Demon Slayer: I Come to Save the Butterfly Ninja

Although I think the protagonist's ability setting is good, and I really like this sense of growth, and the identity of the ghost also makes the plot development full of dramatic conflicts, the flaws of this book are too serious. Since it is a Demon Slayer fanfic, it should be obvious what readers want to see, and there are too many original characters in this book, seriously squeezing out the roles of the original characters, and traveling back to the original world every certain chapter, making the plot development very unsmooth. I really feel that this setting is too bloated and cannot find any positive impact on the reading experience.

Not to mention that your protagonist's combat power is so ridiculous that he feels like he can't beat anyone, and that your plot is too slow. You only have to go find your sister in more than 20 chapters, and you're still wandering around after more than 100 chapters. The main world is inexplicably getting involved with state departments again, moving here and there, I don't know what I'm writing about.

Mr. Ye, even I can't see through your future, but everything seems to have gotten better since you came here... So, please, I will be the bait. After the explosion, please, please let the ending of this story... This is not possible, I want a perfect ending. Escape quickly, it's winding! Take Xiao Ren and run away quickly, Xiao Ren, my sister will not be here in the future... I am here, not a single pair of butterfly wings is missing. Arnold, does Mr. Ye think my hair color... No, you are very cute. Ye Jun, it seems that I came at the wrong time Hmm... No, you came at the right time, you are all my wings You are so greedy, Ananda... The ending of the story is perfect because of you, but there is a limit to the lifespan of mortals, and the lifespan of stripes is even more... No problem, I will solve it Because, I called Fat Cat Xiao Fugui in the past

The writing is incomprehensible, that's all I can say.

Don't update constantly, write slowly, the ideas and creativity are very good

Don't teach bad children👿

The preface is a bit inconsistent with the postscript, but I can barely understand what is being written.

It's awkward and not good-looking. I might as well watch anime.

Author, have you ever thought about how to write the ending? The time of ghost killing is very special, and the best ending is that all pillars are short-lived.

The painting is of white pupils. It is a bit difficult to describe the brown pupils. It is more juvenile (actually I don't know what to draw, so I tried my best to draw it according to some descriptions in the book)

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Indeed, write slowly, don't be in a hurry, just by the time you get to the next level 4, you won't be so weak in terms of strength.

Why are my eyes and pupils shrinking all the time... You can frown, raise your eyebrows, blink, move slightly, be surprised, be stunned, etc., Just don't keep repeating the shrinking (the modifier is nothing else, you can ask the AI ​​to send you thirty or fifty to use in turn) There are also ghosts who are close to the bottom of the Demon Slayer World... What are the ghosts... It's too dramatic (it's better to write about newly transformed cannibals, murderers, evil ghosts, etc.)

Aren't you still going to drink Tianyin's Xuesu Ye?