Lady Kami's Breeding Diary

I have caught up with the latest chapter, and I would like to make a small evaluation. The author's setting is very attractive. I may not understand the world view at first, but as the world view unfolds, I find that the story becomes more and more interesting. More importantly, the author's loli heroine is really good-looking (the previous book), and the author's updates are guaranteed, and he is not afraid of bad endings. The most important thing is that loli is so cute 😍

Good-looking, a book of food and grass, a cute fox, white-haired_Luo Li_, But there are many typos, grammatical errors, confusing sentence structure and other problems. It is not recommended to be so casual with paid stamps. {"TopicId":"995007324090269696","TopicName":"Book Review Activity"} For example: Chapter 72 This passage mainly has problems with repeated logical semantics, improper collocation of related words, and mixed sentence structure. Although I can understand it in spoken language, it seems not rigorous enough in written expression. The following is a specific analysis of grammatical errors and suggestions for modification: 1. Semantic repetition (redundant elements) Original sentence: "But he must know something more or less" Analysis: "More or less" means an uncertain degree, and "some" also means an uncertain amount. Use of the two together appears to be semantically repetitive and wordy. Revision suggestions: Delete "more or less" or "some" and replace it with "but he definitely knows something" or "but he definitely knows something more or less." 2. Improper collocation of related words/confused logic Original sentence: "If he successfully recovers the miraculous item, then I can't touch him" Analysis: Combined with the previous article "It's clear that I can't touch him during the mission", the logic here should be a progressive or causal relationship, that is, "Once he recovers the item, I can't touch him at all", rather than a hypothetical relationship. The original sentence uses "if... Then..." Which weakens Zhao Yuexi's psychological certainty of "getting it right". Modification suggestion: Change to "Once he successfully recovers the miracle item, I can't change him" or "As long as he successfully recovers...". 3. Mixed sentence structure/change of subject midway Original sentence: "... I am sure that I can't touch him during the mission. After the mission is over, if he successfully recovers the miracle item, then I can't touch him..." Analysis: This sentence is very long, with commas in the middle. The subject of the first half of the sentence is "Zhao Yuexi" (get it right...), And the subject of the second half of the sentence becomes "I" (I can't move him anymore). Although Chinese allows for congruence, sentences that are too long can cause the logical chain to break, making it breathless to read. Revision suggestions: Break the sentence before "waiting for the end of the task", or reorganize the language to clarify the cause and effect relationship. 4. The wording is colloquial/not refined enough Original sentence: "The inspector is staring at me in the dark" Analysis: "Staring" is slightly colloquial, and the combination of "in the dark" and "staring" is not compact enough. Modification suggestions: It can be changed to "The inspector is watching me in the dark" or "There is an inspector watching in the dark". ❥(ゝω✿ฺ)~♪

When I saw Chapter 165, there was nothing wrong with the writing, it was just a bit bland. There are indeed a lot of settings sewn into the background, but many of them really feel like they are just dispensable in the background. It's a pity to throw away tasteless food.

Only certain groups of people can accept the extraordinary, and ordinary people are in a state of protection, and the extraordinary cannot harm them. Isn't this a chuunibyou and fellow patients? A world that only my patients and I know?

The protagonist first takes a pair of armor, and then encounters the Pinball Legend Island. He uses the power of the armor to drive the pinball fighter. Finally, he encounters the Hurricane Spirit Island. The armored warrior uses the pinball fighter to launch the top. The superimposed range of the three extraordinary powers will surely shock the world.

When will a "Fox Raised Diary" be published, describing in detail how foxes are raised by readers? From the initial reluctance and resistance; to letting go and giving up the struggle; to acceptance and enjoyment; and then finally to finding the owner, and even spending money to find the owner.

At the beginning, everyone was scared to death with the energy value of 170 million. However, an unknown person said that there might be an error in the machine and it might be 1700, so he ignored it. Everyone just defaulted to 1700 and 666. Please tell me that this machine often breaks down. Then the two investigators asked the protagonist, knowing that 1700 might not be able to handle it, and then ignored it! It's invincible, and there's the island effect, the most outrageous setting, just like the chuunibyou exchange scene. If you don't know my settings, you won't understand. You don't have the ability to brainstorm, and you can't even see the special effects. The last thing you say is that all this is because the male protagonist has a mental illness. It's all imaginary.

The setting is very interesting, but the author can't grasp it. The plot is a little loose, and the protagonist is not very strong. However, he always inserts some things that the protagonist cannot grasp now, but there is no actual action to improve. He always writes about daily life, and the key daily life is not particularly brilliant. The event-driven writing is quite embarrassing😅

To be honest, the introduction did not attract me. I crossed it for the first time, and then I suddenly remembered whether Fox had written a new book. When I saw it, it turned out to be this one, and I had to read it. By the way, this author likes loli very much.

The first villain is too mentally retarded And why did he suddenly fast forward to killing people?

If you have more than 3,000 fan points in any of Fox's books, you can claim it according to the picture. You can also receive fan titles from other authors, but it seems you can only choose one to receive

I hope that all book friends think the book is good enough and can read new chapters every day. The light novel is too long now, so I can only read it.

A chuunibyou novel with a high concentration of two-dimensional elements. There are too many things sewn together and it looks messy.

How can I put it, it's so attractive to the second dimension that no one has watched it, especially since the author had a harem before and couldn't write about harems. The harem is actually best with three to four people. For example, in a word game, two cats, a dragon, and text, four people can almost occupy a lot of scenes. As a result, there are too many harems, and sometimes there is almost no role for that person in the individual chapters.

In fact, I think Lily and the protagonist's family should at least be more thorough. Don't say that the less you don't know, the safer you are. This is what strangers say, because it is impossible to guard it every day. Now it seems to me that supernatural abilities have become rampant. Isn't he afraid that if his family doesn't know these things, he will go to an abnormal place to die, or be deceived by those people? Unless the number of supernatural things in the world can be counted on one hand.

You are still good at writing Lolita. I will catch up on the Cat Girl book in a while. If you ask me, it's all your fault for being too slow 🙂

The author is preparing several female protagonists for this book

It's good to read, but it took so long to write about Yingzhou. I can't stand it anymore, so I skip it.

This book is exempt from the upper limit. It seems that the results are really bad.

Is it really okay to be a pigeon every three days?

It's such a pity that I haven't read this book

I think it looks pretty, why isn't it popular?

I skipped the timeline and stopped reading. It was really boring. Don't play with time. Even a novel would be boring.

Just got this and wanted to ask. You have already kept a diary, why is it not a single female protagonist (there are two female protagonists in the character introduction)?… Does Miss God really not know how to practice Shura Field?

1. Does the world Lily talks about refer to different universes, or different planets within the same universe. 2. When reading the comments, some people said that extraordinary power cannot be used in reality. Can it be used in the future?

It feels like playing in a strange ring, which is quite interesting.

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I feel that the creativity is quite good, and it feels very immersive when you put it in. Multiple world views are mixed in the modern city, and the stitching is good. The overall world view is very consistent with the identity of the protagonist "player". Although some of the settings are really annoying, it is a novel that makes people look cursing but they can still read it. So to sort out the world view, the new book u can first see if this strange world view is to your liking () [Isolated Island]: There are many supernatural beings on the earth. Systems, such as "gyro, armored warrior, cultivator, magical girl", these extraordinary systems are independent of each other and do not recognize each other. They only think that they are the only extraordinary power in the world. Therefore, the extraordinary system is also called an "isolated island", and the mortal world is the largest "isolated island". [Drifter]: People like the protagonist are called drifters. They are people who wander outside the [isolated island] and can recognize all extraordinary systems and learn all extraordinary powers. The protagonist has a clue and can quickly learn the extraordinary power of each system and swim on an isolated island. At the same time, the power of several systems can also be stitched together to reduce the weakening of [Island Effect] [Island Effect]: When a drifter attacks a transcendent, he must use the same transcendent power to be effective, and the power of other systems will be greatly weakened. Extraordinary people cannot harm mortals with extraordinary power. Mortals can harm extraordinary people unconsciously, and the extraordinary defense of extraordinary people is useless (true zone). But if you are contaminated by the karma of a transcendent person: for example, if you are hired by a transcendent person to harm other transcendent beings, then you must use an attack method that conforms to this transcendent system to be effective. There is also a kind of "mortal", that is, people who have talents but have not practiced. They already belong to the extraordinary system, but cannot be protected by the [Island Effect]. For example, mortals in the world of cultivating immortals are the objects of exploitation by monks. [Inner World] Most extraordinary systems are hidden in mortal cities, and advanced extraordinary systems have their own inner worlds, such as [The World of Cultivation of Immortals] and [The Kingdom of Magical Girls]. Some [Miracle Items] also have the ability to expand a small inner world. In the inner world, the corresponding rules will be more powerful. [Miracle Item] It is an extraordinary prop that is relatively NPC, partially self-aware, and is a fragment of a god. [Level classification]: Extraordinary levels are simply divided into level 1, level 2, level 3, etc. In the world of cultivating immortals, it is equivalent to practicing Qi, building foundations, and golden elixirs. [Island] also has the same level distinction. For example, yo-yo is level 1 [isolated island], and the upper limit of extraordinary strength is level 1. [Island Effect] will collapse, and the extraordinary world will gradually merge into the mortal world. During this period, except for the protagonist, everyone's thoughts and cognitions will also change, and all disputes can be resolved with the corresponding extraordinary rules. At present, the main line of this article is to solve the problem of integrating some isolated islands into the mortal world, that is, to clear the level [isolated island] like a "player"

I just said a few days ago that I would resume updating, and then I started doing it for a week, 6