It's Just the Sims, Why Is It Turned into White Moonlight?

At 12 o'clock, the follow-up reading has not exceeded 100, and the monthly subscription has not exceeded 1,000 at the end of the month. It is hard to imagine that this work has been soaring 2 or 3 months ago, with monthly subscriptions exceeding 10,000, and famous memes from the industry continue to help When it is about 300 chapters, if this book is written by a novice online writer, he can write better than now.

The pace is really slow. How long does it take in reality? When there are too many emotional informants, it is easy to scatter the story, with a hammer here and there. When I read other novels with multiple female protagonists, they all focus on writing one female protagonist first, and then move on to the next one after the characters' emotions are pushed out. Finally, they are all finished, and then they interact with each other. You were fine in the early stage, but later on everyone wanted to write about it, and it took a long time to write and everyone got mixed up. I see that almost every simulation you make is separated by 2 or 30 chapters. I guess Lu Yuqing's next appearance will be dozens of chapters later. So do you want to write about Su Yutang or Lu Yuqing? Or the first three heroines? To be honest, I feel that Lin Cai has not finished writing it in one breath, and he can't take care of it later. Perhaps even before I saw the in-depth exchange, my impression was shattered by the addition of the two new heroines. If you really want to write, you should write one by one. Even if it is not a volume with one heroine, you must have a focus. Otherwise, if you write about one thing, several people will write dozens of pages together without knowing what they are writing about. I read a previous comment saying that there is no progress in career. Not only has the author's career line been spread out, but his emotional line has also been scattered. This is really not good. I hope the author will work hard🙂

Young people don't know what it's like to be sad, so they forcefully describe it in order to compose new lyrics.

It's pretty good. Why are there no comments? Netizens speak so nicely. It looks even better if there are comments.

Faster, faster, better, I love watching Xiao Chunan, it's so sweet

Think of a way to save it. I also subscribed and voted monthly to read it. Objectively speaking, the early writing is still very good. The male protagonist's initial complaints about changing himself, and the pulling and Shura field with several female protagonists are quite interesting to watch, but as the plot progresses, the problems are more exposed. First of all, in harem novels, especially urban harem novels, it is a test of the author's writing ability to accept all the orders. If the male protagonist does not establish a relationship in the early stage, it is okay to try to have both sides. There are obviously heroines who are more than ambiguous relationships, but they still adhere to the attitude of not taking the initiative, not being responsible, and just enjoying themselves. Isn't this just a scumbag? Secondly, there are too many new female supporting characters. You can't always add someone when the plot becomes too much. Some female supporting characters can't play a key role and should be deleted. Don't add more water to the noodles, add more noodles to the water. In the end, I don't know when the woman had too much interaction with the male protagonist (named the female owner of the coffee shop) In the end, I just hope that this book can be ended safely.

You have changed. In the past, four chapters have been changed to three chapters. Now there are only 2 chapters. Who can read it? No, I will only give you 2 chapters in the future with a monthly pass.

If you have these three things, not to mention the harem, it will be given to you by the stallion. I read it with the unlimited reading coupon in June. It was pretty good to read it all at once. The free book was readable and even good. At that time, it might be a bit painful to follow up and pay for it. I basically collected the last 150 chapters

Love stories still have to be written by a virgin.

I want to know which one, the protagonist or the author, breaks Chu first 🙂

The book is actually not that bad, but it is too poisonous. Needless to say, the male protagonist is not an ordinary coward, he is an extraordinary coward. I have been working at a seemingly dead-end job for several years. I often work overtime, don't play games or socialize, but I have always had a good relationship with my friends. I can barely afford to eat and have to send money to my parents every month. My bones are softer than Dalits in India... Apart from the disgusting character of the male protagonist, the love story written by the virgin author still has some merits; the imagination is average; the harem plot is not discussed; most trivial matters about money are written out of touch with real prices. Generally speaking, it is a medium-high grade grain and grass.

Provincial review

Copying the previous book review, it feels so insightful. The author will often give some sweet treats, hold hands, hug and kiss. But once the incident has passed and you look back the next day, you will find that those things never happened. You don't see much progress. It's like a unit drama rather than a series.

A summary of the core points of the novel 1. The male protagonist has double standards and duplicity, and the sense of separation in the character is full: the male protagonist uses the excuse of "having already had an affair with Lin Jiang and Cai, and does not want to involve more beautiful women" to dislike and deliberately avoid Xu Wenxi and Yu Nuan (primary school girls) who take the initiative; his attitude is extremely determined; but in the face of Su Yitang always had double standards. He said he didn't want to get too involved with her, but he took the initiative to get close to her. Not only did he accept the low-priced house rented by Su Yitang in a prime location with peace of mind (even though he knew there was something fishy but he still pretended to be confused), he also became her neighbor, brought her meals every day, ate with her when commuting, escorted her home, and fully accepted all Su Yitang's good intentions. This self-contradictory excuse of "accepting Su Yitang's kindness ≠ approaching a beautiful woman" not only highlights the scumbag feeling of the male protagonist, but also has no logic at all, and the character design is completely untenable. ​ 2. Su Yitang's character design is broken, and the length and charm are seriously imbalanced: As the core heroine who is comparable to Lin Jiang and Cai Tan, Su Yitang's frigid character design makes it difficult to advance the emotional line. However, the author did not do a good job in shaping the character and wasted a lot of space. First, there is a serious lack of motivation and foreshadowing. When Lin Jiang and Cai Tan appeared on the scene, they explained their past encounter experiences and psychological descriptions of their affection for the male protagonist. However, Su Yitang suddenly preferred the male protagonist from the moment he appeared, with no motive and no psychological support. It was not until more than 200 chapters into the appearance that the reasons for his affection were completed in the past timeline. The whole early stage relied on "mysterious three attributes" to support the show, without any in-depth traits or aura, and the charm was not even as good as Xu Wenxi's, leaving the readers with no sense of expectation. Secondly, the large-scale descriptions were all without water plot. Even if the character hook was added in the later stage, the character failed to stand up, and instead appeared to have a weak and redundant sense of existence. ​ 3. The plot is seriously procrastinated, off-putting and has a very poor viewing experience: First, the treatment line for Lu Qingyu's disfigurement is laid out in more than 340 chapters, and the treatment is not promoted until more than 450 chapters. The plot only lasts for more than ten days, but it is full of more than 100 chapters (nearly a month and a half), especially the decision to help Lu Qing After the words are spoken, a large part of the plot revolves around the ineffective interaction between the male protagonist and Su Yitang. The small climax that the readers were expecting not only came late, but also left no sense of satisfaction after landing. Moreover, the male protagonist and Su Yitang repeatedly performed the daily cycle of "work-eating-dinner party" with nothing new, which not only wore down the readers' patience, but also lowered Su Yitang's popularity among the public. Second, the overall harem line is lagging. Except for Lin Jiang and Cai Tan, the relationship progress of the other female protagonists is in stagnation. Even the favorability level is reset after the relationship seems to have broken through, without any substantial progress; at the same time, characters such as Yu Nuan and Lu Wantong are constantly added, further diluting the main plot. ​ 4. The character creation is very different, and the author's approach is blunt and perfunctory: Lin Jiang and Cai Tan's characters are eye-catching and likable, Xu Wenxi and Lu Qingyu are also passable, but the core heroine Su Yitang has neither a reasonable motive for affection nor the charm of the core character. She should have perfected the character and setting as soon as possible after her appearance, but the character hook was buried for more than 200 chapters before it was revealed. The author most likely had no way of writing about the emotional line of the cold-blooded character, so he made the male protagonist take the initiative to "lick" Su Yitang to close the distance. For passionate female protagonists like Xu Wenxi, he used cold treatment to slow down the progress. The technique was both blunt and perfunctory. What's more, they turned a blind eye to the hydrological issues that readers complained about. Su Yitang's hook was buried in more than 200 chapters, and the climax of Lu Qingyu's treatment was delayed for more than 100 chapters. The procrastination problem is serious, and the monthly ticket continues to decline. It is also expected.

You can like it very much, and it is rare that the main character is not a gangster in high school. I don't know why these days, these reborn people are all gangsters. This kind of people annoyed me the most when I was in school.

First of all, the author is very young, and the workplace he imagined is both harsh and gentle, and he needs to gain more experience. Secondly, the writing is good, with the fluency and exquisite diction of the peak high school period. Again, there is a lot of pressure to study, and the description of the pressure is amazing. Finally, watch less Japanese anime and literature. The characters' Japanese sense of death is very focused on describing them. Maybe they think it's cool, but Chinese people live hard in their bones, which makes your character's personality conflict very much. With a faint mood of death, he shakes his fist at fate, makes the cry that youth should have, and then shrinks back into a hole like a bug. What do you think is the charm of such a character? If you read less Japanese death studies, your works will reach a higher level. Or, if it's a purely Japanese line, change it to say that I was just passing by casually, and you all rushed towards me and died at my feet, but I continued to pass by half-dead without any trouble.

Good news, it's on fire. The bad news is that the author is popular.

A good deck of cards is played badly, and it is you who is talking about you. You are fragile and sensitive. The protagonist you write also has the same virtues as you. It is a double standard to the extreme. I even only saw Chapter 388 and couldn't stand it for a long time. It's useless to say more. In one sentence, I don't recommend it at all. I would also recommend "Love in Cthulhu" from the same period, as well as a free 600,000-word novel "The Wish to Exorcise Immortals", or "No One Understands Monsters Better than Me"

You can add some supporting roles appropriately, for example, arrange for a male supporting character to pursue the female protagonist. The female protagonist is attracted by it, but she cruelly rejects the male supporting role because she loves the protagonist even more. A romantic light novel is incomplete without a supporting male character, nor can one understand the struggle in the heroine's heart. After all, it only becomes more precious when compared.

Damn little chef man, why don't you write a novel if you are so good at fantasizing?

I forgot the front, the middle, and the back. Oh, author, you are really famous 😄

Has the author ever been a virgin? Some things are written randomly, I take it for granted Hey, the author is really, then it's okay

It turned out to be just a beautiful fantasy of the little chef man

Today I saw a video using references in the comment area as a cover 🙂 I posted this book under that video, did I do the right thing 🙂🙂🙂

Looking at my rising fan ranking, I know that your following is constantly falling. Author, don't you think about it? Your spinning plot is constantly eroding readers' expectations, your grades are getting worse and worse, and you don't listen to readers' feedback. It's just water. If I still have the same virtue after chasing this month, I will have no choice but to give up and continue chasing.

Seeing that the monthly ticket ranking is getting lower and lower, I know that the next one is still the same as the previous one.

The protagonist has many shortcomings and is a bit sad, but he has a strong sense of empathy, excellent psychological description, regrets and regrets, and the delicate writing style makes the protagonist come alive.

(1) The author simply does not have the ability to create multiple female protagonists, and as a result, multiple female protagonists are continuously introduced in the middle period. After making out, one heroine switches to the next, and then the previous heroine doesn't react at all. Then, many female protagonists don't have any appearances. It's very obvious. When they appear, they write a small plot, and then they can't appear for a long time. (2) The male protagonist also has no sense of responsibility at all. The female protagonist kissed her anyway, but in the end he didn't think about the relationship between the two at all. He just moved on to the next one and continued the ambiguous relationship. He also didn't think about the relationship between the two going further, and he had no sense of responsibility.

It's so long-winded, could you please refer to the rhythm of Small World ten years ago? The protagonist is full of negative energy, and the writing is unreasonable and long-winded.

If you settle down for a while, it's better than AI writing.