There Is a Little Fishman in the Dungeon

I wish everyone good luck, good health, and all the best in the Year of the Horse Happy every day

Your first chapter is full of questions. I suggest you finish talking about one thing before talking about something else. For example, when encountering a piranha, you should first write about how you tried your best to escape, and then write about how the protagonist traveled through it. Escape is the main plot, time travel should be briefly mentioned, and the world view will be slowly added in subsequent chapters. But your first chapter is completely the other way around. Then there is the plot of escaping from the piranha. You should write about how terrifying the piranha is. By killing creatures of the same kind or the same strength randomly, it is described as an invincible creature in the early stage. No one else can avoid the piranha attack, but the protagonist escapes. Isn't this a little cool? Of course, if you want to feel more comfortable, you can write that the protagonist paid some price, such as being seriously injured before escaping. Then I will write that it is not too late for a gentleman to take revenge for ten years, start practicing fiercely, or borrow a golden finger to get rid of the piranha. This is a great point. Of course this is a bit cliche, you can try another approach. Didn't the characteristics of piranha have already been described before? Likes to kill creatures randomly and then devour them. You can write that the protagonist obtains a snatching skill through golden fingers, and the piranha kills one, and you steal one by sneaking. After you rob it, you devour it to increase your own strength. This cycle continues until you surpass the piranha, and finally rob it again in front of the piranha. After the piranha saw it, it was somewhat intelligent and must have known that the guy in front of it was the guy who had been robbing it of food, and then it became furious. At this time, the protagonist grinned and slapped the piranha to death. There is some excitement, and Goldfinger also displays his abilities and reflects the character of the protagonist. This completes a short chapter. The most important point is that you must learn to segment. Your first chapter made my eyes hurt. If you don't know how to separate them, just use a comma and change the line. Of course these are just my suggestions. After all, I have never been a fishman, so I can't write blindly.

Others tend to get worse as they write in the later stages. If you start off poorly and don't look at the plot connection later, you can still read each copy individually and the story is still normal

I am the Fishman King, give me all your votes

A book where progress can be seen with the naked eye, and the author is also a hard-working type. From the beginning of flat line drawings and fast-paced running accounts to the more qualified descriptions and narratives now, you can really see that the author is working hard to learn and change for the sake of readers. The subject matter is correct and the plot is average. The first three chapters are passable (introducing the world view, ambush pen, cheats and plug-ins) The middle part is completely messy (there are so many plots in Wugui that can be written, but I chose a "realistic" environment where it is easiest to make mistakes) The latest blood clan plot has good battle descriptions and scene descriptions, but there are a lot of repeated words, which tests the vocabulary and description ability. This is a good first book and deserves encouragement. At least they are not the ones who don't listen to anything they say. You can see the author's efforts and progress. But I still have to say that it was too late to enlighten me. All the readers have ran out. Now I am still reading in single digits.

After reading the first seven chapters, I can only identify it as a light novel style book. It has a bit of a two-dimensional adventure in another world. It should be submitted to the light novel channel, not fantasy.

Looks good, let's wait and see

Sewer mermaid? Where? 😍😍😍

Although the showdown is very unpleasant to watch, it's still good to keep up the good work.

Will he become handsome later? Will he become a mermaid? Humans and snakes work too!

The cover is nice and the title of the book is pretty good, but I haven't read the story yet.

Come on, everything is difficult at the beginning. I hope the follow-up will be better and better.