Warhammer 40,000: the White Scars' Elder

I don't know if you wrote it yourself or if it was edited by AI. It feels a bit strange. The previous writing is actually quite good. It feels strange starting from the many repeated paragraphs. It's very strange. If you don't believe me, use the audio book function to listen to it. There are too many repeated contents, and almost all the previous repeated paragraphs have not been changed. Repeatedly, there are slight changes in the later ones. The thunder warriors who died in the Iron Felt War are repeated in large paragraphs, and some descriptions of personnel and equipment are repeated, almost word for word. If this person appears once in the article, there must be repeated descriptions, such as Tieya, such as Tieya's weapons. , For example, the psyker who follows the protagonist in the Secret Cult always repeats the sentence at the beginning, and it is also repeated during the war. This is how to fight the Iron Man. The other one has the same description, and the next one has the same description. It is like a repeater. In fact, the first sentence of the same enemy is the same. You can describe the battle process in detail, and you can completely mention the same enemies later or reconstruct the battle process according to different environments, instead of rigidly describing the same way in one way. Finally, the path exploration stage at the beginning of the Great Expedition feels a bit inconsistent. Pathfinder Vanguard should focus on path exploration, right? After the route is discovered, it is good to leave certain resources and establish communications for the colonial system. The follow-up, such as cooperation, negotiation and reconstruction, of course have to be done by the follow-up imperial forces. What you have to do is to find out which channels are passable, establish communications, and indicate where the human strongholds are, where there are enemies, and where there are needed resources. It is not a point like you. Just wait for a year or two. This is not called exploring the path. It is better to start a large force from Terra and push it all the way cautiously. Why let the Fifth Legion explore the path when the subspace storm has not subsided? The most important thing is the waterway. Where are the enemies, where are the humans, and where are the resources? It would be better for you to finish everything, so what is the point of exploring the path?

Speaking of the author, can we divide it into sections? It's such a big mess and it makes me tired to look at it.

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What a certain voice saw

Why do you have white scars?😭😭😭I'm here

It's too deliberate to add the old character to everything. It's boring. Just use it occasionally.

Can the foreigner's name in the author's book be abbreviated?

Recruiting reasonable roles. As long as they are not supermodels, I will write about the characters that everyone voted for in this book. Of course, you should set up your role in as much detail as possible.