Everyone Is Superhuman, and I'm Just a Loren Lathe Worker.

I have no desire to open the second chapter. Let me talk about what I saw first: An engineer (it seems so? It doesn't matter). The country was defeated by the war, he became a prisoner, and he was captured as a young man. He took a plane and wanted to go to the battlefield. He kicked me out of nowhere, and then jumped off the plane, leaving a dispensable hook. Advantages: There is a world view and settings. Disadvantages: 1. Too strong desire to express. The author needs to be a person with a desire for expression, but a good author needs to learn to control his desire for expression. Look at how many useless things you stuffed into the first chapter. The emotional catharsis towards AB country. Some inappropriate settings. Some concluding remarks that force logical rationalization. 2. Sense of logic You have a very interesting setting. An engineer who does not have super powers uses strange props to fight in this world. Then you need to have a particularly reasonable narrative to make those weird things logical and seem reasonable. As long as it seems reasonable. So, can such an ordinary person do those things on a plane that turns into a drum washing machine? When I saw it there was only one question in my mind. Why is the plane stable again? You need to have a basic logic, which is to maintain the sense of chaos and falling of the plane, and maintain the protagonist's behavior precariously in this feeling. 3. Procrastination Your first chapter actually only talks about one thing, the plane crashed and the protagonist rescued himself. But you crammed in a lot of messy stuff. A chop, a sudden kick, the invasion of country AB, the accusation against country AB. A good novel often does not write about many things, but tells one thing well. You could have said yes, but you chose not to. This causes the plot to drag. 4. Characters can't stand up Only those who can write one or two characters well in online articles can sign a contract, but those who can write group portraits well are rare. (Said by Chang Yuan) In your first chapter, the main character should stand out most. You wrote a total of protagonists, a slasher, a slasher, a kicking guy, and a beach girl, but none of them stood up. Especially the protagonist. His reaction is unreal, it was all given by you. Your magical metaphors will only make readers feel that they are nonsense. Why don't you write about your true feelings when you want to vomit after being drunk but can't. 5. Settings Delete that sentence in the settings. Eat and drink every day. Three golden chapters, I won't go into the four questions at the beginning. Above.

I finally know what Boss Rabbit said, what it feels like to be full of foul language. . . The setting at the beginning is very good, everyone is the boss, I am a loser. But it collapsed later on, and I either continued to be a loser or became a god. You are neither of the two. You are somewhere between a loser and a god. It is recommended to choose a direction. In addition, in Western languages, an imaginary world view requires you to have an inner setting. Such as character power, country distribution, historical background, etc. ————Dividing Line———— Qidian's new book "Infinite Loading End Bone Rider Won't Let Me Clear the Game" is waiting for the boss's recommendation, evaluation, and addition to the bookshelf. The boss's attention is the motivation for me to continue to update. (づ ●─● )づ