So Brilliant!

I'm not optimistic about this book. The Fourth Natural Disaster doesn't really match the classical cultivation of immortality. The sense of substitution is too poor.

To be honest, I was disappointed when I read Chapter 30. The first story has fallen into a cliche, and the next one is just that the protagonist is God (Daojun). Now that God's 'spirit' has been chosen, there is a high probability that he is God. This story was okay a few years ago, but now it's not novel but seems tacky and has no sense of surprise. The second thing I want to see in practice is to break through the barriers of predecessors and open up. As a result, after suffering so much before, I suddenly chose the path of learning God. Let's not talk about whether 'Yi Qi' is suitable for him. Don't you think the sense of separation in the plot is too strong? If you have a problem, why don't you try to take a new path? Choose someone who has been through it before and is so strong. To be honest, what you did was probably done better than you did back then. What's the point of telling this story? After reading thirty chapters, I just couldn't bear it. What a pity this line of writing is. What a pity

It's too verbose, and the reading experience is not strong.

Please change the introduction. The second half of the introduction is completely superfluous and the beginning is too bad and confusing.

What a mess. I've read Chapter 7 and I'm still confused. The background of the story is blurry and I haven't even seen the game mentioned in the introduction. What is the author thinking?

After spending a lot of time writing this review, I became the person other than the author who most hoped that this book would become popular. I didn't want what I put a lot of effort into writing to disappear into thin air and no one would read it. Because it really took me a long time. This is a community that has the same interests as the author, please feel free to comment. Theme The subject matter is not to my liking. I was inspired by the author's attitude after browsing the comment section and clicked in to read it. But after reading the first two pages, I knew that this book should be cut. It is too showy and has a lot of invalid information that is of no use to the plot and character creation. Internet articles, or excluding those stream of consciousness that frequently use delay techniques and the French New School of Novel like Ulysses in Time Past. Excluding martial arts novels and other types of novels, in order to make the key plots more tense, deliberately slowing down the pace to describe every stroke of the move and every expression and movement, I can responsibly say that if all written works are for the purpose of telling stories, they should write as few and clean things as possible to condense them, rather than meaninglessly writing too much, shortening the average amount of information, and losing the beauty of the text. The rosy clouds cut off the dark blue, and the sun and feet melted the purple jade Amidst the magnificent and gorgeous colors, Ji Chen stood on the side of the moss-mottled smooth bluestone road, holding a wooden stick with leaves on the stem that had not yet been cleaned, in a pavilion built for people to rest halfway up the mountain. The young man is tall and tall, with his hair tied up in a wooden hairpin. He is wrapped in a green robe without any trace of decoration, and has a wide robe with large sleeves. Fanned by the long wind in the Xuanpu Mountain, he looks like a luan bird spreading its wings. Although he is as simple as ever, he has a unique and unrestrained attitude. This is such a long paragraph on the first page of the whole book. It can be simplified as a young man with a tall and tall figure, wearing a plain green clothes, holding a wooden stick and looking up at the pavilion on the mountainside. What stems and leaves are mottled and smooth for people to rest on, Xuanyu, Luan Bird, simplicity remains. These are all 500-word compositions in school. How can you use this style of writing when telling stories. (Judgment based on the three golden chapters as an extension of the theorem) These do not help the advancement of the story, nor the smoothness of the writing. The words are not beautiful, but only increase the difficulty of reading. Serious literature is not as obscure and difficult to read as the author wrote it. No matter what, it is important to lay the groundwork for the story first. This is like chess, the number of moves is money. If you don't move out the rook and other big players as soon as possible to set up the game, it is a waste of opportunity.

The writing style is too poor, half-literate and half-white, pretentious, without the connectives that contemporary people are accustomed to. Each sentence requires analysis of word components, which most people can't understand. It's also a style, some people like it and some people hate it, but I can't stand it. The part I saw was written with a stick in the east and a stick in the west, a deep one and a shallow one. I don't know what it is writing. I haven't seen such poor writing in a long time.

This book is absolutely ruined. The author's diction, language ordering, and plot progression are all messed up. It's very tiring to read. The preface does not match the postscript.

The beginning was too confusing and confusing. I read it for a long time and wondered what exactly you wrote.

I'll give you an opinion and write it in a more popular way. I am a liberal arts student with a background in ancient Chinese literature, but I am tired of reading it. Novels are something for leisure time. The novel I read is one chapter, and I can read 3 or 4 chapters of other novels. It took more than an hour, and I have only read 21 chapters, and I still have to analyze and summarize. The context in it is very taxing and tiring.

I think this book has many settings and is difficult to understand, which makes it difficult for me to read it. The more I read, the more uncomfortable it becomes, and I have to turn forward frequently to confirm the previous words... I don't know if you can read this book smoothly. I don't think I can... I have read novels for more than ten years, and I have encountered several novels that are difficult to read... This is one of them.

If you think about it calmly, the background setting and plot writing are indeed good, but the storyline of the protagonist is dull and has no fixed perspective. It is difficult to connect the events in series, so it is tiring to watch.

After reading the first two chapters, it turned out that the names were old friends. The Maozhan book is very good, but its popularity is too low, maybe it's not suitable for the environment. This is back to the starting point, I hope the popularity will increase

It was fine before Chapter 13, but I can't practice the immortal cultivation you taught me in the following chapters. Don't be frivolous with words, don't make a bunch of words describing scenery and characters, don't make some mysterious and mysterious immortal cultivation techniques, what's the plot of your story?

Classical cultivating immortality is too difficult to write, but being able to write it well is very impressive, so there are a group of overconfident writers who take the challenge.

I clicked in because the author had a good attitude in the comment section. After reading the first two pages, I knew that this book was not good. It was too showy and there was too much invalid information, which was of no use in setting up the plot or shaping the characters. Internet articles should write less rather than more. Amidst the magnificent scenery, Ji Chen stood on the side of the moss-mottled smooth bluestone road, holding a wooden stick with leaves on the stem that had not yet been cleaned, in a pavilion built for people to rest on the mountainside. Such a long paragraph is clearly abbreviated. Ji Chen leans on a wooden stick and looks up at the pavilion halfway up the mountain. The stems and leaves are mottled and smooth with moss for people to rest on. This is a 500-word composition in school. How can you use this kind of writing when telling a story. The long paragraph at the end is clearly about a young man who is tall and tall and wears a green suit. It is enough to pass it by in one stroke. It is important to set the stage for the story first. It is like chess, the number of moves is money. If you don't wait for the big player to come out as soon as possible to set up the game, it will be a waste of opportunity

Just look at the name and blindly guess the book of The Promise Bookworm

Because that is the evaluation of AI, I have read the first 15 chapters. It is indeed not AI. Although it is complicated, it is completely different from the details, adjectives and fixed sentence descriptions of AI's lethality. Now that I have written this, I will also write about my reading experience. There is nothing wrong with the author's writing skills, and there is nothing like a primary school student's writing style, but it does seem that he has little experience in writing novels. The start was too slow. Three chapters were written about meeting the fox and entering the mountain world, which contained a lot of explanatory content. Each paragraph is more complicated. The most important thing is that the protagonist is absent, which does not mean that the protagonist does not exist, but that there is no sense of the main perspective. Without this, many things will be too flat. All in all, my writing skills are fine, but my macro level is a bit lacking.

The writing is both good and bad. I really can't understand many parts, and many things are repeated many times. There are several questions below 1. What is the result? At the beginning, I thought it was because the result was displayed. However, the plot continues to be added. The result is that the more you read, the more paths you will know, right? What is the Three Days of Dharma? Do you know nothing about the results of the previous dynasty? What is the difference between righteous Dharma and heretics? 2. What are those three days? I feel like the same person. God and Dao Lord appear to be the same person everywhere (the protagonist, if he is not the protagonist, there is no need to write this book. It will definitely collapse later). The title of the God Lord, Xuanqiong Yuli Immortal Emperor, is obviously the title of the Jade Emperor. The heaven that the system copied everywhere is not possible through time travel? This is very confusing. 3. The main plot didn't come out until 250,000 words into the latest chapter. God left (you have to wait for the protagonist to return). You can imagine what was written in so many words in front of it. It can be cut off by 2/3. The strengthening system in the plot is also very vague and unclear, and I can't understand the context. It's like a bunch of vague sentences written in the Taoist scriptures. Xuanmen Lianqi, if asked, is very traditional and I can barely understand it. The rest of it gives the impression that the author himself does not know what he is writing. The rest will be added later.

Why hasn't it been updated yet? Is it getting cold?

It is said to be an open large-scale mythical world game, but it turns out to be a large single-player system, which is introduced one by one.

It's enough to mention the skills once in each chapter. Let's start from the beginning. The real book should be good but it's too wordy. There is no need to write about the environment. There are also unimportant things like horses. Why would you write a chapter?

The enemy is out and the protagonist is nb.

After all, it's better not to fall into the trap of this update speed. If there are new books, updates are unstable and the future is worrying.

I caught up with the latest chapter. It was okay at first, but then there were a lot of introductions and explanations. Reading these gave me a headache, and the storyline didn't advance much 😥

Stop writing, I only read 30, but really you might as well write in classical Chinese. With just that, you have written at least 50 kinds of Qi, right? There are more than a dozen exercises, who can remember them if you are so funny?

How long can the author persist? 300,000 And 1 million are the two major hurdles.

A white bone soil, an unimportant water, and a hundred words can give you a chapter of water. What are you doing with those water and ginseng? Do we want to know?