National Martial Arts: Use Dragon Fist to Become a Saint in the Troubled Times of the Republic of China!

The writing is okay, but the character design is wrong. All the character traits of the protagonist are indigenous, but the setting is that he is a time traveler, which is contradictory.

The advantages and disadvantages are clear. Advantages: The writing is solid, with a bit of Republican style and movie texture, and the visuals are very strong. The setting and plot so far are not cliché, and it is good to calm down. Disadvantages: It is verbose, not like the rhythm of online articles, and too much Shanghainese affects the reading experience.

The writing is a bit too far-fetched in order to gain momentum, and the time traveler is written as the kind of person who even among the aborigines is considered mentally ill.

How to say it? The setting is pretty good, but the language is rubbish.

Don't use Qianlong, just write it like a wild boar and run rampant. Borrowing loan sharks is even more ridiculous. In such a big city, Shanghai only has this one clinic? He happens to be a black-hearted person? Didn't he understand the environment after traveling through time?

Is the protagonist a time traveler and a golden finger? Why do you feel like an idiot? You might as well write it as an aborigine. A time traveler written like this is also a talent.

Chapter 31 It's too deliberate. I would rather the protagonist endure it to the end. The sincere mansion is deep. The dragon can be big or small. When he was young, the boss of the house was close to his ears. When he was old, he could call the wind and rain and stir up the world.

The protagonist's personality is so weird that he doesn't look like a real person

Online novels are generally aimed at readers from all over the country, so try to use dialects as little as possible to reduce reading barriers. Now I don't want to continue after reading a few lines.

I saw the Qing Gang looking for the protagonist to give an explanation. There is really no big word. If the skin on your body is useless, shouldn't you just hit it? What is the martial arts novel you wrote? So many opportunities. Do you end up looking like a loser? I don't understand the idea. Don't know what kind of martial arts you learned?

Only 4 people including me are following this book. This book is about to be cut.

The realm setting is pretty good, but it's so frustrating that anyone can step on it a few times.

Written specifically for people in Shanghai?

① The number of chapters in the novel is still too small. It can be seen that it has its own ideas, and there are small ingenuity and designs in some places. But if you want to hide the dragon out of the abyss, you have to expand the pond into an abyss and unfold the design. ② There are too many dialects in the early stage, and the creation and communication of the supporting characters are also full of dialects, which will appear stiff and deliberate. It is true that dialects can shape specific characters, but the living environment of the protagonist determines that it is impossible to have only one dialect. After all, there are three religions and nine streams, mainly Mandarin. Only by using dialects well can you show your skills. To show the environment of a specific era, not only the language, but also the living habits and environment can be written. ③The protagonist must have his own circle and trajectory. I know that the protagonist has filial piety, but he cannot always revolve around his mother. At present, the three-point and one-line formula of selling newspapers, practicing martial arts, and going home to take care of his mother will always seem to have lost its aura. Overall, it is good. The visuals are sufficient, and the sense of martial arts can be deepened. If you look at it calmly, it is a novel that is not conventional and has its own systematic highlights.

Nice writing, keep it up 🌹

It's very interesting. Don't overdo it, author.

It's a pity that the pace is steady but slow, and it takes a long time to read this book. Reading this book feels like enjoying life slowly, very slow, boring and boring.