Star Core Mechanic's Space Adventure Story

As a reader, I would like to express my feelings after reading the first chapter. It only represents my personal opinion. If you don't like it, please delete the comment. 1. The introduction of the novel is very strange and has nothing to do with the story. Are you a kindergarten teacher? This book is not intended to be signed to earn soft girl coins? 2. The character of the protagonist is not likable. Readers of online articles will put themselves into the role of the protagonist. It is not okay to be clumsy in repair work and almost get smashed to death. It is not okay to be scolded by colleagues for being embarrassed. It is not okay to twist a gear successfully and grinning like a fool when someone praises your cleverness. You can take a look at the protagonist of "Jian Ke". The protagonist must be mentally mature. In the end, Lao Hu asked him to leave, but the protagonist refused to leave, causing Lao Hu to be injured. This is equivalent to the protagonist making a big mistake, which is absolutely unacceptable. The behavior of your protagonist makes the audience dislike it or even hate it. 2. There are many poisonous points and irrational logic. Big poisonous point ① The setting of genetic matching degree does not explain the use of matching degree. Common sense is that mechanical maintenance relies on experience. Both parents are excellent mechanics in the Federation, which means that the genes of the parents are highly matched, but the genetic inheritance of the son is not up to standard? This is equivalent to saying that he is not biological. Even if you forcefully belittle the protagonist, you still have to have a common sense. 😅 Big poisonous point ②Parents died. The mechanic was not introduced clearly. Is there any difference between a mechanic and a mechanical maintenance technician? The maintenance technician was just a support person, how could he go out to perform a mission and die? The protagonist has no other relatives? It's not explained clearly here. Both parents are soldiers. Who will take care of the children when they are away? It is unreasonable and inconsistent with common sense to give the remaining fragments back to the protagonist. The protagonist was only 8 years old ten years ago, and his parents who died did not even come back with their bodies, but he gave the mecha fragments to an 8-year-old child? The important relics of his parents are not mentioned, and it is unreasonable for the protagonist to put the tool box casually. It is not common sense that pensions are pitifully small. If the pensions of soldiers are low, who will work on the front line? Are you saying the Federation is poor? It also has something to do with the fact that you didn't explain the mechanic's social status clearly. The setting of the big poisonous point ③ mecha. The exoskeleton and mecha don't even have a shape description. Parts are the smallest units. What are the scraps of parts? Mechanical maintenance is about replacing parts, not manufacturing parts. Training is about repairing. Scraps describe the materials cut during the production of parts. The energy core of the mecha is the star core, and the energy conductor is already a core component. It is unreasonable for the logistics department to outsource the core parts to a repair shop with only one old man and two apprentices. Big poisonous point ④Silicon-based scout bug. The air defense alert is for air threats, but what comes out are ground crawlers. Ground attacks are not air defense alerts. Common sense is wrong. Do you have any misunderstandings about investigation? This is already an attack. Investigation should not alert the enemy. It is unreasonable for laser weapons to only burn Lao Hu. Common sense is that lasers are stronger than bullets. When Lao Hu is injured, he should save people as soon as possible, instead of focusing on whether the protagonist has neural links. This is unreasonable. There are many little poisonous points, so I won't mention them all. It is expected that wages should be paid on time and in large amounts, and it is not called special treatment. Wait If the author is determined to write a novel, think about it carefully, it will not be easy for me to type so many words.

I've only read Chapter 8, and I've been invaded by bugs three times and found trouble five times. How is this plot arranged?😅

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