Killed People Become Readers

I don't understand how this plot was written. It's the dragon's roar, the inexplicable physical damage, and the curse that turned the protagonist into a psychopath. The threshold for reading is high. Every chapter is mixed with emotions, and the battle process is also complicated.

After reading it, I roughly understand what you mean by breaking the wall. The viewing experience is very poor, and it is equivalent to entering a fan copy that only the protagonist has seen. In this way, information between the reader and the protagonist is not shared, and the sense of immersion plummets.

I am reincarnated, please readers, give me strength🌹

The author's own experience was used in the creation of the protagonist, so it seems very real and can be regarded as well-created. The description of technical secondary school and junior college is quite interesting. It turns out that their campus life is like this... The protagonist has rich life experience and is very good at playing with a knife. He can really be called a loser... ———————————— The setting of the book is quite interesting, but the writing is still far from good. —————————— What are the three golden chapters written about? If I hadn't been very curious about what a technical secondary school is like and the author's experience, I wouldn't have stayed. Not to mention three chapters, six chapters are very confusing to read. If you want to write an autobiography, that's fine, but this is a novel, and your writing is too loose. ———————————— Is the retrospective of this sleepless day limited to a region or the entire world? The more buggy a skill is, the more clearly it should be described. If this world was going back, then Lin Xiuya should have noticed that the previous world was going back twice, so it wasn't the whole world going back? But if it's the former, how should an area be defined? Or you can make a patch so that if you are too far away from the reborn person who activated the Sleepless Day, other reborn people will not be able to sense that the world is being retraced, that is, the memory before the retracing will not be saved. ———————————— In Chapter 24, the obtained hook was reversed. Not only was the protagonist disgusted, but I, as a reader, was also disgusted. And why didn't Lin Xiuya become a reader later? I think the protagonist uses fists, right? It's not a long-range attack either. ———————————— I was baffled by this first copy. From beginning to end: It started very strangely. The sissy was injected with medicine, which was too deliberate. Because the child was on fire, the protagonist "rekindled his passion" and planned to kill the sissy to avenge them... Isn't this scene awkward? Besides, the sissy has a life-and-death relationship with the protagonist. Adhering to the cliché, first perform a set of emotional punches to win Fu Guang's gorgeous transformation, and then join forces to defeat the mini-boss first and then the sissy, and then they can't beat him. I really didn't expect the twist. The protagonist exploded but didn't fully explode. In the end, the boss was solved by Ying Fuguang. Not only did the protagonist's mother die, but he also seemed very useless. Author, please stop remembering the previous characters. You are writing a new novel now. The scenes that should be given should be given to the protagonist, okay? The meeting was very hasty. During the spoils section, I said that it was all about getting a soldier's physique. Why don't you brag about it? This makes the entire copy of the protagonist look very clownish. ———————————— The second copy is also very boring. Chapter 51, don't you think it's awkward to put it in? What does this chapter mean? It's too abrupt if you want to use it as foreshadowing. It is specially emphasized that it is a high-risk and low-return dungeon. What is the purpose of the protagonist entering it and what is the goal? Become stronger? Okay, that's a good reason, but it's very inefficient. The protagonists of all fantasy novels need to become stronger, but it is fun for them to become stronger, but your protagonist looks like a clown in the first copy, and it seems stupid to take the initiative to play a high-risk, low-return copy. Can't you set the plot so that the official guide copy was not available for the first two opportunities, and the last time the protagonist asked for help, he negotiated terms? I took the initiative to download the dungeon, and after completing it, I thought the protagonist was doing good things. If there wasn't a strategic talent that the government needed in the dungeon who could ask for credit for the protagonist after he went out, who would have known that this idiot had a lot of credit? You could have handled it better, but you made the protagonist so stupid. Author, author, you should be smarter. ———————————— If you don't know how to write a copy, read more novels such as Infinite Stream. I recommend you to read Thriller Paradise and Player Super Justice. If you want to write a good novel, you must keep learning, otherwise you won't make any progress if you write millions of words. ———————————— I suggest you leave my comment so that more people can see it. On the one hand, staying can increase the popularity of the book circle. On the other hand, even if you delete the comment, the old bookworm will still leave. It is better to stay and let everyone see an author who is open-minded and teachable. The current standard of the book is not that of a high-quality product, so this book should just be used to accumulate readers. That's all, I hope it's helpful to you. I will come here from time to time to see if you have made any progress, so keep up the good work.

Your writing is okay, keep up the good work

Your monologue moved me, but it was still niche. The first chapter is fine as a supporting character, but he shouldn't be the protagonist. The protagonist must be happy and strong, and he should be a symbol of dominance. The complexity, unbearability, and persistence of human nature should not be reserved for the protagonist. Only those supporting characters, those who are unwilling to be mediocre but muddled, need the opportunity to rise from the grassroots: When your protagonist gives you a little charity, you will cry loudly and be grateful. Only in this way can you feel the empathy and enjoy watching it. Of course, if you are an old author and have a fan base, just pretend I didn't say anything. If your book can write two million or five million words, just pretend I didn't say it. The road to becoming a god with a book is destined to be bumpy, and I encourage you to share it.

I don't know how to describe it, I can only say that a novel is a novel and a diary is a diary I really can't appreciate your diary-like writing style + musing stories.

This introduction is similar to the reality of the heavenly heart and the names and appearances of the human heart in my "Heavenly Heart Feedback Method for Verification of Names and Reality".