A Bit Strange Adventure Mission Manual

I have read the latest chapter so far, and my current evaluation is food. Read it in one go, it's not the kind of Western fantasy that just puts a magic shell on it. It can be seen that the author has carefully designed the world view, and some details such as the currency system have been taken into consideration. In terms of rhythm, there is a little more foreshadowing in the early stage, but after getting through it, the plot begins to gain momentum. It can be seen that the writing is slowly improving, and the battle scenes would be better if they were more neat. Overall, it makes people want to follow it and look forward to the follow-up.

It's better to check the spells carefully, even if you ask AI, for example, the Thunder Sword in the article, although its name contains thunder, and the thunder damage it hits also has the word thunder, but it really has nothing to do with the electric system. There are too many small details like this, which can easily cause drama. Of course, if it's room regulations or it doesn't follow the DND effect, just pretend I didn't say anything 😅

The writing is very good, why are the grades so different?

The writing is very good and the writing style is very careful. It can be seen that the author put a lot of thought into the design of the world view. But why it is not very popular, I probably know the reason. The sense of immersion in the fantasy world is well written, and the plot is cliche but not a bad point. But overall, it feels like the protagonist has been led by the mission log, and his own driving force and goals are very weak, resulting in insufficient expectations for the subsequent plot. There is also the problem of the strength of the cheat cheating. If the cheating is too big, the logic will collapse and the realism of the world view will be reduced. The ambiguity has been reduced, and the sense of substitution and realism is there, but the overall plot will inevitably fall into dullness. This is also a difficult problem that you always face when writing novels. Come on, author.

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The development at the beginning is too flat, the inner motivation of the protagonist is insufficient, and the early expectations are not raised. Although there is nothing poisonous in your writing, it cannot arouse the reader's strong desire to know the follow-up emotions!

In fact, the writing is quite good, better than many books, the characters are well described, the storyline is also good, there are no major poisonous points, but there are many flaws As the first mission of the team, it is correct to write it in detail, but it is too heavy and long, with too many side details. Some details can be mentioned in one paragraph, so I have to write it in one paragraph. Taking a look at the actual release time, it took 4 days to complete the task and return to the city. However, the book has not yet been put on the shelves. Most readers have read this plot in one go, so it is not a big problem. The ability of Goldfinger is a bit unclear. It is clearly written at the beginning that there will be no other rewards, but it seems that there are skill rewards, and then there are attribute rewards. There is no explanation, but in fact, a few sentences can round it out. Some of them may develop into pitfalls. I wonder if the protagonist is going to develop into a "hero". Most readers don't like it. The burden of serving the country and the people is too big and tiring. Even if it is the ideological baggage in the novel, reading it gives a sense of immersion. Most people don't want to memorize it. If you really want to write like this, it depends on the author's ability and whether he can handle it well in the future There is also the issue of whether there is a female protagonist. It is difficult to decide. If there is more than one, some people will criticize it. At present, the two female characters are a bit deliberate. It is better to be a dog-licker and not to be careless. It can be included but the title cannot be given. Let the readers make up their own minds. If they think it is "more", then "more", if they think it is "none", then "none". This is purely a personal opinion.

The writing is indeed good, but the main character is not interested, so I can't stand it.

The author heard that you are a veteran adventurer, and I have a task I want to entrust you with. [Mission: Imperial Expedition] [Content: Help me regain the throne] [Reward: Wait for me to make you a general] PS: V me 50 first to see my strength

Goldfinger is interesting, but not easy to use. According to the information provided by the author, this cheat can be used to check the status and rewards of tasks in advance just like playing a game. From this, two possibilities can be deduced, one is simply predicting the possible drops, and the other is the causal law level. As long as the task is completed, the reward will definitely be received. If it's the former, that's too much. It's just equivalent to having a full-level prophecy with great limitations. As for the latter, it is well known that there is no such thing as a weak mechanism. Not to mention that the protagonist can complete quests to find low-risk and high-reward ones. Even if he doesn't want to do it, he can sell it to others, let alone provide information. The second is the double-standard behavior in the protagonist's greed for the skill book. Even if it is clarified later, there is a first-come, first-served relationship. Since the protagonist clarifies the compensation later, why should he say that his teammate is greedy for life and afraid of death before compensation is made? Also, the Goblin part is a bit too slow and too reckless, let alone whether the protagonist knew that Goblin was a rookie killer in his previous life. Just say that the system prompts that there is a gathering of power, tmd, just say on your face that this is a cesspit, stop coming, how high is your protagonist? Finally, this is the point that I can't stand the most. Even before, I thought I could still watch it. This is really unbearable. In a few chapters, two women who are obviously likely to have a relationship with the protagonist in the future have a lot of flaws. Let's not talk about whether a gifted priest can be protected and nurtured. Let's talk about that female noble. After only meeting her a few times, she thought, "Maybe it's him." I don't know why Xihuan always engages in this kind of love with rice and honey, fake sweetness.

How should I put it? There is something wrong with the map, the quests taken by the adventurers are also wrong, and the place names are also wrong.

It's just that the plot is a bit cliche, and I always feel that the protagonist is being pushed around all the time, which looks weird.

I found that many readers cannot accept three points, namely: First, Greene clearly behaved more excessively (hiding skill books secretly, and did not refuse when faced with the first choice of trophies.), But instead accused Malki of being mercenary. Second, Green knew that Malki was a bitch, yet he still invited him to join the team. Third, an equipment store, faced with an obviously different weapon, did not identify it, but Green picked it up. Here I respond one by one. First, Green did indeed keep skill books privately, which is unethical. But in the subsequent plot, he first repaid this amount several times, and then confessed what he had done. The second is to give priority to the selection of loot. Green is the killer of the Rat King (basically a solo kill). To put it bluntly, without him, the team will be wiped out directly. Isn't it reasonable to take more and more? Second, when Green couldn't pay the rent and quickly entered the killing line, Malki came to Green immediately with a high-value commission that he had only grabbed all morning, and made him the first pot of gold (including skill books). So why was it unreasonable for Green to form a team and invite Malki? Third, a one-handed sword with an offset center of gravity is the same as He Chenguang's gun. If your shop dares to sell it as a normal weapon, adventurers will dare to demolish your shop. Yes, Lanxi is obviously different, but it only costs one gold. How could the store offer an appraisal scroll worth five silver? Isn't it because the store thinks it's garbage? The protagonist discovers the real value through some strange way. Also, the Appraisal Technique is a magic skill. How can it be possible to appraise every weapon? The dwarf blacksmith who appeared later was willing to take action because he just lacked proficiency and Green was a regular customer. Finally, I think Gunter belongs to the Holy Mother, alas... He is a paladin who wants to take an oath of devotion. I don't know if he is a mother or not, but there must be a saint. Finally, feel free to scold me if you want. Readers are their parents, so I definitely can't delete comments.

It's ok, it's indeed a work that I, Yu Xiaoan, have read. Come on, author.

If Tyr knew that he had a paladin like Gaunt, he would probably tie up Ilmat, hang him up and beat him.

The character pictures that were promised have not been released yet 😢 It's a big deal that the characters are included.

It's okay, but the plot is a bit bland

How do the protagonist and his two companions recognize words?

After reading the first few chapters, I feel that it is very stable and good.

It's much better than writing it at a glance, and it's worthy of being an internal investment.

How to say it? If the overall rating is 5 stars, I would give it 4 stars. As a Western fantasy work, especially the Western fantasy mage novel, it is very good. 3.5 Stars for the author's writing and style. The last two points missing are that I don't know much about DND, but that doesn't matter. Many Western fantasy novels have secondary settings for DND. The other is that the overall novel is not very engaging or enjoyable, and is more like a Western fantasy daily novel. It's important to praise. A very good point is that the author sometimes includes some illustrations, which are very Western fantasy style and make people feel immersed in the book. It feels like the cover should have been designed by the author himself. It may have just been put on the shelves recently, so there are not many illustrations, but every illustration is very good.

There are a lot of small questions, please store them in your mind before reading.

Some people like the protagonist to be righteous, and some like the protagonist to be selfish, but few people like the double standard.

Is the protagonist a warrior or a mage?

I really like this type of work, in the style of Western fantasy. It feels good to me so far, and I hope I can continue to write well.

By the way, isn't the average attribute of dnd equal to 10? Why set it to 5?

How much silver can you earn by completing a mission? How many gold coins can you use to buy equipment and prepare supplies? ? ! Working at your own expense?

This is a new book for a newcomer, so there will be many shortcomings, so please bear with me. At the same time, I would like to express my gratitude to the readers who have been reading and who are about to join. Then... The author is below, please comment and support me. I will treat every reader seriously. Finally—— This book may be cool, but it won't cut. This book may be bad, but it won't be a eunuch. I will try my best to write it to the end. Let the protagonist team become a legendary team. (Go and take the commission!)

There are more than ten cards, you have your first pot of gold, and then you don't want to find a master to train? Go out to eat and drink after buying the equipment?

The beginning is well written, concise and clear, and the rhythm is very comfortable, but it's a pity that Western Fantasy doesn't have much traffic.