Occult Cases in the City of Mists

The writing is pretty good, except that I have some reservations about using my spiritual vision to scan others for being too reckless. There are no other issues.

It feels like the protagonist has upgraded a lot of skills, but his performance is a bit weak. Although I practice quickly, I feel uncomfortable writing. Although my language proficiency has improved, I abandoned the writing competition and started writing something else. Although I have upgraded many skills, I am always weak in fighting.

The casual cultivators of extraordinary beings seem to be real and make people laugh... How about referring to "Doctors Without Borders" and changing it to "unorganized extraordinary beings"?

To be honest, the protagonist's previous experience was already very legendary, so legendary that it made me hallucinate Klein's experience in Tingen. Including the latest chapter, he happened to get the information about the spiritual master's job change. Everything about him was too coincidental. The spirit he faced for the first time was solved by his teacher. The extraordinary enemy he faced for the first time was injured, but he happened to be able to solve it. The first time he met west Bill happened to be helping Matthew. After helping Matthew, he happened to discover the brown fairy and happened to find the tripod related to the picture. It happened that the incident happened just before he was about to report it. It happened that Matthew and he were not able to meet each other at this time, so that he could rush to the scene smoothly. There are too many coincidences. The author's writing style cannot control the protagonist's life. He can only arrange a bunch of coincidences for the protagonist to make the events meet the author's expectations. But from the reader's perspective, it feels like there is a "writer" who is crazily using extraordinary abilities to arrange the protagonist's life.

As we all know, deadline is the primary productive force. For the protagonist, the only thing with clear cycle time limit is the writing competition, and the protagonist also plans to win the ranking. When the bookstore owner presented the Divine Comedy to the protagonist, he did not give him the Latin version because of limited preparation time. This shows how tight the cycle progress is, but is the protagonist really in a hurry? It is understandable that things like redeeming advanced meditation methods and privately contacting the judges may increase the chance of winning the competition, but organizing housework, accompanying others on tasks, visiting friends' homes... Does this conform to the normal behavioral logic of a contestant? Graduation defense/professional title review/project acceptance is coming soon. Which good person would start cleaning housework, accompanying others on errands, and visiting relatives and friends at this juncture? Don't you think about priorities and priorities before making a decision?

Author, do you know why your grades are not good? Why is your theme the same as "I Loaded the Occult Panel" but the results are not good, and the other one is off the charts? The reason is the update speed and word count. If you update 10 chapters every day, it will be easy to get monthly tickets and results. 🙂

I can understand that it is necessary to describe the environment and some philosophical thinking to reflect the characteristics and personality of the characters, but a large amount of filler has seriously diluted the excitement of the plot. 1. Several chapters are actually speeches of several supporting characters 2. A large amount of scene descriptions are filled in between the protagonist's action descriptions 3. The protagonist's actions are a bit indecisive and miss the key point I feel that these above are very affecting the reading experience, so that I skipped some chapters directly.

I'm a bit disgusted with Clara, I hope it's just an ordinary supporting role

Today's chapter was very poorly written. There is absolutely no need to write like this. It is normal for someone to bid after there is a guarantee. Then you are too lucky and the writing is very poor. It would be better if there is no suitable technique.

I have written almost a hundred chapters, but the details of life in the article have not been well reflected, and the financial resources of the protagonist have not been well solved.