Lingyixiantu

The author's writing is very good. Whether it is from the beginning or the content, it can be seen that the author has put his heart into it. I hope the author will continue to work hard and write better content. In addition, I am also looking forward to the subsequent plot. I wonder when the author will update? ? Can you tell me? Hahahaha

But what? This beginning is a bit too slow, but if you look at the author, you can see that he has a lot of ideas. It depends on the author's attitude, so I voted for this But I still recommend catering to the market a little bit.

Of course, if you delete your comment, I can't do anything about it. After all, you won't listen to any opinions, so I don't think you can achieve anything.

The third golden chapter is too boring and fails to attract attention, even if it is slow. In the third golden chapter, you have to tell a short story, and then highlight the characteristics of the protagonist, or have some good settings in terms of world view and plot, so that readers will continue to read. Relatively speaking, the emotional transition is a bit abrupt and fails to arouse the reader's emotions.

The author should hurry up and hurry up. Aren't there two chapters left today? 😡

Come on, I know you are a newbie, but since you are advertising everywhere, you should be prepared to be scolded, instead of just coming up to criticize someone after they say something about you.

Are there two chapters updated today?

Although I am also a newbie and a newbie, I signed a contract at least. After reading most of them, let's make some suggestions. One is that the current book title introduction must reflect your selling point. Your book title can tell you part of the selling point, maybe you want to follow the mortal genre or the anti-routine genre. This is okay, but your subsequent design cannot show this feeling, which will make readers feel like they are being deceived. The introduction has no selling point at all. The second thing is that your story has no emotional explosion. There is a wedge at the beginning. This kind of slow-paced and useless thing will just pass your article if the editor reads it. Also, your opening chapter has no hook. We generally say that this kind of article has no "hook", and readers will not bite the hook and continue reading. Finally, if you just want to write the story in your heart, then treat me as fart, but if you want to make money and get recognition, a very cruel fact is that online writing is a commercial activity, and your writing is your product. In my opinion, your product is substandard and you have no share in the market. If you haven't signed a contract for this book for 200,000 yuan, I suggest you cut it off. Reading more books on the rankings to learn is what you should do now.

The writing is quite good. I should give more encouragement to the new writers.

Good looking, please read "Chen Shang Sword Journey"!

340 Recommendation votes, the editor still hasn't signed the contract?

After reading four chapters, I didn't find any system elements in this world. It was obviously an ordinary legend. Just by looking at the title, I thought it was a group travel system text. I had to change the title if I wanted to sign a contract.

It's quite interesting. The ones I've found recently all come with some kind of system. I just want to find one without a system. And I also hate Gong Dou.

The first picture of the text is the feeling of a child learning to walk, try to let AI polish it

After looking at the author's setting, world view, history and battles, they all seem to be very detailed and unfolding. He is very thoughtful and qualified, but... The exposure of the new book is very low, at least 100,000 yuan will be available. Be patient, slow-burning books are even more difficult to sign. You must know that Mortal Cultivation of Immortality was still in the 30s and 40s at the time. I just picked it up, and Xuanjian also picked it up through cross-fertilization Come on, author, you need to fully develop the world view. As long as the general outline is good and you promote it more, you can always get ahead. Now it is very difficult to find a book that is not bad in the later stage. The author wants to be able to express all the twelve major states and stories. In that case, no matter what In the end, someone will like it Exposure is very low, and signing a contract is difficult, but I still hope you can persist. After all, everyone still likes to read books with more words Come on

I watched the latest one for 20 minutes and commented: The beginning is too slow. Although the setting is good, there is no climax in the previous chapters. Even the first fight scene only passed three or two moves. I feel helpless. I will wait for this new martial arts chapter. If there is no high-level performance, I will give up.

I have read the battles in the latest two chapters, and they are indeed hand-wringing, but why do you describe the battles with so many dialogues? The battles must be described with a sense of imagery, or else you should describe the shocked dialogue of the bystanders. The dialogue you describe is of the fighting men talking non-stop. Do readers watch you talk or watch you fight? You are doing this to please both sides.

I don't know if the author has read the news yet, but I'm posting it first... I've probably finished scanning the first five chapters after the revision (the first chapter was a quick read, and the next four chapters were just skipped reading). I feel that there are several obvious problems. Here are three: First, there are a lot of unfamiliar information points and settings, and many of them are not explained on the spot. The beginning of the chapter is about the title of the king, the posthumous title, the treasury, the ancestral precepts, the opening of fairyland, and the twelve continents. These information points involve various systems of economy, politics, ability, etc. In the worldview. The author may be familiar with this, but it is all unfamiliar information to the readers. The beginning of the online novel requires readers to read it smoothly. Unless they are a great god like 🦑, it is easy to dissuade readers. Two, the emotional flow is stiff and the sense of substitution is poor. No, this is only the beginning of five chapters. I haven't even become familiar with the character of the protagonist Song Yu, so why have I started to awaken myself and start to recite poems and emotions😨... Although it is not impossible to write this way, the writing power is extremely high, so it is recommended to revise it. Three, rhythm issue. The current opening of this chapter gives me the feeling that the author is in a hurry and is eager to tell the wonderful story that will follow, so now the opening chapter is full of plot settings and summary of the plot content. The intervals between each information point for readers to digest the information have been greatly compressed, making the first chapter not fast but chaotic... In fact, many settings are not necessary to appear now.

After taking a look, there are traces of AI polishing, but not much has been modified. Why do you feel this way? It's just watery. The things polished by AI are very watery and mechanical. I just found out that a level 5 author also polished it with AI. If more than 70% of Suzaku is yellow, it is suspicious. It is suspected that large areas are polished and modified. It's difficult for an unknown person to sign a contract with AI. The starting point is very double-standard.