Greenery: Absolute Vision

After reading more than ten chapters, I personally feel that this book is not interesting at all. The protagonist does not have any athletic temperament at all, but looks like a weak and weak man. Teenagers have no energy at all. This is not a rebirth stream. He is always silent and never speaks. I don't know what the point of this book is. This is competitive sports. Boys are full of hormones, making them feel like little pains. Is this a river carp?

The first part of the story is quite right. The protagonist goes through a lot of hardships and then becomes more frustrated and courageous and continues to transform. However, the more I read later, the more I feel that the protagonist has no blood, especially in the chapters where the brand controls the male protagonist's life. The male protagonist has no academic ability as an athlete. He is like a rag doll at the mercy of others. In the end, he betrays his pro-Mei who accompanied him, which is disgusting 😅

The latest girlfriend misunderstanding problem, to put it nicely, is described as a detailed plot, but in fact it is a literary youth. It is understandable that the author wants to write about the growth of the protagonist as a teenager, but today's readers are not so attentive. Think of yourself as Messi, purely in love with Bai Yueguang. Writing about a playboy like Cristiano Ronaldo is popular, after all, everyone is an LSP! Having a harem is the kingly way, but even if you don't have a harem, you still have to be a romantic figure.

The age issue has not been resolved. I have no desire to read anymore. How to write about the growth cycle in a large space at first + I love to show off my writing skills (AI taste). There is no passion or excitement. Put the growth cycle in the middle of the passion and insert it little by little. Attract readers and retain readers. This is the important thing.

In other words, stop writing sports articles and write other types of articles. Your style is really not suitable for sports writing. Without the passion of sports writing, there are very few competitions. It's like sports is just a profession for the protagonist. He just solves various problems in the profession and then improves himself. Other sports articles should be a bit passionate, but there should be no competition at all. A lot of things can be added to sports articles, but sports need to occupy the majority, and most people and things need to revolve around this. Football-related things are like a running account, without passion or blood. Moreover, the protagonist does not have any vitality unique to young people and looks lifeless.

The author's literary youth disease is too serious. As a core player in the youth training, he has not received any guidance on speaking to the media. He also has a bunch of fragile teammates who don't look like players. If he starts to isolate a core metronome just because of one sentence, then he simply shouldn't play football. It's not suitable.

You don't want to show off at first, but when you have a sudden burst of inspiration and suddenly write more than 20 manuscripts, and complete them in one go, everyone can't help but laugh, but I can't spoil it yet, damn it Share the American barbecue you had today, guess how much it cost

I gave up. If you don't know how to write emotional scenes, let's not write them. We just had a relationship in the first two chapters and we are about to break up in the last two chapters. Did the football article go astray? This is the least passionate novel in the core of the midfield.

Author, it's best to pin your explanation to the top or change the text, otherwise it will be too easy to persuade people to quit. I said it was withdrawn because of this plot and because of the lack of books. I came back to read it and thought it was okay. Author, you are not at the level of screening readers and washing fans.

I dare to bet with my head that I don't dare to write a time-based football novel. The only advantage is that I can directly block you for making random changes 😁

There is no shortage of foreign stars. Writing about foreign football players is difficult to resonate.

It's 6:23 in the morning when I type this. First of all, I would like to apologize. As a newcomer facing this kind of torture for the first time, my emotions are indeed a bit unsettled. The problem with the first three or four chapters really lies with me. I was a little too immersed in the atmosphere of the emotional drama, which caused me to deviate from the main line of the competitive article. In fact, I originally saved a lot of manuscripts later on. To be honest, I was really reluctant to delete them. After all, they were all hard work. But looking back now, those criticisms were right. If they were not deleted, the problem would only be bigger. The second is thanks. Thank you to the familiar book friends in the comment area for your accurate criticism. When I saw those comments at 2 o'clock last night, I felt like the sky was falling. But when you calm down and think about it carefully, everyone's opinions are objective and true. And this is precisely the feedback I want to get most when writing this novel. I am not afraid of criticism, I am afraid that no one will care about me. Here I would like to express my special thanks to book friends for their stubborn QAQ. Although he scolded me the hardest in the comment area, he turned around and gave me monthly votes, recommendation votes, and rewards. If it weren't for these sticks and carrots, I might have thought of discontinuing the book or even cutting the book last night. Thanks. I would also like to thank all the book friends who have supported me during this period Finally, about the update. Didn't sleep that night. I overturned the saved manuscript and updated four chapters. I tried my best to give everyone a pure and exciting game. As for what the style has become, you can read it in the text. A small request: If you think this is right after reading it, or think it is well written, I hope you can give me a little encouragement - whether it is a chapter review, a recommendation vote or a monthly pass. If you feel there is still a problem, please point it out in time. I'm a newbie, but I consider myself a fairly good writer who listens to opinions. It was dawn and I went to sleep. I'll get up tonight and read everyone's feedback.

It feels pretty good... As for the emotional scenes, I can feel that the author wants to write them as delicately as possible. For example, the chat with the children of the youth team described after the breakup, and the contrasting performances in the team, I also think it is quite good, but these become a bit like unit dramas. It can indeed be said that through these performances, the protagonist's thoughts can be seen, but what is the protagonist's psychology? We don't know, or how he plans to face his girlfriend in the future. Including the breakup because of Isabel, what was the protagonist thinking at the time? We only know that he felt the expansion of vanity, but he was still being comforted and forgiven by his girlfriend and brother because of the news, but he chose to kiss Isabel because of vanity. This contrast needs to be described in detail or in a way that people can understand. (Unless I am reading a stream of consciousness novel) I know that the character arc is expressed in one incident, but when the protagonist faces such a relatively large fluctuation, we want to know what the protagonist is thinking, otherwise we will feel strange to him and we will not be able to resonate with him.

It is very different from the mainstream football novels on the market. Although it has a "literary youth" temperament, it is this delicate writing style and exploration of the characters' hearts that make the story particularly interesting and interesting. Football is not only about winning and losing, but also about emotions and stories. You have caught this point, reader. Sorting out the schedule questions you asked (such as who is in the Champions League group) will make reading smoother. But please be sure to maintain your unique narrative style - that is the soul of the work. I look forward to your adjusted and clear schedule. I also hope you will continue to write such literary-quality football stories.

Unbelievable, 32-34 is a plot that humans can come up with.

Your novels are not as exaggerated as reality. They are too bland.

The characters have no emotions and are lifeless

The timeline is a mess. Ibrahimovic was at Ajax in 2007? If it's a fiction, just change the name. If it's based on a real timeline, check the information.

The author carefully wrote a story about a geek, and it was very interesting to read more than ten chapters. The protagonist's sense of space is really amazing, and he also has some prophetic attributes. The part where he took his girl to IKEA to buy things for a bookshelf and row a boat was really funny. Finally, I want to say that structural mechanics is my eternal nightmare in this life. After reading this book, the three-gang film of the trench came to chase me in my dreams again 😭

I don't dare to invest. Generally speaking, I can invest. The content of the novel is generally about growth. There is no sense of immersion to be honest. . . The plot is too protracted, and some conflicts must be written. . . I don't feel it. The novel does not feel like it was written to satisfy readers. It feels a bit literary and youthful. Alas, if this kind of content comes again later, I may not be able to read it.

It's like reading the story of a man named Floris. Feeling like Harry Potter

Seeing the interaction between the male and female protagonists, building bookshelves, and rowing boats is heartwarming and interesting.

Author, you write about the relationship between brothers as if you are gay.

I didn't read the book and just read the introduction. Didn't I understand? Shouldn't you buy lottery tickets first and then speculate in stocks?

Writing about the 10-year timeline drives me crazy, the Champions League, then the World Cup. Then there is my own business line, which is now in a mess, and I am working frantically to look up information. The timing is really difficult to figure out, and the recent updates may not be particularly fast. Writing new things is really a headache.

It is well written and different from ordinary football articles. Come on!

I'm reading chapter 22 now, but I don't know how tall the protagonist is?

Write the same content in English, and then use Chinese to write down the word count. Isn't this a waste of money?

Come on👏Vote for monthly support (Also, will the protagonist end up in Real Madrid😃)

Is there no update today? It's urgent 😭