Tokyo: Who Asked You to Use This to Pay Off Your Debt?

It can be seen that the subject matter is more to my liking, but the character creation and the language metaphors between the characters are also slightly unreasonable in the general plot. Is it my imagination? The AI ​​flavor is so strong that the author probably gave it to the AI ​​for polishing or something.

I feel like I write too much abstractly.

The protagonist is like a helpless Hakimi, who can bully ordinary Japanese, but can do nothing against the female goblin. You can only try to commit suicide

Why the inexplicable addition of weirdness?

The style of painting is also very magical. I thought it was the version where the system recruits girls. It turned out to be a supernatural unfolding. I thought it was a supernatural unfolding, but it turned out to be a twisted daily novel. I haven't seen the main plot yet, but there is one story that is quite interesting. However, the protagonist is indeed written a bit too ruthlessly.

Later it becomes a group portrait, which is boring and the author cannot focus on the main character. If you can't write a good story, it won't look good.

At first I thought it was a light novel, but then it turned into an urban horror. Will the protagonist fall in love and kill an extraterrestrial demon for a whole novel?

Now I feel a little confused, as if the main plot has disappeared. There are many female protagonists written on the label, but now there is no more, and the purpose is not clear. It is very abrupt that I want to become a god, and I am pushed by the monster. I don't understand why the protagonist does this. Normally speaking, whether they are cultivating immortals or some novels, they all have a purpose when they become gods and seek immortality. Some are for great freedom, some are for seeking Tao, and some are for changing the world. But now I can't see it. I can't see what core is driving the protagonist.

It's a bit off the mark. Now that extraordinary elements have been added, I look forward to the protagonist's reciprocal counterattack. If it's just calculation, even if you win, it will feel a bit like a sewer rat, and it will feel like a petty family. If it were reality, of course the winner takes all, no matter what the means, but if the novel is still aggrieved, if the emotions are not released, they will run away. It looks good now, although it is slow to gain momentum, but it is worth looking forward to.

I think the author's main plot should be to discover weirdness, use weirdness, and become weird, rather than fighting wits and courage with Tianyi. Otherwise, what's the point of writing a weird thing, using mortal power to fight against gods? Demonstrate the greatness of mortals?

The inexplicable protagonist, the inexplicable plot, and the feeling of powerlessness are well written, but this is an online novel, so the evaluation can only be based on literary youth.

Why does this wind look so familiar? You are not the only one reincarnated 🙂

I can understand if the protagonist doesn't kill Tianyi or even arranges for him to fall in love with Tianyi, because Tianyi is a monster and she has her own behavioral logic. Through contact with the protagonist, I can gradually understand human emotions and even fall in love with the protagonist. I can accept it. But I can't accept that the female police officer will not die. This woman is too dancing. Even illegal evidence collection will kill the male protagonist. I can't think of a reason why she should not die. I will withdraw if she does not die.

The writing style is good and the character description is good. I feel like a different label would be more suitable. This book's label classification and title, clicked on, are all those who like to read about daily romance or sweet stories, even sadistic love stories. At present, it is equivalent to promoting fans in Siberia, suppressing the performance of the book, but this also shows that the author is capable and very powerful.

What is the possible direction in the future? I really don't understand. I haven't ordered the last few chapters. I feel like I am not the author's target group. Shuangguishuang. There is no clear main line to say it is

This is too off topic and has nothing to do with the title now.

The title of your book is purely misleading. I thought it was written in a romantic style😡 But the writing is quite beautiful.

In the plot where the two policemen are chasing the story, the protagonist leaves too many loopholes and is full of flaws. There are too many ways to deal with one video and one gangster. It seems that people are deliberately discovering that the protagonist is eager for a master to discover the truth and share the pressure. The protagonist is using a twisted method to ask for help.

But I'm worried about how it will develop after the beginning. The protagonist can't really continue to work in financial lending. The main thing is that this industry is low compared to Japan, and the online lending in Japan is worse than a cult. If you get big in finance, you will definitely come into contact with politics, but the so-called loan boss is not even a chamber pot.

It was okay at first, but after killing Tianyi, I couldn't control my creations and was too self-indulgent.

The writing is neither fish nor fowl. Immerse yourself in your own worldview, write about the city, and fill in what is extraordinary. You see,

What the hell are you writing? I'm almost 150 chapters in. The main plot seems to be set up to eliminate the "alien" at the beginning. As a result, there are a lot of inexplicable chapters in the middle that come out one after another. The protagonist is also set up inexplicably. It exists purely to advance the plot. The setting is bloated but empty, like a ball of cotton wool. Just read the free chapters and run away.

It's nice to read, but I feel like the author has become obsessed with his own ghost story ()😆

What is this book about? Are you done with falling in love and dying?

The writing behind it is so poor, what a pity.

Crazy enough, bloodthirsty audiences like it very much

Jumping directly from more than a dozen chapters in volume 2 to chapter 53, he finally begins to dominate the world.

🤓Fighting is fun

Why did it change to a mystery novel? And what's wrong with the protagonist's inexplicable madness? Can't you just concentrate on solving the monster problem?

I will continue to support you, so just think of it as me begging you to open a new book, okay?