The Sword of Oath: Saving the World from Protecting Islan

A friend mentioned that a Taiwanese opened a book at Qidian, and came to support it out of curiosity. To briefly talk about my reading experience, rather than positioning this book as a "fantasy epic", I personally feel that it is currently more of a game system-type time-travel novel. At present, I have caught up with the latest chapter 2-24, and it can be seen that the author has put a lot of effort into building the world view. Whether it is the plane background, combat power level, race, country... And other settings, it can be seen that the author has put a lot of effort into it, and the overall framework is quite large-scale. In terms of writing style, the author is better at describing environmental scenery and external images. The scene has a sense of presentation and makes the world view more concrete. Of course there are some problems. Here are three points that I think are more important: 1. The plot lacks suspense: the current development of the story has gradually formed a fixed pattern-meet the enemy, the protagonist cheats, and wins. 2. Insufficient character characterization: Except for the protagonist (and AI assistant), the other characters have a relatively weak sense of existence. Most of the time, they are more like tools to promote the plot rather than flesh-and-blood characters. 3. The setting information is slightly dense: I call it "inverted setting". One of the advantages of this book is the grand background setting, but it also brings a problem: before the readers have fully digested the existing names and backgrounds, new forces and settings continue to be added. If the plot itself does not have enough sense of advancement, too many settings will easily make the reading rhythm more and more difficult. My personal suggestions for the follow-up: 1. Add more daily descriptions and dialogues between the protagonist and other characters (instead of talking to the AI ​​all the time). The novel is about people, without connections and emotions between people. It is difficult for readers to get involved in such a story. I saw that there was a sense of work in the back of playing a game and downloading a dungeon, and the system helped me calculate my results. 2. Try to break the fixed victory formula: If more uncertainties or twists can be added to some plots, such as failure, misjudgment, cost, etc., The tension of the story will be higher. In fact, the beginning part may have taken a long time to polish, and we can see better combat design and plot advancement. We may consider continuing that rhythm and writing style. 3. Dig deeper into the emotions and motivations behind the characters, for example: Li Aotian suddenly traveled through time, will he think about the reasons for the time travel? Does your life before time travel still affect your current choices? Hilda suddenly had to take on a heavy responsibility. Did she have any fear and struggle in her heart? How did losing her parents as a child affect her? If the inner layers of these characters can be supplemented, the characters will be more three-dimensional and readers can more easily relate to them. Looking forward to the subsequent development of the plot, I also wish the author a successful completion of his first work. Come on!

Many years ago, the first fantasy online novel I read was "The Amber Sword". This novel gave me a huge shock at the time. Special cheers for the author, and best wishes for him to write his own fantasy epic!

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The level is limited, and it seems to make people feel a little physically uncomfortable. It has a system of its own, and from time to time it makes a few inappropriate words with bad breath. It's hard to imagine what kind of person would like to set AI to this mode. He appears injured and weak, but he always uses some big jumping and killing moves. He has a strong sense of transition, which is similar to the special forces character design of the protagonist in the early novels. . . The characters on stage are pale and unconvincing, and they serve the plot purely. The villain detects the protagonist through observation. Being taken away by a sword, not even a single spell can be released. . . There is no approach to the process either. . .

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After reading the first five pictures, the traces of amber flow are full, and I hope to see different content in the following.