Trying to Be a Talented Person Next to the Demon Girl

Title: I caught a wave of the First Saint Demon Sect, but it's a bit late. Introduction: I think a good introduction needs at least four elements. Explain the title of the book, Crisis, Goldfinger, Hook. Explain the title of the book and you explain it halfway. There is a witch, how did you become a talent? The author did not explain this point that I most wanted to see. Crisis, prison car-dilemma, the sense of oppression is not enough, the sense of crisis is too weak. Goldfinger, Riddler, I can't understand what it is. As the author, you need to explain it clearly and simply. Even if you throw away the setting, it is better than being confused now. Goldfinger is a big gimmick but it is not written clearly. Hook, how to become a talent is a hook, but unfortunately the author did not write about it. Text: New authors should really not commit the literary youth syndrome. It is recommended to give the time, place and characters at the beginning, and then advance the plot. This way readers will have a sense of involvement. In the beginning, it's better to just write that the protagonist opens his eyes and sees a pair of big white legs on the opposite side. The direct whiteness catches the eye. I think the character design of the protagonist is really a big poisonous point. It's okay to graduate from 985 with great talents, and it's okay to be reincarnated after becoming an immortal (although the natives lack the sense of substitution that modern people have), but the combination of these two really doesn't work. Go back to the beginning and see how the author describes it. Having lived two lives, the protagonist once again traveled through time and acted like a new recruit. In the third reincarnation, when he felt pain, he could subconsciously cover his chest and make spell-casting movements subconsciously. In your second life, you were vigorously cultivated by the sect and became an immortal. Your identity and ability to deal with emergencies should be up to standard! Being in an unfamiliar environment, even if the protagonist squints his eyes and observes first, the protagonist still thinks that in the second life, he will have to perform magic tricks after becoming an immortal. I won't talk about the protagonist's words and deeds after that, because the character design has already collapsed in the first chapter. Then, the protagonist does not inherit the memory of the original person. Although this setting is old-fashioned, I think it is an indispensable part for new authors. Because after inheriting the memory, you can quickly explain the cause and effect in one or two sentences, who you are, where you are, and what will happen next. It gives readers a sense of involvement and also attracts them to continue reading. The number of words about the interaction with the little maid was completely redundant. The corpse scam shocked the two girls. It was obvious that only one of them could get through it in one go. "What's going on? He was obviously poisoned and died just now." Thinking of this, the little maid shuddered and looked at the male protagonist with eyes full of fear. This is not the end! Don't waste precious words on unimportant characters and story. The appearance of the ugly-faced man is a clear signal of crisis. Being startled by a big man and then taunting him (whether you are pretending or really being scared, the character is broken), I think it is a foreshadowing for conflict, although it is suspected of actively looking for a crisis. Then the big man became angry and said fiercely, I will kill you when you get to the next resting point. Give an immediate death crisis! I guess the author wrote about the big man saying that the protagonist can reach the sect alive to pave the way for the subsequent sect plot, but that was too slow. If it goes according to my idea, well, the next rest point is the death crisis. When there is a crisis, the protagonist must show his strength. The system written by the author later is completely redundant. Your success in becoming an immortal in your previous life was really in vain! ! ! The most poisonous thing is that the plug-in failed to open! Don't say anything. The wonderful story is at the back. The readers have finished running, brother! ! ! You became an immortal in your previous life, which shows that your talent is high and your vision has also increased accordingly. You can tell at a glance that the woman in white is a master of magic! The breaking point is her! Don't you want to be a talent? It's time to show your talent. If you directly ask her for magic skills that can be achieved quickly, the other party will say that no matter how quick it is, it will take time. Now you have no time to break through and cannot match the opponent. The other party's distrust and lack of support are all a form of suppressing emotions, paving the way for subsequent pretense and slaps in the face to enhance the protagonist's status in the heart of the seductress. The male protagonist smiled confidently and pretended to be cool at this time, saying that you just need to get it, even if it doesn't work, it's just a matter of death. This indifferent attitude made the woman interested. From the title of your novel, the protagonist is destined to be entangled with a witch. Arousing a woman's curiosity is a good start! The woman dictates the essence of the law to you. You close your eyes and listen while revising it! You became an immortal in your previous life and traveled through your third life. Although your cultivation is gone, do you still understand your talent and vision? This is your biggest golden finger! What more Gouba system is needed? ? ? ! ! ! For example: the male protagonist makes changes while listening, adding psychological activities. Why does this technique require a large amount of human blood to assist in practice, and why is it extremely life-consuming? The final comment is that it is an out-and-out magic method. But it's a pity that the creator's talent is not good enough. He came up with such a quick success method, the cost is so high, and the harvest is small. I changed it here, and changed it here. I only need to consume a small amount of my own health and lifespan, but I receive more goods. Gradually, the male protagonist's mind sinks into his body, and an inner elixir or a whirlpool of energy gradually forms, and at the end, a hook is left. This is a pretense, although there is no audience for the time being. There are some cool things, and the information gap is also a kind of cool thing. It's nothing more than the big guy behind thinking that you are a soft persimmon, and then being killed by you, whether it is incredible or begging for mercy. At this time, although readers have already guessed the direction of the plot, they will still look forward to the content of the second chapter. The content of the second chapter is nothing more than killing the big man, everyone is shocked, getting in a good mood, collecting the goods, and counting the loot. I only read the first chapter, and the above are some of my humble opinions. Sorry to the author, I didn't read the rest. Because the first chapter was too toxic for me personally. But I still wish the author to sign a contract as soon as possible and make a lot of money!

It's very well written. There are so many good novels here at Qidian, but it just cuts too fast.

You can continue reading with confidence

Please also use your little hands and read to the end to help me overcome the disaster successfully

I go out every day to recruit foster fathers 🪖. Today I want two foster fathers to come back.

The weather is nice today. I put on my mallet and black sack and went out to recruit my adoptive father😁😁😁

It doesn't have the flavor of Qiong Ming. It's more of a description of environment, clothing and clothing. This system doesn't have the flavor of literary youth as soon as it comes out.

It looks okay, but the amount is too small

Come on, add it to the bookshelf to support it

A wave of blind guesses, first capture the clones, and then merge the memories to achieve the capture body. Or, conquer the clone first, then develop the clone into a wingman, and then conquer the main body together. 😍

Catch-up reading on Tuesday is important for new books! 😭Fathers, read a book! New adoptive fathers, please be sure to catch up with the latest chapter before Tuesday ... 6.1 It is now 200,000 words long, and this book has 1,000+ collections. The daily plot of the sect is over, and now it is the plot of Jianghu experience and fighting, and it is time to start! ! ! If 1/3 of my 1,000 collections can be read by my adoptive father, I will be on the third round! ! !

I came here from the contract beast book.

It's all the credit of the adoptive fathers Take off! I wish the adoptive fathers can drink juice every day

Don't be impatient, just stick to it until it's a few hundred chapters long and finish what you need to write.

Bai Wushuang

I really can't stand it. This kind of fun writing is no longer popular. Can you write a proper text?

After seeing Chapter 20, this system is a bit irritating The Riddler I hate the most

Although Birds and Bears are disgusting, the writing is good

Two Bai Wushuang created with AI

Qin Lan

This chapter is very nice😍

Vote and cheer

Author, can I imitate yours?

Stop and sit in the maple forest at night, the leaves are as red as the flowers in February due to frost.

🙂🙂 All the votes are given to you, don't cut them

The round of recommendations is over, and I will start running naked tomorrow. I have few collections of this book, and few readings. I estimate that it will take 300,000 words before it can be put on the shelves I will continue to update to see how the subsequent 100,000 words are collected and read The overall story is [Zongmen]-[Jianghu]-Promoted to a small magical power- [Zongmen]-[Jianghu]-Promoted to a medium-level magical power - [Zongmen]-[Temple Rivers and Lakes]-[Zongmen]-Promote to the Great Divine Power- [Last 1/3 Plot] Zongmen, focus on daily life, practice, and tactics Jianghu, it is the usual fighting monsters, grabbing treasures, upgrading, rebelling, and pushing the main line The tone of the story is like this orz

It's okay if you cut it. I feel that the ones that are more likely to be tearful are the ones with more tearful eyes. The novels written by Liu Sanliang and his other pen names are quite popular.

🙂 "Although he has achieved Taoism and Fruition, he is not like that magical girl who can rule for eternity"

If one page doesn't connect to the previous one, read it yourself. It's not a fault. It's incoherent. It was incoherent in the early stages. I can see that this chapter jumps to the next chapter, but I can't understand it. It is a turning point, an instant turning point.

I need to write well. I feel like the quality of these chapters has declined a bit in recent times.