High Martial: In the Name of Will

You set up a formidable enemy in Chapter 50. The key is that when you are at your most vulnerable, you look very strong, hard, and have a sense of justice, but you think others can allow you to continue to develop. Talent is not equal to strength. No strength, no background, no money, but you can still be tough. It is not clear how much background the family of a martyr can count. Even if it is a big family, this family has no bottom line. Others cannot kill you regardless of everything.

So far, overall it's okay, it just depends on whether it can be maintained in the future.

So far, it seems to be a good write-up, and I hope to keep it up.

I finished reading it before I knew it. The author will update soon.

There are three main problems at the moment 1. It's too verbose. Some things that obviously only need one or two sentences to explain are a lot of long words. For example, the house selling agent above only needs two or three sentences to complain about it. I insist on writing at least six to seven hundred words. As a martial arts style, I can only explain a little about martial arts. The focus is on martial arts related content. , And even if it is related to martial arts, you need to refine the sentences, otherwise it will be difficult to read; 2. Some settings are counter-intuitive and awkward. The first one is the level setting of the product. In recent years, the level setting of most books is a>b>c. You have to do it the other way around. It is completely unnecessary for you to withdraw similar product upgrades. With a setting like abcd, it is actually more appropriate to directly use one, two, and three generations; The second one is the gravity multiplier. Generally, people calculate the multiplier based on multiplication, such as 1*11*2 1*3. One time is the normal unchanging gravity, and 2 times is double the normal gravity. So you have 1 times + 1 = 2, and 2 times + 2 = 3. This is obviously counter-intuitive and unreasonable; 1 2. The two points are that the continuous stacking of poisonous points can easily lead to an awkward reading and an inability to follow. The third point is the core issue; 3. The third issue is about the shaping of the protagonist and the development of the world view. Generally speaking, the first three chapters must focus on the main character. Focus on describing and portraying the character's personality, environment, goals, general background of the world, family environment, and current situation to enhance the sense of involvement. You basically mention these in one sentence at the beginning, and then start working on it. The protagonist has not even been established, and the sense of immersion is basically gone. Moreover, the subsequent dozens of chapters generally need to strengthen the portrayal of the protagonist's character, environment, and goal pursuit, especially the goal. It is necessary to set a plot around the goal that motivates the protagonist and establishes the goal to strengthen the obsession, tell the readers why the protagonist acts, what goal he wants to achieve, increase the driving force, and constantly strengthen the protagonist's goal obsession to become stronger. However, in the subsequent dozens of chapters, there is no relevant specific further shaping and characterization, and there is not much further in-depth development of the worldview. The creation of a 50-year-old enemy is also very brainless. Overall, the sense of immersion is insufficient, the image of the protagonist is not profound, and the world view is not fully developed.

It's very well written, full of passion, blood, and justice. I think it's quite interesting to read, so I'll give it a try.

It has the potential to become a high-quality product, so you should invest in it. I don't know if the author can stick to it. If the early stage is too extensive, the force will be out of touch in the later stage.

Make a good outline. Don't think about it as soon as it comes out. Without an outline, you won't be able to write long-term. I hope to write 3 million words.

The writing is good and the fighting scenes are exciting, but there are too few.

It's really good to watch, but I don't know why, it feels a bit like watching a gunfight textbook. When I read it, I always felt like, oh oh oh, it turns out that the gun fight is like this, the gun fight is written like this, and the gun intention is expressed like this... Maybe it's because I'm too novice? By analogy, it's like reading "Tomb Raiders Notes" and "Gui Chuu Deng". Reading "Tomb Raiders Notes" feels like an adventure novel, while "Gui Chuo Deng" feels like a popular science book. When I read it, I always felt that knowledge entered my brain in a wonderful way, but my emotions were not aroused. I think this may be the reason, so no one commented... It's just my personal thoughts, and may not have reference value.