I Feed the Immortals with My Body in the Demon Sect

You want to write about the protagonist suffering hardships and slowly growing up, but you have written chapter 40. Since entering Baixiangmen, you have been grinding away in useless daily life. There is no progress in the plot and no personal growth. This is not like writing a novel, but like you have traveled through time and been beaten in the plot. It is really smelly and long. Baixiangmen alone can filter out more than half of the readers

The writing is not bad, but the plot is too blunt in a few points. When the mother-in-law runs out of the Hehuan Sect and helps the protagonist change clothes, will the little 🐧 not be visible? Others lied to him that the Hehuan Sect was looking for a junior sister, but the Hehuan Sect knew that he was a boy and he also knew that the Hehuan Sect knew that he was a boy. How could he be fooled? He said he wanted to see someone from the Hehuan Sect, but his mother-in-law obviously knew that there was danger outside but wouldn't follow him? After escaping from those thugs, it was obvious that the other side would not let it go. He didn't tell the two elders about it for fear of dirtying their ears. Too stupid to watch

(The following opinions only represent personal wishes. If there is a difference, you are right, and there is no intention to express that this book is not good) This start is too smooth. I don't have the feeling of Cultivation of Immortals. I still prefer the feeling of climbing up little by little. I am tired of seeing this kind of nb coaxing starting point 🙂

As long as the heroine doesn't get raped by that, and don't let the protagonist get raped, I can accept it 🙂

Is this the waste stream again? I feel a little frustrated.

I'm still digging. Brother, you've almost dug more than ten chapters. Let's get on with it quickly, okay? Let's get started in cultivating immortals later. I really can't hold back after digging more than ten chapters. I've been waiting for this update for a day, and I saw that I'm still digging.

It feels a bit abrupt, a bit stiffer than before, I don't know why.

It would be best to cut this book. The last two chapters were written to waste. It was originally a novel for everyone to see. A man pretends to be a female decoration fairy. It is very different from more ordinary works. Most bookworms look for books to read every day. After reading a lot of good books, they must have aesthetic fatigue. Therefore, this kind of book where a woman pretends to be a man and pretends to be a fairy gives people a bright feeling, just like eating too much greasy food and then eating something novel. On the contrary, many people are willing to read it. This kind of book where a woman disguises herself as a man actually embodies A surprise caught him off guard, allowing competitors to relax their vigilance about pig's feet, but the author was so disgusted that he had to reveal his identity as a man for the disgusting Liu Man, a disgusting thing, and then slapped a group of people in the face, disgusted a group of people, and caused a lot of trouble for no reason. Just like the pig's trotters have their own way as mentioned above, it does not mean that they have to practice swordsmanship. In fact, the author should also have his own way. He must follow the popular way and abandon the highlight of the book where men dress up as women. He insists on competing with the great masters for his writing skills. Is it worth it to pick up the leftovers of the great masters? Just like what he said before, why do pig's feet need to practice swordsmanship? Why should the author be the same as everyone else? If you write about men disguising themselves as women, just keep writing. When you reach the top and trample everyone under your feet, wouldn't it be better for you to reveal your male identity? Why would such a female identity be considered cumbersome? This is actually the protective color of pig's feet. Many times this identity may cause some trouble, but many people will get more protection and sympathy, because women, especially beautiful women, naturally make people pity. So rewrite the last two chapters, otherwise this book can just be thrown out of the market, and the results will definitely be very poor if you come back. With the author's writing skills, it is difficult to win over the steamed buns from many great masters, and the best he can do is to eat scraps.

I also want my elder sister to teach me dual cultivation 😍

The male and female protagonist? It's very novel. It's the first time I've seen the protagonist look like this. The plot is also good. It's a rare indigenous protagonist. The number of words is too small so I can't tell much. At present, the protagonist's outlook is very normal. He has revenge and repays kindness.

Brothers, brothers, go back quickly, the author Tomato is resurrected 😆

It's not as well written as the previous one, it's too girly

Can anyone tell me my name in English? 🙂

Eight chapters have been saved. Has the protagonist practiced or is he still mining?

I've read Chapter 93. When I talk about this book, I can only see the charges. You don't have to read the charge part. To be honest, many people just think it's novel. As for the writing style and logic, it's really average. If you directly discard the biggest highlight of this article, then this book will become ordinary to readers. Moreover, Liu Man's chapters are really a failure. Cats have their own ways, and mice have their own ways. Women's skins and men's skins can actually be used, but women's skins are the highlight of many readers. Your denial of women's skins is, in a sense, a denial of readers. Nowadays, readers are more It is more aesthetic fatigue. For readers, after reading too many good books, they may suddenly want to take a look at your tone. This is your highlight, and then you directly discard this highlight. This is a denial of the previous article and a denial of the reader. Restore men's clothing and reverse it, and novelty becomes ordinary. That is to say, this change directly ruined this book. Do you want to make money from this to support your retirement? Is your writing really that good? Rely on your writing to grab some scraps from many great masters? Just rely on your demonstrated strength? Haha, author, self-confidence is a good thing, but you must also be self-aware.

The physique of the protagonist does not seem to have written legends and great supplements. In such a lust-heavy Demon Sect, there is no one else who is greedy. (They are all in the Demon Sect. I don't believe these maids have any selfish motives.)

Halfway through I read it and I just couldn't stand it anymore. The emphasis was placed on the fact that the male protagonist is naturally beautiful and that no matter how ruthless his character is, he can't change the male protagonist. It was uncomfortable to watch. With all due respect, I came from Tomato. The portrayal of the male protagonist in the previous book was much better than this male protagonist. It's a pity.

The author will update soon. Don't send it.

What I want is: I know he is handsome but a bit feminine, not a transvestite but handsome.

The more I read the previous chapters, the more I wanted to read them. After leaving the Hehuan Sect, I have been on the road of torturing the master, becoming more and more depressed, and I almost ran out of ideas to open it...

But the quantity is large and the food is full! ! !

I have to say that the label of this book is indeed correct. It is very curious. The setting of the spiritual roots coming out of the butt is a bit weird and disgusting. Then when I saw the fusion of the demon fetus and the transformation, the face was elongated, the mouth was completely gone, and it turned into a mouthless sheep-faced human body. It broke the uncanny valley for me. This novel seems a bit too advanced for current human beings.