Instance Cultivation: Senior Sister, Your Drop Rates Are Way Too High

The first chapter was about poisoning. I spent ten chapters chatting with my grandpa. I didn't touch the copy in the first ten chapters.

The protagonist is only 8 years old, and his family has already plotted against him. It's very tiring It's not that the author is bad at writing, there is indeed a reasonable logic, but it's tiring and unmotivated, and I can't see the selling point of the introduction.

Golden elixir monk, spiritual consciousness 10 miles away. Oh my god, this is so awesome.

There are too many inner dramas, the main plot is not advanced, and it is prioritized. Why not write a love story here?

There are too many dungeons and the game is too open. There are three dungeons that are only available in the background settings at the beginning, and then there are a bunch of new dungeons that provide various powerful rewards. As a result, there is no content to write about the development of the protagonist. He just tests various rewards in the dungeons to show off and gain experience, and then goes to reality to pretend to be a grandson and talk nonsense to NPCs. He said he wanted to go to the sect, but he still hadn't gone after so many chapters. There were a lot of rewards from various extremely powerful systems. So what else can you write after you really enter the sect? Qi training friends and enemies? They are all one-hit-and-done things, foundation-building ministry? Is it also possible to use the heaven-defying sword and various puppet spiritual beasts given by the system to unlock the unparalleled goods by just adding two days of experience? The golden elixir elder and the ancestor of Nascent Soul? They are also little cannon fodder that can be definitely caught by just swiping a bunch of copies. You should delete the big stuff in it. For example, you can draw fragments of magic weapons by completing dungeons. You have just started a few dozen chapters and you have already received a lot of foundation-building level rewards. Your magic weapon is an upgradable imitation of the Heaven-defying Lingbao. Are you using a useless Qi-level magic weapon used by ordinary monks that can only be obtained by clearing dungeons for many days? Selling spiritual stones? You already have countless ways to earn spirit stones, such as the 8,000 spirit stones you are planning to grab, and the family that can support multiple foundations and are ready to cultivate them vigorously. In the future, when you go to the sect, you are also ready to pretend to be a slap in the face and get a true talent that day, so what is the use of this function? The system is also too heaven-defying, with top-notch techniques, immortal weapons, artifacts, experience points, spiritual beasts that can grow, and powerful cultivation talents that can be obtained by randomly drawing a few prizes. The protagonist can get countless rewards in just a few days in the dungeon. It can be said that the protagonist only needs to rely on the system to ascend all the way from his hut, so why spend a lot of text and ink on the intrigues with the patriarch of the Foundation Establishment family? It was also written before that it is extremely difficult for Jin Dan to fight in sects. Small families outside have almost lost the possibility of Jin Dan, so they go to the sect. Then, after a few chapters, the system starts to easily give Jin Dan to the protagonist. However, the protagonist does not want to upgrade so fast. Golden elixir becomes worthless in the first few dozen chapters. The protagonist who practices qi has a lot of foundation-building level abilities in his hands, and he can also give guidance to the Jindan family. I'm afraid that after building the foundation, I can just use a few golden elixirs rewarded by the system to kill the Nascent Soul, and then when the protagonist's golden elixir is used, it will be even worse than the dog gods walking all over the place.

If you don't have a breaking point in the first three pictures, you basically don't need to read them. Now, except for the masters, who would read them slowly?

Wash it clean😏

It's been chapter 70 and I still haven't seen that senior sister with a high explosive rate...

In fact, I have only read the first few chapters, so I will only comment on the first 123 chapters. You use too many modifiers in the opening, which gives me the feeling that when I was writing essays in high school, I often added them in the middle, but you added them directly in the front, which gave people a very watery feeling. You can compare it with the one below, which is much simpler. The second point is that the protagonist talks to himself too much, as if he has to comment on everything and then add some inner monologue.

There's a lot of nonsense, if it's more concise, readers will run away less.