Tokyo Agent: Starting from Picking up a Troubled Girl

It was too hard to write in the early stage and it didn't look good. If you just added a little money, it wouldn't be so bad.

Agent, do you think we can make it?

The main character in a system-flow light novel is really struggling when he is short of money. The previous system may be lifted at any time. After passing the level, there is no money in the reward and he has to work as a cowherd to make money. Not to mention getting rich, he must at least have food and clothing. Moreover, the embarrassing situation is mentioned over and over again.

I finished reading it in one go. The writing is quite good, but I feel that the pressure is a bit too harsh. The system does not give legal status, so let's forget about the pressure on Cowherd's gold medal. They also have to arrange a classic villain to target, and the system also forces a fifteen-day debut time to back pressure. Honoka's talent must be suppressed, and a sprained leg debuff must be applied that day. It's worth it. It's quite unpleasant, because if you want to advance, you have to suppress it first. As a result, there is basically no climax point at the beginning. It feels like everything is put on the debut episode. However, the corresponding problem is that if the debut episode is not exciting enough, it will not be worthy of the previous hardships for the readers. The essence is still a problem of pacing, but I still hope that the author can write it well.

It took me two days to read this book. Let me talk about my feelings first (Jin himself believes that this is not mixed with any other factors) The book looked very good in the early stage, but after the Kuroda section, the plot completely collapsed. I feel that the author has been immersed in his own art. Then there are suggestions for the author. First of all, when you are writing a book, think about your purpose of writing the book, whether it is to make money, or simply to write for the sake of writing. If it is to make money, can the author write in the direction of commercial literature? This is a semi-professional and semi-romance type, right? It is a love-professional light novel. In this fast-paced situation, everyone is not here to read most of your chapters. It's not that you can't be depressed, but if you want to be happy, you have to set it up properly, with love as the main thing and career as a supplement, or career as the main thing, and love as the seasoning, rather than the plot you wrote that is mainly about depression. For this point, you can refer to Tokyo Sick Love Girlfriend or Healing Manual, Tokyo Medical Path, My Girlfriend is a Voice Actor. Except for some idiotic manipulations by the author of Tokyo Medical Path, the cool points of these works and the plot settings between career and love are worthy of the author's reference and study. Of course, the author of this book's emotional writing is good, at least it is top-notch. Also, if you want to write a light novel, write it well for me. You already have a system, and you are telling me about it. Reality is coming. You are telling me so much about a certificate. What is your system? You can share talent and absolute sense of sound in the front, but you can give it to me in the back because it is difficult to get a certificate, and you have brought up so many high-ranking officials. You There are so many high-ranking officials in MD, and it will be difficult for you to make up for it later in the plot. The laser cannon is more effective at scanning text than your system. Your system is the waste among wastes. The system's ability settings are too different before and after the plot, which is difficult to accept. It makes people feel that you, the author, may be a bit young, and I doubt whether you will do some super weird operations later. There may be a risk of thunderstorms. TMD, write your novel carefully for me. You, an idol, have little competition in the field of cultivating women with weight, so please work harder for me, bastard! When I first read it, it felt like I was watching Academy Idol (of course, I'm just Yun, I like Qin Gu Meiling). It felt quite interesting, but the lack of plot in the back caused all the previous plots to collapse. Fuck, I only read the novel to read the romance, sweet, twisted and exciting, not to be frustrated all the time. I'm tired from going to work, bastard! As of the current update, the author of the emotional drama is rated top-notch, the author of the pleasant plot design is La, and the overall evaluation of the book is medium. I no longer plan to read this book. I hope the author will learn from his experience in writing books in the future. I look forward to our meeting better when the author's second book comes out. (It's better to cut it directly, reset the plot, keep the previous plot, reset the deflated plot at the back, and adjust the system capabilities a little) I hope my comments will not be deleted by the author, this is my heartfelt words

For daily writing, don't get entangled in the principles of the system... This kind of thing itself cannot be solved. The more you get entangled, the more loopholes there will be. You said that he is here illegally and must be deported. So how did he enter the country in the first place and where should he be deported now? Can you explain it clearly? Even if you can explain it clearly, do readers want to read this... I suggest that this book be cut and rethink the core selling point, that is, what kind of experience and emotions can readers get from your book. I can only say that your narrative skills are sufficient for writing high-quality books, but your understanding of the subject matter is difficult to describe in one sentence...

Another one who has a literary problem, but fortunately it's not too serious. He wants to write his own thing, but the plot arrangement can only be said to be unsatisfactory.

The heroine is very cute, but the writing is a bit depressing, right? Most people just want to read some light love stories. . .

The outline of the book is completed. Honoka line outline is completed. No green and no corruption, manuscripts are saved, and there is no need for leave. If you like it, feel free to collect it. Pay attention to not getting lost, I love you.

The pace is too slow. After a few days of saving, the plot doesn't advance much.

There are too many commercial struggles in the future. How can I put it? It's impossible to like someone who comes here to become an idol. I hope to achieve a good balance.

Lord Buddha is deceiving you

How long do you plan to keep this jail story going?

It's the same as joining the Chinese army in 1949. The first few chapters look pretty good. I'll take another look 🤐

It looks a bit strange. Some of the characters are not the heroine, but the author deliberately amplified their emotions. It seems that the number of words is very low, and it makes people feel that the male protagonist may have sex with someone at any time. Very strange

The subject matter is very high, but the author's writing style is lacking, and there is something wrong with his thinking.

I've just read the latest chapter. It's well written and the story is interesting. However, I feel like Kuroda's portrayal of the villain is too silly.

Have you ever been an agent? Just write, take it for granted.

It feels like the author is immersed in his art and unable to extricate himself

The above is just for fun, I will still read it when it is put on the shelves.

Although the label has multiple female protagonists, there is currently only one female protagonist in the role. Is it because the plot has not advanced yet?

Wow, it's interesting to see what the emotional line and the small thoughts are, but I didn't expect that a villain can take up so much writing. I can't stand it after reading more than a hundred chapters. Logically speaking, an event of this length should be resolved within ten to twenty chapters. Too much writing has been spent, making this place look stinky and long. I can only say it is a pity. I can only say that the author needs to control this aspect a little more.

I have read Chapter 114, and my evaluation is - it is very interesting. I will order all of it. Thank you, the author.