feels good to become stronger and suppress the opponent. When the opponent gets up, he feels uncomfortable and has a sense of expectation. The same principle applies to your girlfriend. Emotions must be prepared before they explode. A child scolded me, and I was angry. If I write this, readers will not be able to feel the complete emotion. There must be preparation before the outbreak. That kid taunted me on the way to and from get off work every day, and it accumulated day by day, until today he scolded me again, and I was extremely angry As you wrote the first three chapters, if you write about the oppression of your opponent and your girlfriend, that kind of uncomfortable emotion, the protagonist will naturally have emotions and want to rise, and the reader will have a sense of expectation. You have not brought out the sense of expectation now. Of course, it's my personal opinion, but it's still okay. If you can write, it's good. Learn and accumulate slowly. Some big guys started to work for five or six years and couldn't sign the contract. Finally, come on, come on (also, is there a QQ group, or WeChat, where we can communicate and learn and progress together)

If I follow your foundation and write a beginning. (Write a brief summary) Late night, rainy day, silence, The driver's seat of the sports car is lonely, with a sad expression. News about his opponent winning the trophy is playing on the radio, as well as his opponent's voice and laughter. A reporter asked his opponent, he heard that his opponent's protagonist was devastated after his girlfriend cheated on him. This is what his opponent thought. The opponent ridiculed him, saying that the protagonist was just trash and not worthy of being his opponent at all. When the protagonist heard this, his memories began to resurface. At first, he was a promising player just like his opponent. They were reported by the media as the strongest opponents. At that time, he and his opponent were losing and losing. The opponent kept tripping him up and taunting him. The protagonist did not take him seriously at all. The protagonist has a girlfriend whom he has been in love with since college. They have been together every year and their relationship is very good. He is very happy. He believes that he will become the best player, comparable to Messi and Ronaldo, and give his girlfriend a perfect family. But three months ago, the day after he and his girlfriend celebrated their birthday, he attended a football match. The media exposed that his girlfriend was cheating on another player. After the protagonist learned about it, he fell into silence. Not only that, his condition declined rapidly. His girlfriend was furious after being discovered. The news scolded him for not being able to satisfy himself. It has been declining, and the protagonist's condition is difficult to even play. The protagonist listened to the ridicule of the opponent on the radio, and then the reporter began to talk about the nomination of the football trophy, looking like an honor. The protagonist looked at the indifferent heavy rain outside the car window, pattering down, and felt a secret pain in his heart. Is this the end of his life? Is that it... Is he willing? The opponent who used to be looked down upon won the trophy, and he became a stranger on the side of the road. The protagonist touched the steering wheel with both hands, and his vision began to blur. There is a thought swirling in the bottom of my heart. He, the protagonist, is unwilling to give in! (After entering the system, there is a foreshadowing and a sense of expectation, and then it develops little by little.)