Shrouding the Heavens: The Primordial Origin of the Myriad Worlds

I've read it, I don't like it, the plot is a bit toxic

Why didn't the Tower of the Universe appear, nor did it go through the tribulation with the protagonist?

The look and feel of this white snake is very poor, with too much description Thunder is so scary, fire is so scary, lizards are so scary, wherever there is a bad guy, I am still scared The protagonist's parents in this life did not have so many emotional descriptions, but they appeared in a snake, and this snake is also very feminine br> Reminds me of the past when such squeaky spirit beasts and systems all crawled onto the protagonist's bed. It was very abnormal Then the protagonist looked doted on and distressed How long have you known each other? There are so many spirit beasts and spiritual pets in Kunlun, so it's not all survival of the fittest The protagonist feels distressed just now, giving me the look of a little fairy who sees Hakimi being chased by a dog, then beats the dog, and hugs Hakimi to comfort him The protagonist of Tang Zichen's Chinese martial arts in Dragon Snake can't find a way forward, and I don't see any emotion in the protagonist, or how he feels distressed Think about how Dou Po Cang Qiong is The person who writes "Colorful Sky-Swallowing Python" is not Medusa, but the colorful Sky-Swallowing Python Cute, good-looking, capable of fighting, and then stupid, stupid, easy to fool, and greedy It seems to have many shortcomings, but in fact these shortcomings are all beneficial to the protagonist Xiao Yan The most important thing is Shenyin! It doesn't take up the plot, doesn't steal the scene, just get into Xiao Yan's sleeve and fall asleep You probably want to write about this white snake that it is familiar with the location and help find opportunities, but the real local snake in Kunlun is the elf Polygonum multiflorum, and he is the local snake in Kunlun If you insist on writing about a snake, you can also write that it is a spiritual snake, the protagonist helps, and then repays the protagonist's favor and mentions it. Tell the protagonist that it's all done after a few words. The point is that you shouldn't say yes. Once you say yes, it won't be a pet Then you may want to think about the blood of the Bas snake and how powerful it is But for the protagonist, there is no difference at all between raising a Hakimi and a Bas snake It's like Fang Han raising the entire Yuhuamen, they are all waste. What's the difference? In the end, I am not interested in you snake at all, because what I see is the astronomy, the various worlds, and the changes and collisions of the characters in the heavens Do you think it is more interesting for Tang Zichen to come to Zhetian, or for an original snake to be cute here? Of course I am not telling you to write Tang Zichen to Zhetian, but I want to tell you to distinguish the priorities Don't create original characters that do not exist in the fandom There are enough charming characters in Zhu Tianwen for you to use. It is enough to write about their collision and the changes they have undergone due to the appearance of the protagonist Just like this snake, if you replace it with the ten thousand-year-old Polygonum multiflorum that has become a spirit, will there be a difference? There will be no difference, it will just be less of your original plots I think it would be better if it was less, because the look and feel of this snake is really not good

You are a brainless person. You know that there are a lot of trash among Ye Fan's classmates with evil intentions, but you still meddle in other people's business. Moreover, you are not prepared at all when you arrive at the ancient forbidden land, so you come to Beidou in such an open and honest manner. Don't you ever think that others will reveal your details? There is no such thing in the original work. It was after a wave of purges. The remaining dozen or so people were not too good in nature, at least they were decent. Anyone who has read the original work knows what kind of stuff the rest are. A visitor from a foreign land, not to say crazy, but at least not let go of any Holy Land aristocratic family, is an ant. With the initiative in his own hands, he makes no preparations and just entrusts his life and death to some rubbish thoughts. It is so stupid that it makes people sick!

I was speechless at the beginning. The protagonist had already been to the high-end world view of Galaxy Emperor, but when I went to Dragon Snake Romance, I was shocked by the basic martial arts in it, especially since the protagonist practiced a higher level of martial arts than Dragon Snake Romance. My mind is filled with questions.

The plot about going to Kunlun should really be discouraged. I'm not saying that going to Kunlun is bad, but that going to Kunlun without properly handling social relations is bad. Especially before I went there, I reported to my family and school that I had been missing for three years. In the past few months, I had called the police to search the mountain to find him. But when I checked, guess what, he flew over. The relationship with my parents was written well in the previous article, but in the past three years I was too lazy to go down the mountain several times to make up excuses to deal with my parents, and I felt sorry that my parents had become haggard. I think the protagonist's parents are not as good as that snake in the eyes of the protagonist! Can I die if I confess to my parents before going to Kunlun? In the end, it took three years for my parents to grieve more than to confess my grief. The only difference was that my parents would be sad for a few more years. I'm a real enemy.

I can barely accept it before, but how can I reach the Tao Palace at the peak of Dragon Transformation? It takes more than half a chapter to eliminate a Tao Palace. Things that can be wiped out with a slap of the hand, or things that can be done in a second or two, will ruin most of the plot.

I don't want to read it when I see the realm setting. Only the heaven-defying level corresponds to the saint who covers the human realm?

I remember that last month there was also a book written in Zhetianli about the story of dragon and snake (the beginning of Zhetian Demon Prison Xuantong Jing). That 60-page book was simply a masterpiece. Unfortunately, I don't know if I bought it or if the author changed it, so it collapsed. The author recommends you read the first 60 chapters of this book. It's free anyway and doesn't cost any money.

Some water has too many gorgeous words. The protagonist's character is also too selfish, which even Tang San cannot compare to. In the dungeon world, you are still a human except when you enter the dragon and snake world, and the essence of other worlds is exposed. For example, in the previous Hong Yi, the past Amitabha Sutra was given, and the next moment the protagonist went to find the Present Tathagata Sutra, the Future No Life Sutra, and the Other Shore Sutra. After reading it, he didn't even leave a copy to Hong Yi. He also said that he had a personal connection and didn't want to get involved in Hong Yi's affairs. And the protagonist's contribution is just explained and enlightened casually.

Don't write the plot of the Urban Dragon King like the book "Devil's Prison"

The author has strengthened the God's Tomb. The only strong thing in the God's Tomb is immortality. You can live with a little spiritual consciousness. This aspect is indeed good. However, in terms of combat power, the Heavenly Way in the God's Tomb will not exceed the performance of the Great Sage of Shrouded Heaven. Some people talk about traveling through time and space. At most, it is just the characteristics of the world. Can the time-traveling God's Tomb be compared with the silly girl on the magic mobile phone? Silly girl can travel through time and space easily, but in the Tomb of Gods, it takes a big guy to do it, and you can't just travel through time and space easily. According to some people's logic, Silly Girl on the Magic Phone should be able to casually blow up the Tomb of Gods to the heaven-defying level. I just want to ask if the people who are talking about Tomb of Gods agree with this logic?

After catching up on the latest chapter, I feel that there are two things that make people complain First, as a time traveler, doesn't the protagonist know how difficult it is to make something out of nothing? Except for the protagonist who has been practicing concepts that do not involve energy for a period of time in the galaxy, Dragon Snake and Zhe Tian are both places at the end of the law. So why does the protagonist feel that he can make something out of nothing when he returns from Dragon Snake to Zhe Tian? Without replenishing energy, doesn't refining Qi consume its own origin? Second, since we are thinking about developing towards the Yuanshi Tianzun who will renew everything in one yuan, why is the natal weapon a clock? The most famous spiritual treasures of Yuanshi Tianzun should be the Pangu flag (axe) that protects Taoism, the three treasures jade Ruyi and Hunyuan (millet) beads that symbolize status, right? Is it true that Dao pictures are more in line with the divine will of the One Yuan, the beginning, and the renewal of all things than the clock? Isn't that vision of yours the best interpretation of the restoration of one yuan and the renewal of all things? All the gods worship the Yuanshi Tianzun, and if they are put into the human body, they will be the mortal gods (the gods of the body and the aperture) worshiping the Yuanshen It is recommended that Shimen find an energy stone in the galaxy or dragon and snake, or use magic medicine on Kunlun to replenish the origin The protagonist of the natal weapon proves that Hongchenxian has nine or even ten lives, so he can refine a few more natal weapons later.

Hualong Perfection and a group of fourth-level Taoist friends were judged by passers-by for chasing the Holy Son level. Is it funny? Hualong chasing after the fourth level is poisonous, poisonous, and extremely poisonous.

Go to Dragon Snake? Then the combat power is not easy to suppress. After practicing for a few years, Dragon Snake will achieve impressive results. If he returns to Zhetian, he will be able to achieve saint-level combat power at worst. This type of world also has the Legend of Two Dragons of the Tang Dynasty. Once the void is shattered, you can directly fight the emperor when you return to Zhetian.

It was written too seriously. I don't know if I thought it was aboriginal. Please delete the settings of your time traveler. According to the way you write it, the plot development is the same whether you know the plot or not. If you know the plot points, but they are not reflected in the pig's feet at all, the writing is no different from the aborigines. And you added the setting of a time traveler, which is superfluous and just looks awkward. Why do you say that you wrote it too seriously? Because you just treat the pig's feet as a "local" and the character is too retro. There is an obvious sense of distance in the communication between the characters. The respectful words such as seniors, asking for advice, etc. All give people a sense of distance and alienation. What makes you serious is that this sense of distance not only exists in the book, I also feel it. I feel like I am watching a documentary. The skin of today's people, the habits of ancient people. The communication methods, tone, and emotions of the characters in the book are pure formulas, soulless, and seem very false. I mean, do you write well? Or is it that your writing is poisonous?

I don't understand, why are there a bunch of people playing God's Tomb down there? Anyone who has read the original work knows that the worldview of God's Tomb itself is not that great. If nothing else, I don't know if there is infinity in the entire worldview. Anyway, I have not seen the signs of infinity. The performance below is one after another. It can be said that if the goddess's performance is simple, can he pass the Tianzun level of the Holy Ruins first? That is to say, the great sage who covers the sky, Taiwu Tianzun, has the performance of clearly penetrating into the small underworld universe of infinite light years. Should some people wake up? I, the author, have given me a lot of respect. In terms of actual strength, is it okay for a certain worldview to be able to fight the Great Sage first, and then fight with others?

I subscribed to QReading. Come here and complain. I beat a Crocodile Ancestor from Chapter 355 to Chapter 366. It was so hot that it exploded.

Yaochi doesn't care about the innate Tao fetus at all, right? Zixia is also an innate Taoist fetus. Do you think Yaochi has dealt with her?

The writing style has the feel of a novice's routine writing ten years ago, stiff, awkward and dry.

Can you change the main character's idea of ​​pimping? I've been bothered by it all the time. I can't stand the rest of it anymore. It looked good at first and suddenly it gave me a hard blow 😐

After it was put on the shelf, it was a little high-spirited and not as peaceful as before. Moreover, I felt like a genius when I wrote it before it was put on the shelves. Once it was put on the shelves, I felt like the second emperor.

Can you use less adjectives in each chapter? Since entering Yaochi, most of every picture describes the main character. These and other compliments are all used to describe it. Even the main character has to be criticized by a bunch of words when he walks. Li Qingshan is dressed in black clothes. His expression is calm, his steps are steady, and his direction is clear. It is really simple. There are also all kinds of adjectives for the main character to do whatever he wants. Most of the chapters are not mentioned, but half of them are like this. It is really embarrassing and a waste of subscription.

After the protagonist becomes emperor, he feels that his combat power is not as good as that of Ye Fan.

The protagonist can gain a lot from the small world of Tomb of Gods, such as a complete set of rules for a complete small world. After all, although the sparrow is small, it has all the internal organs. A complete small world, no matter how small it is, still has anatomical research value. The rules of the world contained in the Tianxin Seal of the Zhetian Universe are too many and too profound. The lifespans of the Zhetian Emperors are so short that they have no time to comprehend them. But when the protagonist comes to the world of God's Tomb, he can capture the "Tiandao" of Lao Shizi and slice it up for study. I think he will definitely gain a lot of rewards, and the probability is no worse than harvesting a source of Tao on the ancient road of the Zhetian Human Race. The second thing is that "although a sparrow is small, it has all its internal organs." Judging from Chen Dong's description, although the small world of "The Tomb of Gods" is very small, Chu State, with a radius of several thousand miles, occupies at least one-sixth of the land area of ​​the human world, one of the six realms. Chu State is one of the superpowers in the literal sense of the human world. It can be said that there is no comparison with any of the eight lower realms in "Perfect World" with a radius of tens of millions of miles. But please note that the small world of "God's Tomb" has immortality. Judging from the pitiful size of the small world of God's Tomb, saying that it is "a sparrow is small but has all the internal organs" is an overestimation. It should be "a wheat bird is small but has all the internal organs." The existence of the immortal substance has caused some monks who are not very strong to have tenacious vitality. They are extremely tenacious and can live for a long, long time. The immortal substance is a good thing. Let the protagonist come to this world to absorb more of it and accumulate it into immortal essence in the body. After returning to the Zhetian Universe in the future, it can help the protagonist live out his second life. In addition, I would like to remind the author that in "Tomb of the Gods", there is a saying that the way of heaven will destroy the world approximately once every ten thousand years. For the indigenous creatures in the small world of "Tomb of the Gods", in ten thousand years, even the top talents of the new generation will reach the ninth level of the Divine Emperor, such as the one called "Eastern" or something. Only reincarnations of indigenous geniuses like Chen Nan can cultivate to the heavenly level within ten thousand years, and then survive the destruction of the world by the way of heaven, and steal the creation of the world after the destruction of the world by the way of heaven. So for the way of heaven, it is said that the harvest is about once every ten thousand years. If the harvest is too late, the newly born geniuses within ten thousand years will break through to the heaven level, and then there will be a few more sky-stealers; and if the harvest is too long, then the crops within ten thousand years will not grow well, and the number of newly born god kings and emperors will be too small, and they will not be able to eat enough. There is a saying that there is an average destruction of one world every ten thousand years, which is the golden sweet spot of heaven.

Hit a bunch of old, weak and disabled people, but you can't push them aside. Use various adjectives to describe these old and weak people as invincible in the world.

It's written in an old-fashioned way and is a bunch of nonsense. I really don't have the patience to read it.

"Thirty meters deep under the sea, the light has become dim and blurry, and the huge water pressure is everywhere, which is enough to easily crush the internal organs of ordinary people." How about checking how many meters a normal person can dive with a little training, and then checking how many meters the world record is. It's embarrassing to dive 30 meters after practicing solo, and still blowing hard here.

Practicing and asking questions is essentially to hide from God's will, avoid cause and effect, and break away from the world of mortals. Jumping out of the Five Elements, free and easy, not bound by heaven and earth, untainted by cause and effect, the protagonist has so many worries, as long as the villain acts normally, he can be killed 😥

I'm sorry I didn't buy it. It smelled like AI after it was put on the shelves.