A Defective Product

The first dozen or so chapters really amazed me, as if I had returned from the dead. But after working on them for a day, the writing felt a bit off. It didn't look good for some reason. How should I put it? I tried too hard.

The pacing is a bit problematic, and the plot feels like the protagonist is never safe. There will be some relaxation time for the things written first, such as Colin and Eugene eating, drinking and having fun, Colin picking up girls, Liszt driving an impart, and Liszt playing treasures with the crew. There is none on your side. Dozens of scenes have been tense since the protagonist entered the incident. Pete did not die and was upgraded on the spot, and the hostile organizations in Detroit did not stop. Comparison of the former Dibai came back from the dead. First, DB was completely defeated in Los Angeles. He had nothing, the organization was wiped out, and his body fell into the sea. The Pope was so dead that he could no longer die. Secondly, after the death of db, the author immediately gave the protagonist a safe period of rest. During this period, the author did not mention any possibility of db's resurrection. Waiting for this person to come back to life is very late in the plot, which is equivalent to the beginning of another plot. On your side, Pete is immediately resurrected and is still loyal to the organization, and the organization still wants to fight the protagonist. You have to know that this "safe time" has two functions. One is to keep the nerves from being tense for a long time, and the other is to allow one event to end completely and move on to the next event. Then that's why the protagonist who beats Pete looks like a villain. I think this problem is mainly caused by rhythm issues. Of course, another reason is because you, as the author, have a negative attitude towards the protagonist's ability to change his destiny. I personally don't think it's necessary for duck, after all, the protagonist did go through a hard battle. If you want to be valuable, be totally focused on value. Let me give you an analogy. It is not valuable for Liszt to continuously obtain the ability of the King's Sword, so writing the ability of Liszt's King's Sword first is mainly to show how powerful the skill is. And all of Colin's abilities are of great value. So Colin has some value upgrades in every battle. For example, Colin being killed by Gray means that he became a victim of power due to latent syndrome. Then he killed the veteran and the shape-shifter, which means that he became a perpetrator of power and was very painful for it. Fighting Randy shows that he has a clear understanding of the various things that limit himself. Fighting against the Apostles of Chaos named Cruel Spirits, and so on. What I want to say is that in the battle between the protagonist and Peter, it was Tal who grew up in the end. . . Normally, this kind of epiphany should be given to the protagonist

300,000 Words and 1 million words are two great challenges, but many authors have failed before them.

Finally, I have read a book that is strong and tasty 😍

It's beautiful. Come on, author, surpass that eunuch.

It feels like the style is not very unified, maybe it's because I don't appreciate this style. Although it is set in the United States, there are always some jokes about the Chinese Internet circle. I can only say that the only names of the characters are in English, which feels very inconsistent. The beginning feels like a serious drama, but the follow-up feels more like a light novel.

Does the latent syndrome group have the same author as this book?

Keep it first, then look at it after 300,000

So exciting, so exciting! Looking at it in the middle of the night makes my arms feel so itchy

The prison master has passed away, but the author still needs to work hard