Rebirth 1979: Starting from an Encounter with the Fairy Mother

A man who lived for 60 years and was reborn. The progress of the content is too slow. There is no other content except having an affair with three women. It is a little off topic.

Your writing is very good. Compared with the current AI writing, it has a more human touch. It is the kind of writing that you can tell is written seriously at first glance. Very simple, but lacking in experience and design. You can write it slowly. Don't give up, you are very talented.

Finished reading, a little slow. Mainly in terms of plot, to be honest, the character setting, graphics, and sense of time are all fine, but the main line has not been determined yet. It seems that the protagonist has no clear goal. Looks a bit slow overall. The interaction with the supporting actresses was good and very touching. But the question remains, what is the main line? But your writing is good, and it doesn't affect the perception. It's just that it has little propulsion and feels a bit short-sighted. First of all, let me say that this is not a mistake. "The parents' shortcomings" are the most difficult to write, and it is even more difficult to write about the taste of life in daily life. But you have written the breath of life, which is very strong. The other problem is that you haven't figured out how to write this story yet, or in other words, what you thought when you first wrote it will be different from what you think now. This is personal progress. The progress in the first three chapters and what you wrote next is very fast. If we sum up our experience. For your next book, you should think about what the protagonist is going to do and what he is going to do in this era, and then do it immediately. You have also read Lao Hei's book. His goal is clear, and a plot loop is even formed in the first chapter. The goal is to marry a wife and have children, but before that there are financial problems, so people start to develop their careers in the second and third chapters. Then the superposition begins, the first big room. What you lack is such a goal, so the plot is spread out and the experience is stable. The first book has the greatest impact on the author, so he can write as much as he can.