When the Sun Loses Blood, I Draw a Talisman to Save It.

The story is average, the characters are stretched, and the main plot is too scattered

I feel like this woman will be a failure

In the first few chapters when it is most important to attract readers, I spent a chapter writing about an inexplicable game, played the game with a woman who appeared out of nowhere all night, and then had to pull the person out to review the game. Can this be human?

What I wrote before was okay, but ever since I got this female high school student, things started to get messy. Nowadays, there are not many authors who dare to write about female protagonists in Qidian. It is indeed quite retro.

I can read this book because of its talented people. Only the introduction is attractive.

The first is the heroine. You can be a fan of niche perverted games. There are many development methods and you can casually explain the world view or background. You just use too much force to create a love-minded licking dog. No one will be able to spit after reading this. This is the heroine, not a pet. If you write it, you should write it well. Only after you become an independent person can you be qualified to talk about a lover. The second is the background mentioned above. Low demons and high demons? Are there any gods? What does the state of immortality look like? At the beginning, when an abnormality is discovered in the normal world and then enters the extraordinary world, you have to give a logical explanation instead of me having a great idea. It is too contrasting and awkward for a person from the upper world to be a civil servant in the underworld. If you see a question mark here, if you are so down-to-earth, you must have more or less information. Even if you don't know, you should show the corresponding concealment method. A sentence of ai live streaming will not make people think it is cool, it will only think that you are strengthening the reader's IQ. There is also the issue of the seal of ancient monsters. It is too awesome and important. If it comes out, life will be ruined. But I ask you, the seal of the fairy world is none of your business. It is a family that takes care of it. Does he have this ability? He doesn't. He is about to be wiped out. Even the upper world doesn't know about this. The family can guard, maintain, seal and preserve relevant information without supervision. Wouldn't you laugh if you saw it so casually? Of course, you can patch it up and say: Ah, there is a mole. Normal people can imagine it, but I didn't see you write it at all bro🤔

The entry of the female protagonist is too abrupt, and the setting is that she is a useless passerby. Before the main plot is exciting, it is not recommended to transfer or share the perspective with the supporting characters.

It's awkward and boring, and it really discourages me from quitting.

The plot is quite awkward, especially the woman, the biggest flaw. The protagonist is like a dog-licker, and the further you look at it, the more she looks like AI. . .

The writing style of this book is a bit similar to Big Eyed Abnormal Creatures or Zhang Xiaohua's First Chaos in History. It is an urban fantasy light novel. The most important thing about this genre is that it is imaginative and interesting. The problem is that the author is not good at writing and the characters are not likable. The plot design is blunt. Gods play Timmy. Is it a good design for people from the underworld to serve as civil servants in the underworld? I feel that it is a bit too much for the sake of contrast. The protagonist can be poor and gain a sense of interest. The main character you write is too stereotyped. It is still a Wudi novel. The sense of interest can only be created by the author himself. However, if you use too many jokes, it will overwhelm the main character. This is the problem with this book. It is not interesting enough. What Wudi Wen needs most in life-oriented writing is human touch to create a sense of distance. Your character creation lacks human touch.

Why is it that everyone seems to have a system? The protagonist can look at the system and ask questions in the system, and everyone else knows the answers to the questions.

I'm a bit stupid. I saw a few pictures where the main character looks like a pure licker.

Why did it suddenly start to suck?

It's okay to write a heroine, but the heroine doesn't help the plot. If you can just replace it with a vase, then what's the point?

It's very interesting. A main mission with a sense of urgency but not too painful or tiring is a good goal.

,, Looks good, but the latest few pictures, especially the latest chapter, are too self-indulgent,,, withdrawn

Let me talk about my personal feelings. The overall plot is good and interesting, but there are still some problems. First of all, the understanding and relationship development between the male and female protagonists are really unacceptable. Secondly, the male protagonist's attitude after meeting Liu Zhen was very bad. Although the protagonist said that he didn't like the other person's attitude, he later apologized and gave gifts and begged not to complain. The result was that the relationship was only mediocre, and he was later dismissed when he went on a mission. After being rescued, I went to someone else for everything. The key point was that I didn't want to owe any favors, but then... Again, my inner demon came out of nowhere, and I reached a consensus with the protagonist, which felt like a forced restoration of respect. In the end, the protagonist and the heroine got the certificate within a week of knowing each other, which was too fast. In addition, the protagonist had so many cheats, but he basically never had to fight a tough battle. It felt like he was usually more interested in falling in love with the heroine. I can only say that the character creation and combat performance are not good at the moment, but the plot and laughter are good, that's all.

You can watch it, the rhythm is very comfortable, and the author is amazing

The talismans and other things on the front of this book look okay, but I just didn't expect you to add this girl into it. I haven't read what they said about falling in love later, but what you wrote in the first few pictures is a bit too much. Originally, it was just a character design for a game. To be honest, I have never seen the game, and I can't stand it. But after working on it for a long time, you drew a talisman and made a thunder sword. He actually wanted to give it to her directly... Shouldn't he read it himself after writing the book? In other words, when you read the comment earlier and changed it later, why did you still write it like this?

I think this should be planned for light novels

Why do so many people say it's not good? I think it's quite fun! Did the author offend someone? Or did you sleep with someone's mother-in-law?

I don't know how the author set it up. If gods have always existed, why does the heroine's father know that a magician is causing trouble, but there is no official to deal with it? The 472 Project mentioned earlier is so important, but in the end no one was involved.

After seeing the energy absorbed by the sun, I guessed that some great ingenuity could generate electricity from solar energy → solar energy cultivation → the sun was drained of energy → the sun lost blood.

It's already a very innovative new book.

Why don't you calm down and read it again after Chapter 90?

The biggest problem with your book is that it shouldn't take the supernatural route. It would be much better if it took the spiritual revival route. In the early stage, it looked like a spiritual revival article. Recently, spiritual revival has become very popular. It's a pity.

When I was planning to post this, he updated it to chapter 123. After reading it, I will come back and share my personal feelings.