Starting from a Peasant Family, Martial Arts and Mystical Knowledge

I still feel a bit suffocated from the beginning till now. I feel a bit unhappy when I watch it. It's too slow and I'm not very popular. If it continues like this, I won't be very popular. I can't get high and I don't feel good about it.

In fact, one of the characteristics of your book is that the emotional scenes are interesting. This is an advantage. There is no need to stop eating because of choking. But it's best not to overwhelm the focus. Telling the story itself well (especially the outline is in place) is the core competitiveness.

The author gets better the more he writes, but I think sometimes he should hold back a little and not let the characters always tell jokes that don't make sense. Create a glib character who likes to joke normally. But in your previous book, a guy who likes to talk slang appears from time to time. No matter what his identity is, the protagonist also likes to talk. Then when they meet, they use slang to chat about casual things, and talk about serious things with slang metaphors, which makes the whole book seem out of tune.

I just don't understand, why should such a good writing style write about an aborigine?

Read more, write more, and absorb more. Many unknown authors suddenly turned their lives around with one book, such as the newspaper seller and Foxtail's Pen. I feel that the author's writing style has the potential to become a god. It is humorous and fluent. You just need an opportunity to settle down.

The writing style of "Eating Meat" is playful, the characters are vivid and lovely, and the daily life is written extremely well. However, from the story outline to the fighting scenes, it is always lukewarm and lacks the refreshing feeling of "exploding silver bottles and water slurry bursting out". I look forward to improvements in the next book. Btw: What was the title of the fanfic book you wrote before?

Why is it the old man taking care of a little granddaughter again? Is this some kind of bad taste?

Have you finished writing the outline? I'd rather you write slower than finish it.

It is only reasonable to practice slowly and step by step in this way. The writing is better than the previous book.

It's well written and still so comfortable. I just hope to learn from the previous experience and lessons. It's enough to have the emotional point between men and women, grasp the scale, and the power system to be logical and self-consistent.

I fully ordered the last book and couldn't stand a third of it. There is no main line, it's too frivolous. I hope this one will not be like the previous one

You who don't eat meat didn't notify you of the new book when you published it, and you didn't notify the old one I didn't know until now that the new book was published And when I saw the new book, I was already eunuch Do you think I can read it or not?

He's wearing nothing, he looks like a native

There is humor in the bones, and the overall structure is quite good. It would be a pity to cut it off.

What the author lacks is a systematic sorting out of the world system and the cultivation system. The daily writing written by the author can only be valuable if it is advanced within a larger framework. Otherwise, it's just a running account and I can't keep up. This book is obviously too simple about cultivation and the world system, or maybe the author didn't write about it, but it's not attractive. It is recommended to learn from the training systems of some mature works, and don't copy many world systems that add a little bit of martial arts training novels that are very bad.

If you want to cut it, do it as soon as possible. The pace of this book is too slow, so the results are poor. I don't understand what the author is thinking. For example, in these two chapters, the male protagonist obviously had the Yin Fish born after entering the Mysterious Realm, so he should have tried to break through the realm early, but in the end, he was arranged to do other things... How much do you have to write about the nine days of Yin Fish? Chapter 😦, even just saying "nine days later" will do. Although the previous part is slow, I can still read it, but yesterday when I saw that the male protagonist was not arranged to break through, I really wanted to give up. This kind of dragging method is simply making people's scalp numb.

After reading about 10 chapters, I really couldn't help but want to comment. I feel that the author has really improved by leaps and bounds. I have watched the refugee above him practice martial arts. Although it is not bad, it can only be regarded as a rough and rough novel with many flaws. But this one is really different. I feel that the author's writing power has greatly improved. Not only the characters are well portrayed, but the plot is also well controlled. It actually makes me feel like reading a martial arts version of the Mortal Cultivation of Immortality. If the author has maintained the current quality and written most of it, then this year's 12 Heavenly Kings will definitely be a hit.

The main character is named after him. Every time the main character talks, he feels a deep feeling.

The ending of the previous book The Refugee was very rushed, but at least it was anticlimactic, and this one was cut off straight away. Disappointed

Boss, you haven't released your new book yet, it's already the Chinese New Year

Is this subject difficult to write about and readers are tired of it? This last book is considered the end of this theme.

The author's writing skills are excellent, but he keeps farming in the beginning. No one wants to read this kind of book with a grinding start, and the protagonist's identity has no sense of identity. The author's next book will be a book where he kills decisively and decisively at the beginning, and he will be a god.

Not bad, not bad. The writing is really good. What I wrote is also pretty good. Do any book friends want to take a look? Support each other together

I am first

This author is very good at writing. Why is there no score? I read 10 chapters and I feel that it is no worse than the copywriting. And this kind of start with a strong personal touch is a bit like a flower father-in-law, right?

I really like your books and have subscribed to them. Recently I also want to write a book. Can I imitate the opening chapter of your book "Farmer's Son"?