I, Chen Deng, Am the Number One Headhunter in the Three Kingdoms!

There are several characters that appear in the first chapter, but you only write about the protagonist encountering a crisis and starting to pave the way to solve the problem. This sense of immersion will come. In your first chapter, there are several characters competing for the protagonist. I don't know who I am looking at, and there is no sense of immersion at all. Chapter 3 I don't even want to talk about it anymore, copying the Ming Dynasty from the Imperial Preceptor. You are more comfortable talking about this to a group of soldiers, bragging about it with Zhuge Liang and Guo Jialai than with these soldiers. No one knows this group of passers-by. You are bragging here and don't have a sense of belonging. Readers don't know them, so if you write about a few famous characters, can't you brag about them? It can be seen that the paragraphing and writing style are well-founded, but they do not create a sense of immersion or create a sense of excitement. If you don't know how to show off, go and see the Imperial Master of the Ming Dynasty. You are pretending to be someone else. You rely on force to show off to generals, while civil servants talk to him about doctrine.