Pirates: Starting with the Execution of Pirate King Roger

I personally hate Roger very much. How many people were killed by a man who started the pirate era for his own selfish desires? Millions or tens of millions.

Moria's identity was completed, and an adopted foreigner went to fight with Kaido to liberate the country of Wano. This Oden is getting more and more disgusting.

I almost gave up on it at the beginning. The opening chapter has a lot of bad points. Geniuses don't need to explain how strong they are. Strength itself is proof. Especially in the Navy headquarters, there is no need to hide your clumsiness. It's really unnecessary to expose your clumsiness in just a few pictures when you were hiding it earlier.

O'Hara's demon-slaying order is a joke. Most of the scholars and books have been transferred to the giant kingdom and hidden. The demon-slaying order really only kills civilians. The most embarrassing thing is that he didn't contact Robin after the transfer, allowing an 8-year-old girl to think that she was really the only survivor on the island and wander alone.

So far, overall, not bad despite its flaws. The main flaw is The first one, the combat power increases very quickly, but it must be forcibly suppressed The second one, if you want to survive, but you expose so much, as long as there is a middle-level and high-level person, it will be exposed after careful inspection But even so, the writing is actually good Personal suggestion The first one, the current navy is of no use to the protagonist, in fact, even It is to learn the Sixth Form of the Navy. It is actually useless to enter the Navy Headquarters. When you get to the Grand Line, there are many channels to obtain the Sixth Form of the Navy, so the protagonist is leaving the Navy now The second one, the current plot direction can actually create a good opportunity. The first one is to protect his companion (golden retriever), he has to expose his strength, shock the Navy and the world, and then leave. The second one is what I just thought of, in order to prevent Stop Akainu from massacring civilians, then confront Akainu, draw a battle or win a battle, shock the navy and the world, and then leave The third one is not recommended to eat Devil Fruits, add plug-ins based on the protagonist's strength, a proper path to invincibility. Eating or not eating Devil Fruits has little effect, and if you eat them, there is a high probability that you will eliminate the bug that is not afraid of sea water, and there is a small chance of going astray (don't get too many fruits, you can't be sure) The 4th one, if you really don't leave the navy, your next position will either be to lead the navy independently to kill pirates, or to go to Impel Down City, and then you will definitely leave the navy. It's really not necessary, you should leave if you can, you can still make arrangements at this time. Or just follow the revolutionary army line layout. The above are my feelings and suggestions after reading it. I hope I can continue to pursue it.

Author, your details are a bit poor, and your combat power is a bit weak. In addition, O'Hara can save scholars, so why don't you save the civilians on the asylum ship? I don't know whether the scholars are innocent or not, but those civilians are the ones who are really affected, right? The research carried out by scholars has affected the civilians on the island. Civilians: Who will speak for me?

It's just that he's too stubborn, not interesting, and he's strong enough. He inherited so many abilities from Roger, but I just don't understand why he's still weak. It makes me nervous when I read it. It's like a tomato article, and it kind of feels like an early general or a mid-level general.

O'Hara's handling was too rough. I originally thought that because O'Hara turned against Guy Haijun, the entire island would be saved, but in the end, only the group of scholars who knew the law and broke the law were saved. Who is innocent? Are they civilians? The protagonist, a time-traveler, knows the plot, but in the end, he only cares about the scholars and ignores the civilians. He bombards the asylum ship and still criticizes Qingpheas. If you see it and rush to block the shells in advance, I will look down on you.

Big back stab, Imu is a man, the condition for turning black is not that the person is in his hometown, but whether he has eaten a devil fruit 🤔

The author is not very good at writing emotional scenes, so I suggest you cover it in two or three strokes, or not write it at all. This is your weakness.

The protagonist's predecessor was a loser, and the host is also a loser. In fact, this writing method is used in many novels. But the author really integrated the protagonist into the writing. It is recommended to skip the first chapter if you want to read it, it will have no impact.

Non-core skills such as navigation and cooking should be extracted from criminals with poor health, and crime points should be used to break through core skills. It would be stupid for the protagonist to spend sin points to upgrade navigation and cooking skills while staying in the base.

Just looking at the title and introduction, I thought it was a cool novel. This was my impression when I first read it. As a result, I started to exchange cooking skills, weapons, and other things that generally increase my combat power, but it seemed that my combat power was suppressed, which was inconsistent with my initial expectations, thus affecting my motivation to continue watching. It is recommended that the title and content of the book should be considered whether it is an exciting article or a dull topic.

The time when the protagonist enters is quite rare. There should be no overhead wars in the future. If such a system is used, the plot can still be normal 20 years later. I really want to blame the protagonist for being a turtle.

Why do we have to time travel during the execution, why can't we time travel a few days before the execution? It is too easy to make mistakes in time travel at this time, and the huge cognitive conflict can easily make you freeze. Now many authors write novels, and the beginning is to go to the door and travel by yourself. There is not enough time to buffer, and it is most likely to die suddenly at this time.

It's time for the protagonist to strengthen, and Loki's beast form has reached tens of thousands of meters.

A rational discussion. Is Roger good enough for LR3? Judging from the author's setting, the general and the Yonko should be at UR level. Why can Roger be one level higher than them? In the Valley of the Gods chapter, it seems that the only ones who can reach the level of LR you set are Rocks and Im, right?

The previous magic modifications were acceptable, but exchanging points for guns and knives is really unbearable. If you have the strength, you can easily get these things, do you still need to exchange points for them? So brainless

The contrast is too big. I thought it was a cool article when I saw your introduction and title. After all, you executed Roger, so even if it is weakened, it should be at the level of an emperor's deputy. But the result is that the main lieutenant general is not strong, but the span from One Piece to the lieutenant general is a bit big. It is different from what I thought when I read the title of the book.

Before the author put it on the shelves, there were too many useless and whimsical operations, which made it impossible to stick to it. Most people would run away at the so-called climax.

The 5 monthly votes prove that this book is very distinctive. The chapter on Steel Terra has a lot of feeling, but it is too superficial. But it ended so happily, author NB. I can see that I don't see any serious flaws now, and I can see where my combat power has dropped. . The other comments are so weird. The rhythm is okay, I like it overall. Come on, author. .

It's a mess, I feel disgusted when I read the comments. I use modern concepts to look at another world that practices basic physical laws. The basic world view is different, and then evaluates this damn that damn thing, who the protagonist is, and so on. It's just a brain defect. The world structure and basic framework are different, and the rules for practicing basic physics are different. If you use modern logic to see those people, you are really sick.

I just saw the Tianlong Killer. If you don't want to break up at this time, the best option is to put on glasses, kill all the swordsmanship and leave, right?

The author said that he has written two pirate fanfics before, and it seems to be true after reading it now. What I am most afraid of is the kind of new author who writes whatever he dreams about. After reading this book so far, there are really no major problems in the general direction. There are minor flaws, and I can give the author a solution. If you update two chapters a day, everyone will look for problems with a magnifying glass, but if you make tens of thousands per day, then all the problems will not be a problem!

The last few chapters are pretty good, the battle scenes are good, and the balance of combat power is also pretty good. I love reading more of this kind of plot.

Does the author have multiple heroines? Can you give me some support? What do you plan to write in the next novel? Does the author write a variety novel? I haven't read the novel about the devil dad yet 🙂

Now that I have seen the latest chapter, let me briefly talk about the advantages and disadvantages of this book. If there are new book friends, you can refer to it. Advantages: The writing is relatively fluent, and there is no watery plot. It currently has 200,000 to 300,000 words. The protagonist is almost at the level of a deputy to a weaker general (especially the Green Bull), and there is nothing to overwhelm the combat power. The other is that the change of mentality of the protagonist is relatively smooth, without that strong mechanical sense, and most of the things are traceable There is also a more positive pirate flavor, which is the most critical, this is the most critical point to measure the fandom. At present, it seems that there is no OOC place Then let's talk about the shortcomings. There are three places in the early stage. The first is that the navy canteen is relatively rubbish. To me, I don't feel that I have mentioned this point in one sentence, but when I read the comments, I criticized it more. The author probably wants to make it more meaningful for the protagonist to have cooking skills. The canteen is not delicious. In fact, I think there is a relationship between delicious and better. I am relatively indifferent to this aspect, so it's okay for me Then there is the exchange of points. I guess the author has written the outline from the beginning when designing, so there is probably no shortage of points in the author's mind, but readers should take a look It's no longer like that. You are the protagonist. You have precious points, even if you don't draw many, but as long as you buy something that is not that important, you will definitely be criticized. I can't say this. I hope the author will pay attention to it in the next book. The remaining words are currently more than 200,000 words and I can't tell much. Generally speaking, it is a book with great potential, but it suffers from the common problem of newcomers. It offends readers at the beginning, and newcomers with no works are easy to be criticized. I am writing this today in the hope that the author can stabilize and not cut the book halfway, because after reading it, I think it is okay. However, with a stable update volume of 6K+ per day, it seems that the author's current mentality should be okay, and he has no plans to work hard at 4K. That's about it. It's rare to write so many words at once. By the way, I also think that there are really NPCs on Sunday and they have to go to work again tomorrow.

In fact, there are relatively powerful snipers in the pirate world, but Oda-sensei has never drawn them, so I feel that people are not very receptive to shooting. What should I say about this thing? If you cut a crack of several kilometers with a sword, everyone will accept it. But if you use a gun to fire out a missile with the power of a missile, everyone will scold you. This thing is inherently not suitable for the worldview where power belongs to itself. There is no problem with the rest. The subsequent author must have listened and stopped competing with shooting. After reading the words and content of this chapter, he must have changed part of it as per the advice. Not bad

I haven't read One Piece. Is the history written in the second half of this book original, or is it the author's creation?

The whole book is a bit too positive. Every time the protagonist goes to a new place, he will meet positive people or things, thus creating a very positive plot. This in itself is not a problem. The problem is that you can't "every time you arrive". Of course, this may be a matter of my taste, so it is just a small suggestion.