Mysterious Mirror: The Immortal Path of the Jade Palace

It's not impossible to prove the true Qi leap, but adults won't believe it, and the Genshin Impact is not so kind. To offend the Yinsi for the protagonist's sake, you have to rely on the protagonist yourself, or have adults help, otherwise the end will be a firework, or sold to the Yin Division by the Genshin. The Genshin can really do such a thing. If you want to prove the true Qi Run after Ichima, you can, but the protagonist is not strong enough.

The writing is too scattered and scattered, with no story telling. I don't know what the paragraphs that suddenly appear in the middle are trying to tell.

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If the protagonist is set as a time traveler, and he has been cautious in the first life and has no backer and is killed, would it be better to restart the meeting in the second life? Pretending to be Tiansu. Some book club members heard that this book was written by indigenous people and they didn't even have the desire to read it Hey, let's write it down first. Originally, I wanted to write about the protagonist, Zheng Jin, and then let him awaken the memory of the earth.

It's too scattered, and I still don't know what the protagonist wants? You already have two magical powers. As for the feeling of being a native or not, it's actually fine. But if you already have two magical powers and don't know the nature of heaven, it won't work. It's still the same as not knowing anything. It's better not to be so quick to Zifu.

Every time I click in, I see that it's aboriginal and then leave. This time, I think it's time travel. Something doesn't look right. Where is the time travel? What's the use of changing your profile? Others will naturally know if they have traveled through time or space after seeing it.

It's impersonal, just like an assembly line. It's not interesting to read.

Leap Zhen Qi must be manifested after Ming Yang is proven, so what else is there to see?

For example, I didn't expect that the jade sign in Shengyang was for Qi recording at first, but then the Qi recording suddenly came out and I was confused Of course, if it was foreshadowing or something, just pretend I didn't say it.

It is indeed a bit scattered, as if it was divided into paragraphs and written separately, and then directly pieced together without adding transitional sentences or paragraphs. It should not be AI, or the AI ​​flavor is relatively weak. It is possible that AI is used in the description of the environment. I still have little experience in writing novels, so read it and revise it before posting it.