Can Magical Girls Be Inhuman?

A 37-year-old single mother with a daughter in her early twenties?! Xiao Lin's dad's got some skills.

A magical girl from the Honkai Impact 3rd universe? That's too much fun!

I've read up to chapter 60, and it's pretty good. There aren't any secrets hidden in plot points spanning hundreds of thousands of words, nor are there any tropes like characters turning into sieves or magical girls fighting each other. It's currently more of a traditional magical girl story, unlike those disgusting attempts that masquerade as magical girls with urban supernatural abilities.

Having read the latest chapters, the author's writing style makes the protagonist's intelligence seem somewhat questionable, and the protagonist's sister, a top student, is also dragged down in terms of intelligence. This isn't a system novel, so everything has to be related to it. Magic is just a game panel; revealing it won't hurt, as long as you don't mention your identity, degree of humanization, or anything that could be linked to your true identity. Hiding things that don't need to be hidden is completely useless. It feels like a bunch of nonsense, deliberately creating suspense to make you feel like you're losing your intelligence. Or does becoming a girl make you lose your intelligence? 😥😥😥

The premise is indeed interesting, but the writing style is too drawn out. Each plot point takes several chapters to advance, and the exciting moments that come are not as numerous as expected. There is too much fuss and description of inexplicable points, which makes the story feel bland and boring. In short, the setup was good, but the writing was mediocre, which is a bit of a shame.

This account's first book is enough to make me decide to follow it. The author's imagination and writing style are both excellent; could he be the reincarnation of Old Deng? 🤓 The only downside is that each chapter is too short; following the updates isn't quite satisfying.

This kind of dual-person marriage story would likely involve a lot of hidden romantic subplots, especially since both identities have their own romantic storylines.

It seems alright 🙂

In typical magical girl gender-swap stories, the protagonist's original identity isn't affected even if it's revealed, although there might be some retribution. However, the protagonist in this story is a monster. If his identity is exposed, his magical girl identity, brother identity, and mother identity will all be ruined. So, I feel that if the male protagonist doesn't know his sister's identity first, he's probably doomed.

Your problem right now is that you're updating too infrequently. Each update is so small, which makes the plot disjointed and the sudden breaks in the story are really frustrating. Also, I think you could add more magical girl elements. For example, the Shura field, gravity, distortion, etc., Although there is a trend now, it still feels not powerful enough.