Church, Empire, Novelist

I just have time to roughly write down the logical issues in the first three chapters. The protagonist is 25 years old. Normally, his grandmother is at least 70-80 years old, and it is normal to be over 80. An old man of this age will lose half his life after a fall. The protagonist works, his sister goes to school, and his father is out of town. Who usually takes care of her? The protagonist even asked her to go home from the hospital alone at night. How dare you? After discovering the "time travel coin", the protagonist and his father unreservedly believed what the high school student sister wrote in her diary, even though it was known that the coin turned his sister into a vegetative state. Without any testing or research, they decided to turn his brother into a vegetative state, and firmly believed that his brother could bring his sister back through time. The protagonist's father divorced in his early years and went to work in other provinces. His sister had no father or mother when she was in high school. Then he told the protagonist that "a family is a family when we are together" and used this as a reason to agree to the protagonist becoming a vegetative state. By the end of the first chapter, the four members of the family were randomly arranged and combined, and no two people were together. Didn't the author find it funny when he wrote it? The first thing that bears the brunt after time travel is that the other world speaks English. Generally speaking, the unspoken rule of the other world literature is that the other world has its own language. Since the author has written about the other world speaking English, he must explain the reason. The bigger problem is that the protagonist writes a "diary" in Chinese and carries the diary with him. I don't know what the protagonist means by doing this, and I don't know what the author means by writing it this way. But if you tear it up and burn it after adding a sentence, I will treat it as if you have worked hard. In addition, there are a lot of small problems in Chapter 2. For example, there were almost no 6-7-story buildings in the Victorian era. The protagonist went out to buy a dictionary but had no idea how much money he had with him. He took a gun without checking whether there were bullets in the gun. There were also a few problems with the random use of exclamation marks. The third chapter starts with a seven- or eight-story building on the street. Didn't the previous chapter also have six or seven stories? Then I learned how to count money when I bought a dictionary. Seriously, what is the meaning of this plot? Can you tell the readers how to write shilling in English? After that, the protagonist suddenly can understand the newspaper. This is reasonable because the protagonist bought a dictionary, but why does the protagonist read the newspaper in front of the dictionary in the cafe? Not only that, the protagonist also has to write a "diary" in Chinese while reading a newspaper in a cafe. And the protagonist's thinking process is too "one way", it is completely "if A, then it will definitely be B, then it will be C, then it will be D". A normal thinking process should be "If A, then it will definitely be B, if not A, then it may be C or D." 800 words, just the first three chapters, readers are at a loss for words.

It's very well written, please encourage us and recommend yourself (Goblin is obsessed with the heart)

A eunuch? In this case, there is no need to watch it.

In fact, it's a pity that it was only listed in the recommended position so soon... Even when I saw it in the recommended position, it had already been discontinued Tsk... If it is because I can't write it down, it feels like it is too early to make a conclusion. An article with many settings such as Somatosensory Fantasy and Mystery of the West is originally a long article.