Travel to a Different World and Then Hold Happiness in Your Hands

I came across your comments on station b. Although I usually only read urban rebirth novels and not Western fantasy genres, let me talk about my feelings. Your work is too ordinary and bland. You, Lin Ming, the chosen one with eight-pack abs and proficient in various fighting skills, traveled to the dark dungeon, obtained the system, gained experience from killing monsters, saved the magician heroine, and exploded the fireball and ice arrow magic scroll. Next, you should get the best sword in the castle and embark on the road to the savior. The above content is a common fantasy dream of classical chuunibyou. It is too cliched. I prefer the story of "The male protagonist witnessed the Zeon army attacking the earth on the way to school, and the Gundams of the two sides fought in the sky. The male protagonist accidentally rescued the female protagonist who crashed. In a rage, he replaced the female protagonist and piloted the Seraph Gundam to kill everyone. From then on, he lived a passionate life of flying Gundam to resist the invasion while flirting with three or four girls while going to school." This kind of story. The subject matter is vulgar, the narrative is bland, and there is no special feature. It is normal for the editor not to accept it. In the third golden chapter, you have to throw out the hook to arouse readers' interest in following. It wasn't until Chapter 7 that a scarlet alien appeared without a name, saying weird things like "I know better than the teacher" and "The Count is awesome." Are you looking down on us Riddlers? Also, it is obviously a third-person narration, but from time to time the inner activities of the first-person emerge, which slightly affects the viewing experience. The protagonist's name is Lin Ming, and your pen name is also "Ming". It can indeed be considered a self-pleasure work with a maximum sense of substitution. But there is nothing wrong with enjoying yourself. Most people's first works are garbage that no one appreciates and they can only entertain themselves. So calm down and treat this as a handwriting exercise to practice your writing skills. Let me give you a suggestion. You can copy a popular novel, translate it completely into Chinese, copy it, and learn to write. After you copy three or four books, you will slowly be able to write your own stuff.

Do you have no outline? You write wherever you think, without rhythm. The protagonist is actually wandering around in the dungeon. When I see an enemy, I just strike with a knife, which may or may not destroy the equipment. I have saved many NPCs and am still on the way to killing monsters and saving people. I saved Dunn today, blindly guessing that he would help the protagonist break the magic circle, and then the brutal lord of this dungeon appeared. He couldn't defeat the protagonist in the first stage, so he cut off his right hand with an ax and sacrificed it to the God of Darkness Gunara. The demonization entered the second stage, and then he was still taken away by the protagonist's two swords, because this was not a soul wandering. At your speed, even if you DNF, you are already fighting Sky City.