Starting from Crossing the Highway Traffic Jam

The plot is really good, but your writing is too slow... Let's not mention some "small problems" such as the simple description of Shui, which is 300 to 400 words, and the character's lines that bring intelligence. You should know what readers want to see, right? Don't go off topic, okay? Twenty chapters are needed to describe the plot of fighting a villain, and two chapters are needed to describe the intrigue between two women This is not a fantasy novel. The main writer beats the young one and the old one comes. After all the plots are finished, he still needs to take stock of the harvest Both Women vying for favor has been written in just a few strokes, everyone can understand it, and it will not be endless to write. If you want to portray the characters too much, you will be self-defeating. Everyone is here to see the survival in the wilderness. The other content is just seasoning and should not overwhelm the guest.

With your writing style, I will definitely not order it if you put it on the shelf. It will just run away. There are too few more. Two books a day feel like nothing.

There are too many descriptive and qualifying words. It reads like a bad drama. There is no urgency to survive at all. It would be better if the writing was more concise.

The rhythm of the plot is good, and the writing has a complicated AI flavor, which is okay.

Use less AI quilt, it was a good story, but it turned out to be artificial

It was okay at first, but then as soon as I got settled, I couldn't stop thinking about women, or the mother of a child. It was so disgusting that I couldn't stand it anymore, and then I started to lust after every few pictures. Is it interesting?

It's true that the temple demon is very powerful, and Chi Qian is a bastard I suggest you write another week of intrigue 🙂 to see how many people will read it

This book is one of the most outstanding among the group travel books during this period. My personal taste is better than that of communities, schools, and urban villages.

It slipped away, and there was a lot of drama behind it. It was either intrigues or "love and affection" between men and women. It was said that the plot was about to advance, but it turned out that there were not even two chapters left, hey! I'm back to writing about the entanglement between a group of men and women again and again. Either you match me or I match you. Those who don't know think I'm watching "A Day in the Dating Corner" 😅

As long as there is organization, people are the most important resource, just like the means of production, they keep snowballing.

The beginning is about food and grass, but the rest is full of poison. Especially after the fifty or sixty chapter, everything is basically written around women. The dialogue is awkward, forget it, and the car is spinning around - it goes on and on, where are you building? It doesn't advance the plot, it's all about the dialogue, and I wrote a lot of it. The result is: the plot is stuck in the same place.

Excluding the AI ​​flavor mentioned earlier, the problem found so far is that it is more logical for the author to write about human psychology when there is no protagonist. The protagonist seems to have a halo as soon as he appears, but he is not particularly outstanding. A symbol of fairness and justice, but his behavior is to distinguish between close and distant, bitch, and the praise is forceful and blunt. The author can try to rationalize it by writing about the protagonist's psychology. Don't always keep silent and decide on one thing and everyone will praise it. Doing this every time seems to be smart, but in fact it is hard to brag. And it's already dozens of chapters older, and it actually includes a harem battle...

This is too boring. There is almost no plot advancement. It has only been a few days and there are over a hundred chapters.

I only wrote two chapters about looking for a woman, and then there is another chapter about internal issues. Readers have paid to read it. You can just write it for free. It will be difficult if you don't push the main plot no matter how superficial it is.

Is it popular to wear group clothes now? I saw a lot of them. They are worn in the whole city, in villages in the city, in communities, and in schools 🙂

There are more than thirty chapters, including group travel, eagle hunting, finding a camp, building a home, deer hunting, wolf hunting, and a rain It can be completed in about 10 chapters, and some embellishment paragraphs of human feelings and sophistication have been added.

The author's writing is good. The advantage is that it is generally logical, there are not many poisonous points, and it is quick to fill in the holes. The disadvantage is that there are too many modifying adjectives and body language descriptions. It means too much nonsense and lack of knowledge. This is a common problem among liberal arts college students. The book about the hotel and the book about the hotel belong to the second echelon of this genre. In the book about the hotel, the author writes about group portraits and collapses, and the protagonist is a passerby, but the writing style makes up for this shortcoming. The first echelon is the Abyss book, the writing and outline are no problem. Already read and looking forward to raising gu

This second paragraph seems to have too many modifiers, which feels very troublesome

After Chapter 48, it gets weirder and weirder. Forget about the inexplicable conflicts. Every time the protagonist or the bus driver gives a "speech", the words they say are full of a middle-class feeling. It's so embarrassing that you can dig out the three rooms and one living room, including the words he said after going to save someone.

Why is there a little girl at the beginning? In what era is this still popular?

The Holy Mother's article writes about people so well, and there are no sacrifices in the wild.

Come on, there are more words, so people will read it, but the first free chapter is too bland, I wouldn't have read it if I wasn't in a book shortage, the subsequent plot is okay, overall it's okay, I'm talking about Holy Mother, I'm just a troll.

There are now more than 200 chapters, and it's getting better and better. Come on, author!

A normal brown bear weighs more than 600 kilograms, and if it expands five times, it will be more than 3 tons. When faced with a modern compound bow, an African elephant weighing more than 5 tons can penetrate the stomach with just one arrow. The elephant bleeds to death soon after. For carbon-based flesh creatures, the power of modern bows is much higher than the damage of many firearms.

Population is always the primary productive force unless something replaces it

Where is the author? Don't be a eunuch!

I guessed that I wanted a eunuch before I subscribed.